This is on version 0.7.
Dark Times is a collection of extremely short porn sequences, with absolutely no effort put forth to develop any form of character, corruption, or story.
Visuals are awful. There's very nearly zero attempt to keep the AI generated images consistent, and the real porn usage contrasts with the AI severely.
Pages have large spacing issues, sometimes having entire gaps in text going off-screen and requiring the player to scroll down to see their options.
Menus are missing stat information, the inventory doesn't account for items.
All-in-all, there's little salvageable here. It's just very clear the author does not know what they're doing.
Assuming the author reads this, here are some suggestions I have for them:
- Learn a bit more about the system you're using. The use of Twine is extremely basic, and while it doesn't have to be complex, it currently isn't working for you.
- Decide on whether you want to use exclusively real porn or exclusively AI. Given it's a fantasy setting, I really recommend the latter.
- Revise your image system. You need to learn about image formats, image compression, and should ditch the gifs as they're part of why the size of your game is ballooning and they're causing pages to load slowly. Yes, I recognize you want some "animated" visuals, no it's not working.
- Focus first on a few specific storylines you want to develop. As an example, the shady merchant hypnotizing you not progressing to anything makes the whole thing a tad silly. That's the biggest issue, nothing here leads into anything, you need depth over breadth.
- You have a lot of female characters you're not doing anything with. While it's clear you've intended them more as set pieces and bimbos, you may want to actually flesh a couple of them out to make it feel less absurd.
Dark Times is a collection of extremely short porn sequences, with absolutely no effort put forth to develop any form of character, corruption, or story.
Visuals are awful. There's very nearly zero attempt to keep the AI generated images consistent, and the real porn usage contrasts with the AI severely.
Pages have large spacing issues, sometimes having entire gaps in text going off-screen and requiring the player to scroll down to see their options.
Menus are missing stat information, the inventory doesn't account for items.
All-in-all, there's little salvageable here. It's just very clear the author does not know what they're doing.
Assuming the author reads this, here are some suggestions I have for them:
- Learn a bit more about the system you're using. The use of Twine is extremely basic, and while it doesn't have to be complex, it currently isn't working for you.
- Decide on whether you want to use exclusively real porn or exclusively AI. Given it's a fantasy setting, I really recommend the latter.
- Revise your image system. You need to learn about image formats, image compression, and should ditch the gifs as they're part of why the size of your game is ballooning and they're causing pages to load slowly. Yes, I recognize you want some "animated" visuals, no it's not working.
- Focus first on a few specific storylines you want to develop. As an example, the shady merchant hypnotizing you not progressing to anything makes the whole thing a tad silly. That's the biggest issue, nothing here leads into anything, you need depth over breadth.
- You have a lot of female characters you're not doing anything with. While it's clear you've intended them more as set pieces and bimbos, you may want to actually flesh a couple of them out to make it feel less absurd.