VN - Ren'Py - A Perfect Marriage [v0.7.3b] [Mr Palmer]

TLDR: A game with great potential, but with serious problems that hold it back.

Plot: Fairly standard corruption game, those around a married, attractive woman take advantage of her and seek to corrupt her. It's what I like and what I'm here for. I have seen some reviewers complain that the choices of the wife don't make sense and I disagree. I think if you carefully look at the situation the wife is in, it explains her actions (often overexplains see below). There's moments where the story builds great tension that I don't want to spoil, for being a standard corruption plot it's artfully done at times. Pacing may seem a little slow, but that's only because of....

Writing: It's frustrating. Mechanically it's great, no spelling or grammar issues. There's even moments where it's quite clever and tantalizing. But most of the time it's remarkably repetitive. There's a long background section at the start (fair enough the game leans into the character's history to develop the plot). However, it is then largely repeated by character monologues. There will be four screens worth of character thoughts that are then perfectly summarized in a single line of dialogue. This need to overexplain makes the game hard to get through and robs the writing of any nuance (no, in this day in age you don't need to explain to consumers of a adult game that "come" can sound like "cum"). This game is badly in need of an editor.

Renders: Good quality, but not uniquely great. The scenes are well designed, clearly a lot of care went into making them. An opportunity was missed in making a possible love interest for the husband into the same curvy, pear-shaped, model as the wife. A more athletic looking model would have given us some variety.

review v0.4

Pros

• The writing is solid (most of the time)
• The graphics are decent
• The music is great
• Characters are reasonably thought out/believable (not always, though)

Cons

• It's just too cliché. Every male in the game is a sick pervert who's only purpose in life is to fuck the main girl (Anna).

Random thoughts

• More than half of all the text in this game is the thoughts of perverts, of what they wanna do to Anna. If this is your thing, fine. I found it rather disgusting.
• The constant messaging between Anna and Chris wasn't really plausible and believable. Broke immersion.
• Tried different choices and their outcome. Didn't seem to change much. Really scared this game is railwaying into one path while giving the illusion of choice.

Contemplative ending thought: I find it very strange that when you have one obvious main character (Anna), you don't get to make choices for her.
Imagine a game where you play as the male protagonist and you don't get to make any choice for him. It's just weird.

Fans of corruption games will love this, I hope however for something more than just that. Especially since the writing isn't that bad.

Update- The latest chapters are literally nothing sandwiches. She is still texting Chris, it is still the same level of nothing content, and it hasn't evolved since the second chapter.

Now, I am going to give you two stars for the story. It is awful and moving at a snails pace. It says a lot that the most exciting parts about your story are relegated to text phone messages.
Yes, tension building is fine and dandy, but your story, in 4 chapters, hasn't had a single thing exciting happen. Not one.
I wish I could give you a higher score, because games like these are few and far between, but look to games like The Adventurous Couple, which does a great job at building tension while still providing some action.

This game is definitely going to be great in the future so far only the taunts are perfect style corruption but not any one is a corruption that you know will be much better than the others and several games are delicious it has a lot of potential the theme is amazing the only problem is that there is very little content and exactly no nudity but i understand it is the beginning of the game i still hope there will be lots of teasing and wild sex with Anna and her future lovers and i would love to see her squeezing her breasts full of milks to have that kind of scene will be very sexy because she just got out of a pregnancy i love pregnant women and with huge boobs hehehe I highly recommend it for those who are new you will not regret it is an amazing game even though it is still young.

I'm a little new to these types of games but I want to say this is a great game for a couple I'm really enjoying David is the gym girl I'm still not sure if she is hired by Mc's ex the first part was good. beautiful we are controlling David But what I really want is to be able to control the wonderful Anna I hope the game has scenes of Anna breastfeeding her lovers with her fertile tits I want to thank the creator of the game you are to be congratulated I know it still is I'm new to this game but I have to say this is one of the biggest couple games I've ever seen here at F95zone. I want to say something to some people who come in just to criticize the game even though they haven't even played it to see how it is you are losing making this kind of comment because it's a great game I'm going to try to save Anna and David's marriage Even if I don't like NTR I respect those who like it, there's nothing good about creating gratuitous hate without saying that you have to be very young to worry about other people liking NTR... if you just get sick of this game being posted or why there are people who enjoy a game of this genre this just proves that you are too young to be on this site… I apologize for my outburst let me not be calm when I see someone criticizing a game without having played it

Excellent game so far. The build up to NTR is close to a masterpiece. The characters are well written and the dialogues feel natural and immersive. My favourite NTR scenario so far is the best friend.

I quite like this game and I am excited to see updates. I'm not a huge NTR fan but this story is done in such a way that I am rooting for the cheaters. Good renders, good story, just the right amount of tease. I'm giving it 4 stars and will probably update to 5 once there is some more action!

Great game. I t promisses a lot. Good quality of renders, good text and gorgeous girl. I only complain about the boss. I have seen him so many times that he looks like as a porn actor who participates in all the films, as John Holmes.

