This is one of the best-written VNs on the site. I have some minor critiques, but if you enjoy story-driven adult VNs, you really shouldn't miss this one.
The girls are hot and the renders are well-made. The animations range from ok to great.
The music is generally good, though there's one track I found annoying as a single musical phrase repeats over and over.
The way choices are done from a systems sense is, in my opinion, the gold-standard. Important choices are marked that way and there are no point systems to worry about.
I don't want to criticize this point too much because experimentation in the genre is good and it's not like this killed the VN or anything, but the choice between secondary love interests could have been done better. We make the choice before meeting either of them and then it's mostly a strict replacement of a few scenes. There isn't enough content different between the two routes to justify it in my opinion. This could probably have been done better in a more traditional way such as making the choice later while still having both characters appear in the narrative.
Similarly, I think the "what if" 5th route could have been handled better. It's really more like a 2nd route vs. 4 variations which are similar enough to each other to count as a single route. That's good, but it might have felt better as a new game+ option from the main menu rather than just being tacked on the end of each other route. This is a very minor point though.
The writing is, in general, excellent. However, the "multiple protagonists" thing didn't work for me. It felt like the viewpoint issue I think a lot of these games have, only worse. Rather than feeling like first person or third person limited, it feels like third person omniscient. Better would be to stay in Uncle's viewpoint whenever he's in a scene rather than suddenly seeing Avalon's thoughts. Or at least not jumping back and forth between them mid-scene.
Ok, let's talk about Penny. She's simultaneously a great character and a frustrating one. The issue is she's too hyper-competent. No one can ever be better than her at anything. She can't be taken by surprise, beaten in a fight, outsmarted or anything like that. Even during her backstory when it would have made sense for her to barely speak her native language, she spoke better English than professors I've had.
However, I really liked the portrayal of the antagonists. Frankly, the rapist's daughter should have gone to prison as an accomplice on multiple counts, but other than that, the interplay between her and the two goons was great. I found myself wanting more of their story and relationship.
On a technical note, the version posted here did not work on my system. It's apparently due to the developer using a known-bad version of Ren'Py. I was able to create a working version using the Ren'Py SDK v. 7.3.5 as per some advice on the forum here. Hopefully the developer will create an updated release with a better version of Ren'Py, but I'll copy the steps I followed to resolve the issue just in case:
1) Download the Ren'Py SDK v. 7.3.5
2) Put you game into renpy sdk folder
3) Run renpy sdk.
4) Choose game (like avalon) in the left list.
5) Build distribution.
6) Choose what platform you need.
The girls are hot and the renders are well-made. The animations range from ok to great.
The music is generally good, though there's one track I found annoying as a single musical phrase repeats over and over.
The way choices are done from a systems sense is, in my opinion, the gold-standard. Important choices are marked that way and there are no point systems to worry about.
I don't want to criticize this point too much because experimentation in the genre is good and it's not like this killed the VN or anything, but the choice between secondary love interests could have been done better. We make the choice before meeting either of them and then it's mostly a strict replacement of a few scenes. There isn't enough content different between the two routes to justify it in my opinion. This could probably have been done better in a more traditional way such as making the choice later while still having both characters appear in the narrative.
Similarly, I think the "what if" 5th route could have been handled better. It's really more like a 2nd route vs. 4 variations which are similar enough to each other to count as a single route. That's good, but it might have felt better as a new game+ option from the main menu rather than just being tacked on the end of each other route. This is a very minor point though.
The writing is, in general, excellent. However, the "multiple protagonists" thing didn't work for me. It felt like the viewpoint issue I think a lot of these games have, only worse. Rather than feeling like first person or third person limited, it feels like third person omniscient. Better would be to stay in Uncle's viewpoint whenever he's in a scene rather than suddenly seeing Avalon's thoughts. Or at least not jumping back and forth between them mid-scene.
Ok, let's talk about Penny. She's simultaneously a great character and a frustrating one. The issue is she's too hyper-competent. No one can ever be better than her at anything. She can't be taken by surprise, beaten in a fight, outsmarted or anything like that. Even during her backstory when it would have made sense for her to barely speak her native language, she spoke better English than professors I've had.
However, I really liked the portrayal of the antagonists. Frankly, the rapist's daughter should have gone to prison as an accomplice on multiple counts, but other than that, the interplay between her and the two goons was great. I found myself wanting more of their story and relationship.
On a technical note, the version posted here did not work on my system. It's apparently due to the developer using a known-bad version of Ren'Py. I was able to create a working version using the Ren'Py SDK v. 7.3.5 as per some advice on the forum here. Hopefully the developer will create an updated release with a better version of Ren'Py, but I'll copy the steps I followed to resolve the issue just in case:
1) Download the Ren'Py SDK v. 7.3.5
2) Put you game into renpy sdk folder
3) Run renpy sdk.
4) Choose game (like avalon) in the left list.
5) Build distribution.
6) Choose what platform you need.