I've played quite a few games, but this is the first I'll have ever reviewed.
Let's start with the good:
- The art is fantastic. Bar none, this has some of my favourite art on the site of any game. Something about the colour choices and lineart is extremely appealing to me. There isn't very much art right now; not many poses, but there's a lot of potential here.
- The characters are appealing. I particularly find Eva, Ellie and Ester interesting.
Now to the OK:
- The writing is uhh... Its very clear English isn't the native language of the writer, and that's okay, but an extra pass or two of the writing by native speakers would go really far. The writing quality is also OK. I agree with other posters saying the MC is either a complete dick or a complete doormat; I tried to go for a middle ground but there's some decisions that really either force you into being way too nice or abrasive as sandpaper. Wish there was more choice.
- The music, while there is VERY LITTLE of it, suits the game well.
Now, the not so good:
- Content. Obviously the game is currently in 0.6v, so I can't say I expect a lot, but yeah.
- Plot points. This kinda goes with the writing, but seriously its a glaring weakness. A lot of things don't make a lot of sense in the game (you buy chocolates, never to give them. You go on a top secret mission with Ester, only to dilly dally around and loiter. You go from not trusting Eva a bit to vouching for her to get a job in less than 24 hours.)
Some things just don't make a lot of sense.
Overall, I think the game has fantastic potential because of the art, and with a lot of work in the writing department, this could be great.