I mean it's your game you can do whatever you want but damn shame and wasted potential
- Thread starter Arisushi
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- Jul 21, 2021
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uuf this game has so much potential you knowI mean it's your game you can do whatever you want but damn shame and wasted potential
Is this the game for us who just love endless (as in 24h late) Indian train journeys?
He really needs a big Pakistani cock in his ass.
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- Jan 7, 2022
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Let's say this... there's NOTHING in the OP that creates any interest in the story. If this was a book blurb in a book on discount at the bookstore, I wouldn't pick it.
I'm sorry, I have been burned enough times in this site with "hidden" stories that turned out to be awful, or simply too basic. This one promises "something" but is too vague, too "hidden", too mysterious. The tags, or should I say, the tags that aren't there, don't help. The ones that are, help even less.
Don't get me wrong, this could be the next love of my life, but I wouldn't know, because it's under so many layers of vagueness that I can't feel anything towards it. If it is a passion project, maybe let some of that passion shine through? All I get is vague references of "something" happening...
Peace
I'm sorry, I have been burned enough times in this site with "hidden" stories that turned out to be awful, or simply too basic. This one promises "something" but is too vague, too "hidden", too mysterious. The tags, or should I say, the tags that aren't there, don't help. The ones that are, help even less.
Don't get me wrong, this could be the next love of my life, but I wouldn't know, because it's under so many layers of vagueness that I can't feel anything towards it. If it is a passion project, maybe let some of that passion shine through? All I get is vague references of "something" happening...
Peace
- Jul 9, 2020
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Thanks for the feedback.Let's say this... there's NOTHING in the OP that creates any interest in the story. If this was a book blurb in a book on discount at the bookstore, I wouldn't pick it.
I'm sorry, I have been burned enough times in this site with "hidden" stories that turned out to be awful, or simply too basic. This one promises "something" but is too vague, too "hidden", too mysterious. The tags, or should I say, the tags that aren't there, don't help. The ones that are, help even less.
Don't get me wrong, this could be the next love of my life, but I wouldn't know, because it's under so many layers of vagueness that I can't feel anything towards it. If it is a passion project, maybe let some of that passion shine through? All I get is vague references of "something" happening...
Peace
Yeah, I understand I shot myself in the foot with that description.
I really wanted the players to experience the same shock/surprise one of the lead character feels during the first big reveal of the story. So, I purposely left the op vague.
I'll see if I can think of a way I can make the description without compromising on that experience.