+1 to the art style, the art is really good, but it’s hard to judge the story at this point. There’s so little content that it doesn’t even feel like a demo—basically everyone just gives a self-introduction and sets up the beginning, and then it ends. Maybe we’ll have to wait a few more months to see how it develops.
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Thanks for giving it a try! Just to check though—did you get a chance to play the NTS route? That path has the bulk of the current content. If you only went through the intro route, it might feel more like a demo since it ends pretty quickly. The NTS path shows more of where the story’s heading.
The art style is very similar to Blurring the Walls, I love it so much, I like this kind of thing, give the author a thumbs up
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I just felt that the story progressed too fast. I didn't expect them to be naked so soon.
Maybe the NTR path is different?
Maybe the NTR path is different?
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I'm just glad it's not the exasperating wait to see barely a tit after two hours of gameplay that we get in many games.
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I was hoping honestly there'd be more work done on the NTR path than this. Meh, I can wait, feels like I was just NTR'd having to wait for it though. lol
Although I agree with your approach, I also don't like games that always brush the edges of the plot, but at least the story should develop linearly, rather than having an unreasonable plot location without any plot preparation, such as a nude beach. If the game has 7 days, this should not be the first day of the plot, at least it should be the third day. If the female nudity is too fast, there will be no NTS experience. Women accept nudity too quickly, at least starting with bikini swimsuits?
I even think that on the first day of swimsuits and bikinis, organizing a sincere/adventurous drinking party on the second night, where the adventure involves undressing and the protagonist's perspective chooses a girlfriend to gradually undress, is a more reasonable linear plot development and provides a better foundation for the game~
I just feel a bit regretful, but the game is only the first day of one path, right? There are 6 days worth looking forward to in the future, but the NTS path is a bit disappointing. However, the painting style is very attractive, and I really like it. Keep up the good work!
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Agree, the NTS path is very disappointing in most games that try NTS. Especially if it feels like the NTS is getting jumped into too fast in which this one definitely gives off an air that the characters are already too loose with their morals and were already more than ready and willing to be adventurous like they've already done it all before and we're just starting the story off in the middle.
One thing to fix that would be to rework the entire beginning NTS route from scratch. MC's friend & MC's friends girlfriend were immediately way too ready to just toss their clothes off in front of the MC & his girlfriend. It makes the previous scene feel less impactful to have been an accident where MC's friend accidentally exposed himself to his girlfriend.
I loved the art style, do you use hand-drawn sketches? The poses are really good and consistent.
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Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it! I totally get that some people feel the pace is a bit quick, but that was actually a conscious choice on my part. With the story only spanning 7 days, I wanted something early on that shakes things up and sets the tone. The nudist resort twist does that — it’s fast and shocking, but it also works as a way to break the ice between the characters.
Being nude doesn’t automatically mean sex is happening right away, it just creates an environment where the characters are forced to confront their own comfort levels. Izzy and Nick are the first to embrace it because of their personalities, while Kai and Yumi are much more hesitant — which is exactly what sparks their conversations and gradual growth. The nudity is there to speed up the tension and get people talking/feeling conflicted, not to skip over the slow-burn elements.
If I had waited until day 4 or 5 for that kind of development, people would just as easily say it’s being dragged out or “milked”. This way, the resort twist puts the characters in a unique situation right away, and the rest of the days can build naturally off that.
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First of all what I'm about to say are my own opinions so take it with a grain of salt, in the end my point of view when it comes to game development and the game developers is that I very much prefer game devs to create the games that they wanted to create regardless of whether feedback was positive or negative. Just clearing this up right away.
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The pace is definitely too fast I feel. That really is the biggest underlying problem and flaw that I've seen. A nude beach plot device doesn't change this, it doesn't make the characters immediately comfortable with each other or at least it realistically shouldn't. With a seven days time limit the only thing I can see is a handjob being the most likely thing to happen and a blowjob at the least likely rarest.
The issue is mostly due to the idea that suggests that these characters, Yumi with Izzy and Nick, are almost complete unknowns to her. I would suggest revisiting this and get the comfort formalities sorted out before they all go to the nudist beach resort vacation. For example, you could have the couples go on a double date to "break the ice", Izzy and Yumi could go shopping for bikini's etc. This gives the characters time to get to know each other so that the audience (us) can understand and get a feel for the vibe they have with getting along with each other. How they interact and have a sense of cohesion with each other is somewhat important.
Another issue which remains to be seen in your works so far cause it's still so early I have no idea what your views of what Netorase is, but I'll say this much anyways just in case.
Most attempts at depicting Netorase in these games don't work. Mostly and primarily because the Dev has a minimal or very loose comprehension/ understanding of what Netorase is. Most devs seem to think Netorase is just couples swinging, and while that's kind of accurate, it's not the most direct definition of what Netorase is. Swinging/ Sharing is just what comes closest to what defines Netorase, but it's not a direct Japanese understanding of what Netorase is. Netorase is best depicted from the perspective of the siginificant other being stolen (in this case, that'd be Yumi I assume?), so the story in the NTS path would be taken over and depicted from Yumi's point of view and told to us audience as if it's a story that she is telling us, as Netorase is basically Netorare but it's from her perspective. Whether or not MC is a daft dense and clueless idiot or MC is clued in on the cheating and gets his rocks off on it is entirely up to the Devs creative choice on the matter.
If you were to include a Netori path, then the story would simply change to be from the perspective of Nick. Netorare would be from the perspective of MC. Netorase is generally best depicted from the perspective of the one being stolen (Yumi).
If you were going solely for a Swinging/ Sharing perspective on the story, I'd recommend just changing the tag from Netorase to Swinging I believe that the website finally fixed that issue and included them as tags for devs to put up.
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Now that I've reached the end of my critique, allow me to at least express that I believe you're doing a fairly decent job already and you don't necessarily have to change or do anything different. I like the art and the concept as is, I just feel that the pace is way too fast and that a nudist beach plot device to advance the plot doesn't necessarily do anything for me to see it being any different or better. Fact is, the characters supposedly know they're all going to this place called "Lust Haven Island", one would assume that they know or at least heard of this nudist beach resort before at one time or another, so they should know what they're getting in to. So it doesn't or at least it shouldn't present any fast shock value to set the pace of the story, especially since they all already agreed to go anyways without question and were looking forward to it. So I feel like them being "shocked" to find out it's a nudist beach resort feels like an unnecessary and forced plot hole to advance some concept to break the ice and be comfortable with each other unironically just falls flat.
Revamp the prologue, get them all to go on a double/ couples date, get them all somewhat comfortable with each other before going to the island, add in some extra scenes that put Yumi, Izzy and Nick in situations that expose them all to each other, this will easily break the ice a whole lot smoother.
Anyways, you've done well enough so far, and I still look forward to the next update. Keep up the good work!