Developing Something, The Mysterious Life of Max. What Do You Think?

[MaxTheWriter20]

Ok, I know nobody knows me here or heard of me. For the last year and a half I have been busy with a story because I was bored. Yes there is sex. If there is anything you would like for me to add into it I would most likely happily agree with besides maybe rape but I MIGHT add it 1 year later down the line. This is the gist of the story So here it is...

You are a man that has gone through trauma like no other. Everyone in your family has died except for one, your daughter. You could have saved them. A man is chasing you down for a reason you don't know. Will you ever love someone again? And will you find the mystery of the man chasing you? Or will you succumb to the stress and fuck everyone.

There will be customization of your choice and name changing when I have more time to develop this but as of right now only most of the story is finished and I just want to see if people are interested in this story.

Similar(I think this story is similar to. not exact!): Mad World, Happenstance, and Leap of Faith(not much but some).

Alert: This story is only for those who enjoy story and porn together no one else.
I will edit post.

 

[cisco_donovan]

Hi Max!

It's kinda hard to know what the story is here. You should think about using formatting (maybe italics) to distinguish your story test from your forum post.

What I can see here is a paragraph of text that looks like it might be part of a larger story? It's hard to read because it's not well formatted you should have line breaks between speech.

What I'm reading is neither a story overview (it doesn't really tell me what the story is about) nor is it an actual story (it's got no beginning, middle or end). So I'm not sure what you're looking for here

Good, clear formatting and spacing will make it easier for people to understand your post. That way, you might get more feedback.

 

[MaxTheWriter20]

Hi Max!

It's kinda hard to know what the story is here. You should think about using formatting (maybe italics) to distinguish your story test from your forum post.

What I can see here is a paragraph of text that looks like it might be part of a larger story? It's hard to read because it's not well formatted you should have line breaks between speech.

What I'm reading is neither a story overview (it doesn't really tell me what the story is about) nor is it an actual story (it's got no beginning, middle or end). So I'm not sure what you're looking for here

Good, clear formatting and spacing will make it easier for people to understand your post. That way, you might get more feedback.

Yeah I see what you mean, should of gone with the original draft. I was trying to tell the personality of the story but not spoil all of it but I guess I'll use the other draft instead(I have 2 others.) and thanks for the feed back, I guess I made the overview too confusing. It is part of a larger story. Line breaks, yeah I know I completely forgot line breaks, damn it knew I was forgetting something(No I didn't).