Does anybody want to test an intro to my game?

[LuxoGames]

I'm just looking for someone who would give me feedback on a short intro to my HTML text-based game before release.

This is just the intro, and I am planing on adding more content before the release.

Download link:

You must be registered to see the links

 

[LuxoGames]

I just would like to know what could be improved.