Nice renders/art.
Suggestion about the sketchbook; don't use Mousewheel Up/Down for UI elements, since the Ren'Py engine already uses them. It'd be better to simply have clickable corners or something.
Also, a few spelling errors, mostly with names;
The first time "Zack" is mentioned, it's "Zach".
Also, in your phone, "John" is spelled "Jhon", but the MC uses "John" when speaking.
While Zach/Jhon is an acceptable alternate of Zack/John, you'll need to pick one and stay consistent.
EDIT: OK, just finished Chap1, excellent art style. I love the story so far. Good pacing on scenes. I love how the club chick that wants to bang you straight up contrasts with the slow buildup with Lindsay.
Has a lot of potential.
Can't wait for the stories involving Stacy and her.. neighbour. Or Kelly's.. err.. roommate and.. landlady.
Suggestion about the sketchbook; don't use Mousewheel Up/Down for UI elements, since the Ren'Py engine already uses them. It'd be better to simply have clickable corners or something.
Also, a few spelling errors, mostly with names;
The first time "Zack" is mentioned, it's "Zach".
Also, in your phone, "John" is spelled "Jhon", but the MC uses "John" when speaking.
While Zach/Jhon is an acceptable alternate of Zack/John, you'll need to pick one and stay consistent.
EDIT: OK, just finished Chap1, excellent art style. I love the story so far. Good pacing on scenes. I love how the club chick that wants to bang you straight up contrasts with the slow buildup with Lindsay.
Has a lot of potential.
Can't wait for the stories involving Stacy and her.. neighbour. Or Kelly's.. err.. roommate and.. landlady.
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