Thoughts...
The Good: In-game music. Also, I like that the dev gives a shit about having meaningful dialogue and storylines; execution on the other hand...well it needs work.
The Bad: Inconsistent dialogue. It feels unnecessarily long sometimes. In fact, the entire introduction prior to and including showing the family is WAY TOO long. We can learn about the characters as the story progresses; every character doesn't need their own slideshow. Also, word choice isn't always appropriate. There's a lot of switching between normal and crude dialogue which doesn't help with the flow. Grammar and punctuation, although not the biggest flaws, need to be improved. There's poor transition between story events; it feels convoluted and jumbled.
Other things:
-If you saw your wife fucking your best friend, why would you go to a bar before confronting them?
-Facial expression-Book.....really?
-So I counted all the Ts, and nothing happened... -_-
-The ratio of dialogue to moving images and/or animations is not great.
-While describing the older sister (....."she was older and prettier than me"...) Bro why would you use that description?
-The mom's head looks 3 sizes smaller than the rest of her body. And given that she should be the hottest female character in this game, it's sad doesn't have the greatest of faces either.
-If the game is from your perspective, how come the doctor (Edwards) is given a name before you're introduced? Also, the dialogue screen should say "Dr. Edwards". These little details add up.
-If he's 18 when he wakes up, would he really call a man (who's so very OBVIOUSLY his doctor) Santa Claus? Heck even if he's 14, he wouldn't have said that.
-I might be getting this wrong but I thought he was 11 when he got hit by the car. How does a 4 year coma lead to him being 18?
-I find it funny that the cursor has been modified but legitimately nothing else in Renpy has been customized. Why focus on the smallest thing when there are so many larger ways to improve the in-game experience?
-If he's healthy, and is mentally sound, why wouldn't he return to the States after waking up? You're telling me he had to live on the other side of the world just to rehab. He couldn't learn to walk and catch up on studies in the States?
Given all these reasons, the supernatural stuff just doesn't have my attention. There's A LOT of work to do. Good luck Dev
