Between Two Worlds [Ch. 5] review
VN is confusing. Attempted lewds did nothing to my crotch region.
This VN shows off the Dev's ability to make cool scenarios, hot renders and spicy animations. Sadly though, those 3 things never happen at the same time and the writing drags this one down by alot.
The author fails at making me care about the main characters and even sabotages his own quite formiddable animations by creating sex scenes which feel routine and mechanical. The girlfriend is givning me strong sexbot vibes. The sex scene in the game-within-the-game is also very difficult to be invested in, since it's just the imaginings of a fictional character.
Moving on, the writing in general in the "waking world" seems to me like mostly pure fluff without purpose. It was very hard to keep reading it. The devil-in-the-book stuff I liked, but the rest: pass.
The part of the game which got me the most invested was the fantasy world from the tabletop RPG you're playing. Most of what happens in that world is actually fairly interesting and managed to keep my interest.
But then all of that feels ruined when I hop back to the the "normal" world again. It's hard to care about life-and-death situations in a game within a game. What happens if MC dies? They just make another character, no big deal? Yea, not exactly high-stakes.
This is actually 2 separate stories happening in parallell. The real world stuff is mostly uninteresting, but has hot sex animations. The RPG game world has cool world building, nice action scenes and a functioning story, but is light on the sex. (I didn't care about the tent scene at all, it felt very artificial and lacked believable build-up.)
I can't really score this lower than a 3 because the visual work is definitely very good. But the rest... Needs work. Or a complete rethink.
My advice to the Dev would be try to make one story instead of this kind of mangled hybrid, and try to focus on the lead-up to the sex scenes. Make it feel forbidden and exciting, with characters we care about!
And stop putting so much unnecessary fluff in there. If it's not telling the story you're trying to tell, then it needs to go.
Honestly just make 2 separate games from this instead. I would have liked the fantasy game a lot more if I felt it was the real setting for a story.
VN is confusing. Attempted lewds did nothing to my crotch region.
This VN shows off the Dev's ability to make cool scenarios, hot renders and spicy animations. Sadly though, those 3 things never happen at the same time and the writing drags this one down by alot.
The author fails at making me care about the main characters and even sabotages his own quite formiddable animations by creating sex scenes which feel routine and mechanical. The girlfriend is givning me strong sexbot vibes. The sex scene in the game-within-the-game is also very difficult to be invested in, since it's just the imaginings of a fictional character.
Moving on, the writing in general in the "waking world" seems to me like mostly pure fluff without purpose. It was very hard to keep reading it. The devil-in-the-book stuff I liked, but the rest: pass.
The part of the game which got me the most invested was the fantasy world from the tabletop RPG you're playing. Most of what happens in that world is actually fairly interesting and managed to keep my interest.
But then all of that feels ruined when I hop back to the the "normal" world again. It's hard to care about life-and-death situations in a game within a game. What happens if MC dies? They just make another character, no big deal? Yea, not exactly high-stakes.
This is actually 2 separate stories happening in parallell. The real world stuff is mostly uninteresting, but has hot sex animations. The RPG game world has cool world building, nice action scenes and a functioning story, but is light on the sex. (I didn't care about the tent scene at all, it felt very artificial and lacked believable build-up.)
I can't really score this lower than a 3 because the visual work is definitely very good. But the rest... Needs work. Or a complete rethink.
My advice to the Dev would be try to make one story instead of this kind of mangled hybrid, and try to focus on the lead-up to the sex scenes. Make it feel forbidden and exciting, with characters we care about!
And stop putting so much unnecessary fluff in there. If it's not telling the story you're trying to tell, then it needs to go.
Honestly just make 2 separate games from this instead. I would have liked the fantasy game a lot more if I felt it was the real setting for a story.