VN - Ren'Py - Aunt’s Secret Desires [v0.39] [Revazx]

The main issue is always the same for VN.

1. The intro already gives every plot that is possible in the game. ie, it's describing both the main character and the others with a clear objective and connection between them. If you write a story like this, there is no point in meeting or even talking to the character anymore. Since everything is already given in the prologue, there is no point in talking with said character in the novel itself. It's like you had a mind reader from the get-go.

2. You had the narrator. Stop using the narrator to narrate a VN, unless the narrator is part of the character in the vn itself. Let the flow build from the natural dialogue and the scene itself. People are not dumb, so stop dictating every nook and cranny of the vn itself. If you do useless internal thought and the narrator talks, you basically stunlock your reader with an uninteresting line.

Other than that, it's ok.

V0.39

when this showed up on the latest updates page i first thought it was on my ignore list as the preview image there is so dark. decided to still give it a go as the tags float my boat.

starts with an opening of backstory and then proceeds to make no sense, like the backstory was about a different character as the aunts reactions are way off. not to mention the timeline makes little sense too. written like contact is constant and then suddenly it has been years. a common writers mistake.

there is a giant flaw in the design, one i absolutely hate. you must click the screen here or here to progress this now-no-longer-a-VN. it is exactly the same as a single option click choice. fucking stupid as adding it to the dialogue or just removing it and continuing the story changes nothing at all. so why add nonsense?

most of the game takes place at night, which is not helped by the developer having never set their monitor settings right. one girl has her name on screen but it can rarely be seen and even in the day time it must be cloudy outside and god has popped a lampshade over the sun. just look at the page of latest updates and it will stick out how much darker it is to all the others.
i gave up when the headache from squinting started.

other than that it is not poorly written, just not consistent and certainly lacking in interest. the tags are the hook and the writer knows it, which is why the sudden growth of females for the male MC.

dark and dull.