- Thread starter AndroMax
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- Jun 16, 2019
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All very skippable. Don't play it and you will miss everything.
Currently it’s a one person dev team, but I’m looking into hiring a writer.
It's just a homage to Claire's Quest. I love that game and wanted to make a similar one but with ren’py.
Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it.
The flashbacks will only really be happening in the prologue to set up the back story, and for you to choose what kind of character you are.
- Oct 31, 2019
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Enjoyed it, and the naughty fairytale book look about it. Some options make it a game too. Hope the next part is coming along.
- Nov 21, 2018
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Those muscular male bodies are hilarious. They legit look like they can't lift their arms over their heads. Also that white guy just has a glorified swastika on his tit. So I have to ask if there's any actual Nazi shit in the game.
Also can you adjust the mom's right eye? She has some serious permanent derp face shit going on.
Also can you adjust the mom's right eye? She has some serious permanent derp face shit going on.
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Love the art style in the screenshots. Will check it out when it seems like there might be some good scenes. Much appreciate this great effort!
As noted before the "lewd fairytale" artstyle ain't bad.
But for a game about customization I felt like I had little choice. E.g. I'd like to have a lesbian character and being forced into het scenes or having no option to lust for females in flashbags seemed odd. Option for sexual orientation would be neat.
Any plans for dickgirls or other weirder fetishes?
But for a game about customization I felt like I had little choice. E.g. I'd like to have a lesbian character and being forced into het scenes or having no option to lust for females in flashbags seemed odd. Option for sexual orientation would be neat.
Any plans for dickgirls or other weirder fetishes?
Always loved character creation games. Hope there will be more customizable options like pubic hair and piercings,boob/ass size. Art could be improved a bit. Hope this game won't be abandoned or have a rushed ending. Looking forward for more releases.
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I think that this was an excellent start to the story, with a few reservations.
The capitalization of every word, and the font, kinda works in dialogue, as it implies that the characters are really speaking a different language, which has been translated with some of its quirks left intact. But that doesn't work when the same technique is used for non-dialogue storytelling and interior dialogue. I'd leave it for the spoken dialogue and drop it for everything else.
Unlike many here, I very much like the more sophisticated storytelling that uses flashbacks and fantasy thoughts. Sequential storytelling is so boring. This style has action, then reflection, then action. Much more satisfying. But I'd drop the idea that the protagonist was captured in the past. Have the slave bits be fantasy/hypothesizing/prediction, whatever, because it fits better with the start of the story that has the protagonist going to town with her mother.
The bit where the protagonist wants the rope to swim the river doesn't make any sense. Why weigh yourself down with rope when the crossing is already supposed to be deadly? Maybe make the object needed from the cabin in the woods a wine bladder that the protagonist empties and inflates as a flotation device, and has to abandon crossing the river because it slows her down too much.
My nits are all pretty much nits, though. The one serious objection I have is that the clothing of the protagonist presents a huge continuity error. She's in the chosen clothing until she starts to run, and then is in a cloak with nothing on it underneath. Huh? What happened to her clothing, and where did she get the cloak? That kinda breaks suspension of disbelief entirely.
So, bravo to andromax for telling the story non-sequentially, and please fix the continuity errors. Do what you like with the fonts and capitalization, because they don't matter much. Make the sex slave bits fantasy rather than recollection, because that fits the story better. But MOST IMPORTANTLY, keep to your own vision and tell us more. It's more important that you stay excited about telling this story than it is that I stay excited about reading it.
The capitalization of every word, and the font, kinda works in dialogue, as it implies that the characters are really speaking a different language, which has been translated with some of its quirks left intact. But that doesn't work when the same technique is used for non-dialogue storytelling and interior dialogue. I'd leave it for the spoken dialogue and drop it for everything else.
Unlike many here, I very much like the more sophisticated storytelling that uses flashbacks and fantasy thoughts. Sequential storytelling is so boring. This style has action, then reflection, then action. Much more satisfying. But I'd drop the idea that the protagonist was captured in the past. Have the slave bits be fantasy/hypothesizing/prediction, whatever, because it fits better with the start of the story that has the protagonist going to town with her mother.
The bit where the protagonist wants the rope to swim the river doesn't make any sense. Why weigh yourself down with rope when the crossing is already supposed to be deadly? Maybe make the object needed from the cabin in the woods a wine bladder that the protagonist empties and inflates as a flotation device, and has to abandon crossing the river because it slows her down too much.
My nits are all pretty much nits, though. The one serious objection I have is that the clothing of the protagonist presents a huge continuity error. She's in the chosen clothing until she starts to run, and then is in a cloak with nothing on it underneath. Huh? What happened to her clothing, and where did she get the cloak? That kinda breaks suspension of disbelief entirely.
So, bravo to andromax for telling the story non-sequentially, and please fix the continuity errors. Do what you like with the fonts and capitalization, because they don't matter much. Make the sex slave bits fantasy rather than recollection, because that fits the story better. But MOST IMPORTANTLY, keep to your own vision and tell us more. It's more important that you stay excited about telling this story than it is that I stay excited about reading it.
- Jul 10, 2018
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Is She A Dominant Ball-Busting, But Good Hearted Hero
Who Saves The Day. Or Is She A Submissive, Perverted, Evil Witch Who Only Wants Power.
The Choice Is Yours.
Ни кому это описание не показалось странным? Или это я что то не так перевела!?
Didn't anyone find this description strange? Or did I translate something wrong !?
Who Saves The Day. Or Is She A Submissive, Perverted, Evil Witch Who Only Wants Power.
The Choice Is Yours.
Ни кому это описание не показалось странным? Или это я что то не так перевела!?
Didn't anyone find this description strange? Or did I translate something wrong !?
- Nov 15, 2018
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Interesting. give it some time. tracing is how it starts, but practice will bring better quality eventually.
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