VN - Ren'Py - Altered [v0.3] [Mr.J]

Hiya just finished what you have completed and wanted to provide some feedback.

Pros:
-Story is good and I like where it is headed
-Some of the LIs are nice to look at and done nicely
-There was not a ton of typos or incorrect wording. Always a plus.

Cons:
-Some of the people do not look there age. Like the daughter looks way older than mother. Why white hair?? Breasts look way to saggy and old to be 18. Mother has a nicer look and body.
-Most of the LIs have huge milk jugs and there is little diversity with breast sizes.
-Some of the LIs are very unattractive to me.

V0.1

i think average seems an apt rating

the art is okay but pretty much on par for this site. the sex scenes are a little involved so better than some i have seen for angle but not much here yet.
characters design is good enough although personally i would have chosen twins to look more alike. not spot-the-difference alike but less danny/arnold.

the writing is, well, it is overall pretty average too. there is a premise here that some may find intriguing but the writer lacks the skill to deliver it.
the whole exchange at the hospital was pretty crap and comes across as a step up from a bad porn movie script to me. there are occasional glimmers this could improve with time and development though. fingers crossed
right now it is a slideshow with a predictable script most could write in their own heads. not to mention at one point i was called 'Jay' yet named MC differently.
it also needs a rework as spelling errors and missing words abound.
a premature release as that first impression is now lost

it is being touted as incest, yet there is currently nothing incestuous.

no coding errors....yay

it is not point and click and not sandbox so i like the design but without a better script (certainly one you can read without spotting errors on the regular) with a bit more maturity, this one may fall into the spank bank category, which for a VN is not a plus.

I like the Story for this VN, It's a unique story , Renders is pretty good, You can improve the sound right now it's good, The performance of the VN is good and in this version dont have any problem with performance and dont find any bugs, like the animations, Renders quality is good, Amount of content in this VN is pretty good considering the initial relese.overall good VN. Best Of luck Dev.