This has potential.
The original BB wasn't a story. It was a grindy progression hunter with a creepy protagonist, a temporary predatory step dad figure, a MILFified "land lady", a pseudo playful older "roommate", a younger "doll" roommate. Overall, there might have been good renders and dialogue but this doesn't constitute a story. There were no character motivations, no subtext, and no plot to be told. It was just a progression system for more skin in scenes - good scenes to be fair. But the progression itself was random.
Characters: This author clearly changed the original characters. It feels more like a family now, not like an academy for troubled children.
Dialogues: Some dialogue sections clearly show that the author isn't fluent in English: "Look her, look her". At her? Even then, the dialogue doesn't make sense. I think it's a translation issue from an otherwise acceptably written dialogue. Learn how to use GPT for proof reading and adjusting style of language to character. And learn (or improve) how to write dialogues. Every line has to serve a purpose. Enter the dialogue with motivations, ensure that these motivations shine through as subtext to a certain extent. I can't quite judge the performance of this because it's too early to have a deeper understanding of the characters. Overall, the (internal) dialogues feel authentic. They don't focus on the MC only.
Story and character arcs: This is too early to tell, but let's just say that half of this pilot deals with clothes. Maybe that's compelling for a female audience, but I doubt that this is the targeted readership. A lot of even the better VN creators in this genre don't understand that readers need to care about the characters, and this doesn't work with ten at the same time. They create these harem-style of games where relationships are a function, not the interplay of authentic characters. Because their characters are superficial soulless casts of common stereotypes. This game introduces and interlinks multiple subplots, the issue is just that it lost me with the LOTR theme and these "precious" faux leather shoes about which I couldn't care less. New female characters are introduced, probably meant to become MC's dates. No choices, not even illusionary ones.
Renders: Decent render quality, the author tried to invest into facial expressions, which gives it less of a doll vibe than the original BB.
Short update after playing the remaster: the story pacing is slow. Developing or setting up this whole story in the shop scene setting gets boring. There is too much internal dialogue of all involved characters at the same time, of some stuff that's just irrelevant and doesn't need to be put into exposition. Some sibling character interactions appear artificially distant, but this can be attributed to their defensiveness about being attracted to each other. I would suggest revising the script, hiding some of the internal dialogue just for writer's reference, and then investigating how this internal dialogue can contribute to subtext of relevant conflict and dialogue. Subtext, not exposition! Not everything is meant for the reader's eyes. But it's just a VN, we can't expect a perfect story.