'A Perfect Marriage' has all of the makings of being a very high quality visual novel with a tried and true but always enjoyable premise that makes the most out of its corruption gameplay element. It seems to be a slower burn but there is content and overall I would say that the pacing of the game is very solid and I expect that it'll be ramping up as our MCs are placed into more and more scenes and we move past the prologue.

Speaking of the MCs, they look good. Especially the FMC's renders. The game/visual novel utilises a dual-protagonist mechanic for decisionmaking and it seems to be working (though I usually prefer female protagonist games) and I look forward to the perspective shifts that will be occurring after we progress through the prologue and how that will affect their marriage and how corrupted the FMC can get (I'm already liking the relationship developing between her and the bestfriend). Of course, NTR is a big component of the story, and I know a lot of people do not enjoy it so if that's a turnoff then unfortunately this won't be for you.

I think this will be a great visual novel with good writing (for example, I think the wife is written realistically and I can already see her personality in contrast to what other reviewers have said.) and an interesting setting for the corruption and NTR elements to occur. I also don't get the impression there will be a lot of choice in the novel, but that's not always a bad thing. Not all visual novels need to branch into a million different substories that just lead to long development times with no consistency in updates. I look forward to which direction Mr Palmer takes this and future updates for 'A Perfect Marriage'.

To wrap up, if you can get over the lack of choice in this VN and the potential for NTR then check it out. And remember to treat it more like a novel where you watch what happens rather than dictate what happens.

Reviewed as of v0.3b

I agree with the previous review. The game is relatively well done, but the characters.....oh boy...where to start and where to stop?!?! This is not a classic VN by any means...but quite simply a KN (Kinetic Novel). The "choices" you can make are completely pointless and useless. The "wife" acts like a stupid retarded child. On the one hand, the "wife" is sold as a successful lawyer/businesswoman, on the other hand, the "WIFE" is unable to defend herself against sexual harassment from the husband's (supposedly) BEST buddy. Seriously...this is just STUPID. The graphics are quite good and the characters are well drawn, but the story (if any) is complete nonsense. The player has no way to intervene and has to watch helplessly as the "wife and mother" is harassed and groped. It is painful to watch how the woman is portrayed as a successful businesswoman and is so totally stupid. I don't even want to talk about the annoying "Chris" character. This character is a complete joke and in the real world the guy would have gotten the beating of his life. I'm missing the tags "kinetic novel and fantasy"! Since when does "stop grabbing me" actually mean "go on"??? If you're looking for a pointless comic with no choices and stupid forced decisions, feel free to grab this.

So bad. Let´s get this over with. Technically the game is fine. The woman, yes just one, is hot and will be probably great fap material. The overall story is also okay, but the characters... bad... There are 3 main characters: the husband is ok, probably a bit on the boring side, but whatever. There´s a friend that is a total jackass, if the writter wants us to hate this guy to the core: well done, completed with flying colors. Now we come to the final main character, the woman or the wife, whatever you wanna call her. She´s all over the place, makes no sense. Either she´s smart or dumb. You can´t write her has smart and then make her do dumb sh*t. She´s super hot, smart and faithful and doesnt throw the other guy out of a window when he grabs her ass? She´s sending selfies in nighties? Is she 16? Unemployed? Has a OF? Come on. This is version 0.3 and i´m not coming back unless i see a "rework" or "rewrite" on the title.

so let's go for it it's still at the beginning it's a new game as EVERYONE already knows it has a lot of potential ahead of it..... it's a typical relationship couple game with important choices and also not to mention that you can make choices on both sides in the game. part of David who is the main mc and also part of Anna who is his wife and the second main character of the game and for me this is very good because you can make decisions for both sides and this for me is something important in a game you have full control of the characters and so far for me it has great writing the graphics of the game are excellent it has soundtracks sometimes especially in Anna's parts it makes the game more spicy the animations I don't know yet there was nothing important so far just a sex scene between the couple but I didn't see much movement in the animations maybe in the future the updates but I don't care much about it I like the game the way it is already and the developer is doing a great t I work on this game I just hope everything goes well and he keeps sending us updates that's what I recommend it's an excellent game that can please everyone

The rating is more for the potential than anything else but its a very good start. Not much choices or options and the ones that are there don't seem to make a difference but we will see. Its a very slow burn and more story than anything else. The gradual corruption and the slow pace of the game makes it more realistic and this i like a lot (borrowed comment but applicable nevertheless).

The wife is very hot and a bit naive but it works. The MC is either going to be clueless or a tool but i can live with that.

The slow corruption story is the key to this story and look forward for more updates and i will gladly support the dev.

good luck.

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Diego

Alright listen, I'm not one for hammering down on games this early in development, but man is this poorly written. Or rather, isn't what it's advertised to be? Let me explain.

First off, there is no choices in the game yet. Basically giving you no control in making the story what you want it to be. And I understand the fact that you can't please everyone and make 5+ outcomes from the jump, but atleast make it so there isn't anything significant happening which you have no control over. For example, This brings me to my next point.

