[Rev @ Ch. 2]
Art's nice, girls are good looking.
Writing needs work. Scenario is common, narrative is contrived and voice is thin. It's a disjointed sequence of things just happening to the MC, and the lack of buildup or agency makes the proceedings feel inconsequential. I like the characterization, but that could use more expansion as well.
Porn's alright, but again the lack of gravity in the plot makes it less interesting than it could be.
TLDR: Spending a bit more time on the writing would improve quality by a ton. Godspeed~
[Edit @ Depth's Revival Ch. 9 Part 1]
Bumping this to 4 stars via subjective enjoyment.
Art is still nice, but likely gets bonus points because it hits many entries in my kinkset.
Writing voice and characterization has improved since my original review, but the narrative is a bit inconsistent and silly.
Porn has also gotten better, but again I'm likely being more nice because preggo fetish. Do very much wish for more girl/girl or even just more convincing interpersonal scenes to bring across the harem life without seeming like a bunch of chicks that happen to be in the same place.
TLDR2: Gettin better~