Does anyone have tips on writing good H dialogue?

123bandit

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Small story short its a game where you're stuck in a house and the person living with you is "trying their best". I haven't wrote any scenes yet, part cause im a little embarassed. But Im also a little lost on how to write good ones. Any tips?
 

Morte Dara

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First of all, it is your story! You can create anything you want. Don't hold yourself back while writing dialogues and scenes.

-Don't hold anything back and create your own story based on whatever you want.
-Think of the background information of your characters first. Try to make them detailed as people first.
-Then put them in a situation or a scene where they would act like themselves.
-Think about the details and take notes of the environment you have created, this will help you to decide on the motivations of the characters when you are writing a dialogue between them.

I can't give you tips for H dialogue because I don't know what you want to create. I wanted to help you with some basics that I use while I'm writing dialogues etc. I hope it helped!
 

Morte Dara

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Another tip I can give:

-Create a text file that you write details about the character A first.
-Make it detailed as possible. Believe me you will find it much easier when you want to expand your dialogues as you will check that list and say "ah she would reply this question like this" etc.
 

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My advice would be don't get hung up on "good". What even is good? Everyone has different tastes and often the story and/or artwork are more important than the actual writing.

So just sit down and write the bastard thing down. Even if it feels bad.

You can always come back and edit it later, but try and avoid the temptation to edit as you write, or to optimise every line - just try and move foward with it. The less you have to THINK about the writing, the better the scene will be.
 

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My advice would be don't get hung up on "good". What even is good?
Since OP seem to focus on the "H dialog", I guess that it's the lewd parts, and here it's even worse than "what even is good". Looks at what is seen as lewd by yourself and your SO when you talk together trying to raise the mood, and think about it as seen from the outside... lame as fuck, right ? Yeah, we are all at this point.

"Hmm, you're so exciting in this dress. Come here, I'll eat your pussy, then make you scream my name while I pound you hard like you love it so much".
Who talk like this outside of stories ? Well, to be fair, all of us, but just punctually. When we really are as excited it's really not what we say. And we just want to set the mood, it's generally personal references that we use, things that are really hot, but only for her/him and us.

H dialog are hard to write because either they feel flat and unnatural, or they feel like directly coming from the cheapest porn movie.
 
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H dialog are hard to write because either they feel flat and unnatural, or they feel like directly coming from the cheapest porn movie.
"Ah...Ahhh" came the resplendent cooing's of pleasure, rapt and apt pleasure, as the battering ram like penis continually thrust into the back door, eliciting the sexual stimulation of the mind each time a nerve was touched on each movement. *Smack* came the sound resounding across the room, a cacophony of sounds to add to the sweat and musky scent of pure unadulterated sex as he brought his hand down across the rather nice delicious looking bottom he was currently impaled within.

"Whose my bitch?"

"Y...you are daddy" came the halting reply beneath a sultry bitten lip, that lustful look behind signalling more desire. It was answered swiftly as the resounds of cheeks came forth more frequent as the pace picked up. His grip behind on that ass was absolute, here, as he made every effort to turn that ass into the front part of a blowhorn, he felt himself building up to the ultimate crescendo.

For the one receiving, there was scarce any time to prepare for the onslaught of hot and wet sperm, it flooded the innards of the bowels, liquid conclusion of lust and love between two such people, as the one giving pulled out with a *pop* of air a trickle of husky man fat flowed down between the legs of the bottom partner.

"S...so...did I pass the test?" came the halting words from the one who had received such a lustful loving.

The other looked down and smiled at him...

"Of course" he said twirling his moustache "Congratulations, you are now an F95 Moderator".
 

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"Ah...Ahhh" came the resplendent cooing's of pleasure, rapt and apt pleasure, as the battering ram like penis continually thrust into the back door, eliciting the sexual stimulation of the mind each time a nerve was touched on each movement. *Smack* came the sound resounding across the room, a cacophony of sounds to add to the sweat and musky scent of pure unadulterated sex as he brought his hand down across the rather nice delicious looking bottom he was currently impaled within.

"Whose my bitch?"

"Y...you are daddy" came the halting reply beneath a sultry bitten lip, that lustful look behind signalling more desire. It was answered swiftly as the resounds of cheeks came forth more frequent as the pace picked up. His grip behind on that ass was absolute, here, as he made every effort to turn that ass into the front part of a blowhorn, he felt himself building up to the ultimate crescendo.

For the one receiving, there was scarce any time to prepare for the onslaught of hot and wet sperm, it flooded the innards of the bowels, liquid conclusion of lust and love between two such people, as the one giving pulled out with a *pop* of air a trickle of husky man fat flowed down between the legs of the bottom partner.

"S...so...did I pass the test?" came the halting words from the one who had received such a lustful loving.

The other looked down and smiled at him...

"Of course" he said twirling his moustache "Congratulations, you are now an F95 Moderator".
"S-s... sam-senpai?!"

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On a serious note: If you need help and are feeling writers block, maybe gaze something on topic from the Hamster, the Hub or Nhentai to get your juices flowing (heh). Or better yet, a sex friend or lover if one applies. Also, taking a break and going somewhere can help. Pressuring yourself can make writers block worse.
 

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"Whose my bitch?"

"Y...you are daddy" came the halting reply beneath a sultry bitten lip, [...]
Wow... this girl have some nerves ;)


Also, taking a break and going somewhere can help. Pressuring yourself can make writers block worse.
This should be the first advice gave to anyone who "works" on a creative field.
 

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The best advice for writing good sex scenes is to read a ton of porn stories on Literotica, ASSTR, etc, find a writer whose style you think is hot and try to learn from that and emulate it. Obviously writing for a VN is different than a full story, but it will give you some ideas.
 
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This should be the first advice gave to anyone who "works" on a creative field.
It really is the cure sometimes. Momentarily distracting yourself, Taking a timeout and returning is usually and by far the best solution. Sometimes its not creative lull, you are just getting burnt out and need a break. Excessive procrastination is bad, but taking a break to clear you head for little is never a bad idea. If you have a good community and they are supportive and understanding, they wont mind a delay to ensure everything is up to snuff. This is what the best devs like 4MinuteWarning, Runey and recreation have all figured out. Also, some of your fellow devs MAY be willing to offer advice. Never hurts to ask a question. Worst answer is NO.
 
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My advise.
Keep it short.

So many "stories" are just using 50000 words where 50 would be enough.
Dont write what we can see on screen.
Stuff like:
My mother got some nice big tits.
I can see them(Also i dont like my main character having opinions)
Or There are some sweet fries on the table.
Again i can see that.

You shoud try to avoid the trap of many games.
And that trap is adding stuff that dont matter.
One of the biggest reason i start skipping is because they just drone on and one about stuff i coudnt care less about.
Keep it short, easy to read and above all:
Need to know.

I suggest checking out superpowered and the lab rats 1&2 games.
They got good writting.

An example:
I had some lovely breakfast = good.
I eat bread this morning, drank some water, watch my mothers tits = Bad.

You eat breakfast is all you need to know.
 
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An advice that's been very useful to me is:
Use subtext. Oftentimes characters should say things, but really mean another thing entirely. Try to mimic real life mannerisms, and it will breathe life into your writing. Don't just clobber the reader in the head with obvious things, but try leading them to draw their own conclusions.