Way too many important events are "spoiled", so to speak. Chapter 1 is supposed to be mainly from David's perspective, where you can shape his personality (sort of). Surely we shouldn't be seeing what Anna is doing when David isn't around? Since that's supposed to be reserved for Chapter 2?

I know asking for decent writing is hopeless for Adult VN's, but man... And I want it to do good because I like the concept, It isn't just what it could be. A story where you get decide HOW it unfolds. Scrap that, the developer fully intended it to be like this without doing the courtesy to explicitly state what type of game this is. Just goes to show the incompetence of the developer. In the thread it was explained better than I can but it's a kinetic novel, end of. (kinetic during the first two chapters where supposedly you're in control. Nope you're in control for the shitstorm that's going to be chapter 3.)

I'll swing by when it's all said and done to see if anything's changed, but I doubt it so I think this review will stand as it is.

And no, potential doesn't warrant a high rating.

EDIT: started reading the thread, made some adjustments to the review.

Very very promising game with nice graphics and good characters. The story and the dialogs are well written.

FMC is very beautiful and feels like real person with believable qualities and flaws. She's headstrong, smart, but also playful and prone to make mistakes like any other person.

The gradual corruption and the slow pace of the game makes it more realistic and this i like a lot.

I have high hopes for this game. Can’t wait to play the next updates and i will gladly support the dev.

Many thanks!

I've already gotten used to Anna's new look. But Ch3 was supposed to have no kinetic choices. No, there aren't, but minus one star for the lack of choices in key scenes. But that doesn't stop the creator from adding hopeless dialogue for Chris ( (fake friend) )

We have finally reached Ch3, the choices have influence from the previous chapters. Unfortunately, there are too few of them and they do not appear in key scenes at all. Supposedly the end of kinetic choices and no real choices.

Ch1 from David's perspective, now it's time for Ch2 from Anna's perspective.Ch3
The game might be interesting, but it is made in a strange way, it is divided into three chapters in which we will play: Ch1- husband David Ch2's-wife Anna Ch3's we play alternately Anna and David - consequences of decisions Ch1 and Ch2

Anna attractiveness 9/10 - Old looking renders
Anna's new look 9/10

Choices in the game 3/10 Dev said the first two chapters will be kinetic I nightgowns? Will we have the option of not sending photos in chapter Ch2 - yes I have a choice

Ch3- 4/10 lack of choices in key scenes

Paths in the game 3/10 There are three, but they don't differ much from each other, which is terribly boring and miserable, I don't play the faithful path to have the same scenes:
1. Faithful - Anna pumps milk from her tits, an old fish enters, no choices, Anna in the pigguin's office, the pigguin approaches her, gives her a back massage, no choices,
2.Not sure - The same, the same
3. corruption - The same, another scene

Another major flaw in the game in terms of choices for me is the fact that Anna automatically elbows characters - the old fish (Marvin) or the fake friend (Chris), which takes away the satisfaction of choosing to hit them. If someone hates them.





There are also hidden choices that the game doesn't tell you about, you earn different points for choices. And if you have some points with a certain character, you will have a choice in scenes. If not, the game will automatically move on. As if you were punished on a faithful path that you rejected all characters. For example, if you want to stop the old fish from groping Anna seeing you, you have to go with her (Marvin) to dinner. Then the extra Anna changes from rejected to uncertain about Marvin. You will have a choice. Otherwise, if you don't go with him to dinner. You will have no way to stop him.



6+/10 dialogues
Sometimes there are plot-related dialogue errors. For example, when Anna decides to wear a more daring outfit to work. She says it's her decision, which is not true. Because it's Kendra and Pigwin's (Henka) decision.

long wait for the next update 2/10
4 months

At the moment, history we are already Ch3 we finally saw, . And for now that's it.Waiting is torment for the next updates 4 months .

There is no better way to start a corruption game. The story and dialogue are extremely well written. I already know that the slow pace story and development will torture me and it's too early to get hyped like that, but this game could kick my favorites like GGG and ORS off the throne. Thanks for that Mr. Palmer!

What can I say? This game was going great for me until I fell asleep for the third time reading the neverending and totally over written backstory and extra drama added to a game that only has a single short and disappointing sex scene in it. Basically this was a no sex game since that scene you really don't see anything in it anyway. It got so ridiculous with the excessive writing that I just started skipping everything in the game just trying to advance the story to get to something better. Guess what? Game is short. It never happened. I hope this game improves but it will be several updates before I submit myself back to this boring endless drivel.

[v0.2]

+
Nice renders
Beautiful female characters
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This game is a pregnant cheating wife simulator and that's it, MC's wife is harassed by depraved people, her husband doesn't satisfy sexually and sends "intimate" messages to someone else. (Beta MC obviously) .Romance?, only if you find romantic to be cheated on. Not a good story

Great start to the game so far, the scene has been well flushed out and it's clear that some thought has gone into the story and characters. The relationships, reactions, and emotions are all believable and not over the top or unrealistic. Very excited to see how this turns out, all the best!