Ren'Py - Crepuscule [S1E011 v0.11] [Axel Shive]

Oof, it is bad, I mean badly written.

There is a story here, definitely, but the narration is all over the place, the quality is barley above a sausage pizza delivery, and the grammar...

Apparently the author is French speaking. Good, I am too, there is a French version too. But the French grammar seems to be as bad as the English one.

But even without the grammar, there are way too many ellipses, repetitions and inconsistencies.

It feels like the author just wants to rush things, and never takes the time to develop a scene. Worse than that, most scenes are cockblocked by a character that has nothing to do with said scene.

All characters have a backstory "they will tell not now, but at a later time", yeah, seriously, that's how they all introduce themselves.

Also, some scenes aren't even rendered.

This author needs an editor badly. A lot of AVN are plagued with remakes/remasters, but if there is a game that needs a full remaker, it's that one.

This one is one of a kind.
The Engrish is horrible.
You're forced into everything, including witnessing other LIs fuck each other.
Needless free roam that is clunky.
The renders are outdated and ugly.
Everything feels rushed and the story hops all over the place.
Needs a deep rework and probably a more talented writer.

I have read the all the nine available chapters, and I got bored on the first three chapters already. Clicking the space key to read this story is like playing Elder Scrolls I, II, or III frames by frames, or even worse. I know the author is ambitious about the story, of which, however, the characters' dialogs are short and tedious for reading. Not even mention the countless clicking the space button (or mouse). It definitely needs more interesting world settings and story plots, rather than a few non-necessary lesbians performances.