I think this game has a promising story. The premis and use of the MC being a spy is unique and executed well, the setting is Office Themed which I like, there is variety in how the girls look and all look very hot and the plot started out good.
I have one "valid" point I of criticism (and also prais because once it was done rather well ableit short) and two personal "problems" up to now.
The first and most important one. Sex or erotic scenes. In my play through of v0.2 there were 3 instances of "erotics". MC kissed Jessica, MC and Jessica got handsy in the office, MC and JEssica had sex in the last scene. The effect those had on me are not like one might expect. I found the "touching tights in the office" scene the most arousing one of them. This was, because the scene itself was done very well in my opinion and I got enough out of it, because of the following aspects. We got a power dynamic: the MC was very dominant in that he exerted power over Jessica. We got a very nice setting: Sexy stuff in the office is a no go, the stakes were raised and the danger of discovery added to the atmosphere. We got personal feelings, thoughts and goals: This is probably one of the most underrated and under utalised aspect of erotic writing I very much miss in VNs these days. We got a very nervous Jessica that is worried and agitated but cannot do anything about it. This adds to the setting and power dynamic, she is "helpless" but kinda likes it but doesnt want to admit it. So she is also "conflicted". The MC is enjoying himself, he likes to make her feel and do things. Because he is a spy, he knows the setting and realizes that the threat of discovery is non existant. So he abuses his position of superior knowledge to his advantage. And we get his thought about it, he liked to be "sadistic" in that way. I though all this translated very well to me as a player. What I'd wish was there to add more to it would have been some images of just the faces, mimic is very telling, maybe a quick bite on the lips, something subtle. And some more thoughts from Jessica, since we already know she is in distress, maybe add something akin to "I can't belief he just did that" and "why does his touch feels like back then... agh no girl, get your act together, this isn't happening" would have been appreciated. Compared to the sex scene in the end, I liked it way better. In the sex scene in the end we essentially did "only" get visual stimulation, and not much of it at that. This comparison has no "bad intention" but I just googled "naked girl sex" and on images I see like 30 pictured of naked girls having sex. I dont want to count the renders but I'm pretty sure we didnt get 30 images of a naked girl having sex. So in my opinion, more is better. That might go more into the realm of an objective truth than a criticsm, so what I actually wanted to say was: In the sex scene we only got visual stimulation that wasnt really complemented by sensual/erotical writing. We"just" got some dialogue like "oh yes I want you so much" "Ahhh" "I'm cumming" . While I agree, yes those lines absolutely belong in sex scenes, they are very shallow and dare I say, expected and not impactful. To get back to why I liked the "hands on tights" scene and what I missed in the sex scene. We didnt get any real thoughts, goals or motives from Jessica or the MC. We didnt get any hints about their state of being: things like in control, conflicted (because of what might happen afterwards), extasy because they know each other so well etc. Since the setting was her bedroom, maybe adress the senses some more. Add a couple of lines that adress smell (maybe there is parfume or a candle involved) and something cute like its very tidy and clean. Also a very important thing I noticed, I like to expierence Vns on auto, since I preferably use my hands for other things than clicking, the time it took from the "up and down shots" of Jess to the cum shot was around 3minutes50 seconds to exactly 4minutes, in that ball park. So accorind to PornHub stats people on average spend 9min55sec on PornHub. So if the dev intents this game to be realistic masturbational material I'd say there nedds to be at least 3x to 4x more descriptive text during sex scenes.
This first lets say "personal problem" I have with many VNs is that they really take their time to establish a hook that grabs my interest. I downloaded this from F95zone after I read the Tags and Short Description. So I have two lines of expectations. First: I get erotic content because its an adult VN. I mean thas why I'm here in the first place and not on PornHub.
Secondly, based on the descriptipn: I get a spy MC who "infiltrates" a rich girl in her office and does sexy, probably inapropriate things to her.
There is this equation: happyness or disapointment = expectation - reality.
I expect erotic content and I expect that erotic content to be done in an office setting. I got me an office setting but the erotic content I got was not in the office setting. So this kinda leaves me "disappointed". This line of thinking is my line of thinking and should not be taken as criticism, its not my story to tell but to experience, I just didnt have as good of a time experiencing it as I thought I'd had. But what I can constructively cirticise is this: I do lots of reading, I'm writing a bachelor thesis at the moment. Reading is not always fun. Reading about hings that I care are more fun. Naked girls are very much fun. If you give a reason to care about what I read, I probably wont hit skip. A very easy way to do that is by givig me images of a naked girl. This story even has a perfetly fine excuse to do so. The MC is a spy. If you'd given me some naked shots of the females of the office and maybe some naughty stuff while you're at it while the MC reads their files, you know cuz he is a spy, I tzhink I would've been more invested.
The second "personal problem" of mine and the dev should absolutely disregard that because its about design and that is something that shouldnt be changed (in my eyes at least), because a person on the internet is "whining" about it. That said, I hate the fact that the game tracks points based on how you answer questions and act without giving you a hint about it. You get an a_point (points for Ashley) depending on how you answer the first question she asks you about the job interview. I personally think its absurd that a person would change their attitude towards another based on how a question about a job interview gets answered and based on that might or might not want to sleep with them. I alaways think about it like this. Yeah we went on 2 dates they were great, we kissed, it was awsome but because he directly instead of indirectly answered my first question at the job interview I'm not gonna have sex with him even tho I am very horny. So I appreaciate it if choices like that are a thing, that players know about them. But like I said, this is more a personal problem than real criticism, I just change all the variables to 99 in every game I play anyway.
