[Edited review after reaching the end of the current content]
Firstly, I typically only give games a try after reading through a few reviews, so I have a better idea of what to expect and where to set my expectations. As the majority of reviews were very positive, I decided to try it. I can't help but think that perhaps the other reviews might have had access to another version of the game, because the one I played didn't match up to any of the 4/5 star ratings. The game certainly has some positive things going for it though, both the music and the design of the love interests are solid. The girls look distinct both from each other and from all of the other generic ones you see in many other games. Also, a lesbian focused game is a rarity, so I really hate to be so critical of a game in this genre.
Now for the bad:
The main character looks disturbing. I get that she isn't meant to look stunning (even though almost everyone she meets says she is) but DAMN!! Any passion or arousal that might have been building in any given scene is completely quelled by one look at that face. It's not outright ugly, far from it, it's just disturbing and off-putting. Top that off with a wardrobe selection that makes it look as though she's bought most of her clothes from Sluts 'R' Us. Seriously, the clothing selection for the MC (and some of the other characters) make it look that they were dressed by a horny thirteen year old lad. Also (sorry for another addendum to the same topic) but when at the start there's talk of a makeover, that hope is kindled in taking our ugly duckling and seeing her blossom into a swan... we simply get a bad long hair style replaced by (I would argue even worse) bad shorter hair style. At least there's an option later to decide on 'shaved or unshaved'.
Another really glaring issue with the game is the lack of proof reading. From the very beginning, there are misspelt words and grammar issues. I've played a couple of games where the author's first language wasn't English, so they've had to rely on a translation but that's not the case here (or at least I don't believe so). No, this is (imo) a dev that is likely dyslexic and for some reason seems adverse to not only using a basic spell check but also doesn't have anyone proof read what they've written. There are errors in what feels like every second or third dialogue box and sometimes in several in a row. This is a huge shame because the quality of the writing isn't actually that bad, it's just that reading it is a chore, as you're constantly having to mentally correct what's written. There is also a weird mix of English and American English that is slightly baffling. With all the spelling errors it's hard to say which is more prominent but there's Americanisms such as 'Mom' contrasted with UK currency references, with both 'pounds and quid' appearing.
Yet another issue with this (for me at least) is that it's very clearly a lesbian focused story, written by a man. Firstly, the whole thing is written in the third person, which is a very odd choice. Also. almost every time something even vaguely stimulating happens to the MC, it's almost immediately commented on at how wet she's getting. Sorry to burst any bubbles here but it doesn't work that way (most of the time anyhow). Take a look at the lesbian routes in games written by women and you'll see a variety of ways to convey feminine arousal that doesn't equate to someone activating the sprinkler system in her undies. A change to the first person would be a big improvement, as would a greater variety of language being used to convey arousal.
After reaching the current end-point (an ending that sprang up far sooner than I anticipated considering how long ago this game was first posted on the site), I'm not really feeling too inclined to revisit the game and explore other paths, currently there are sadly too many negative issues impacting my enjoyment of this title to warrant another play. Going forward, even if the dev can only change one thing, I would implore him to make that change with the proof reading, hell, even a basic spell checker would be a step in the right direction, though I have read that he apparently does use one (if so, I'd highly recommend finding a better one).
Firstly, I typically only give games a try after reading through a few reviews, so I have a better idea of what to expect and where to set my expectations. As the majority of reviews were very positive, I decided to try it. I can't help but think that perhaps the other reviews might have had access to another version of the game, because the one I played didn't match up to any of the 4/5 star ratings. The game certainly has some positive things going for it though, both the music and the design of the love interests are solid. The girls look distinct both from each other and from all of the other generic ones you see in many other games. Also, a lesbian focused game is a rarity, so I really hate to be so critical of a game in this genre.
Now for the bad:
The main character looks disturbing. I get that she isn't meant to look stunning (even though almost everyone she meets says she is) but DAMN!! Any passion or arousal that might have been building in any given scene is completely quelled by one look at that face. It's not outright ugly, far from it, it's just disturbing and off-putting. Top that off with a wardrobe selection that makes it look as though she's bought most of her clothes from Sluts 'R' Us. Seriously, the clothing selection for the MC (and some of the other characters) make it look that they were dressed by a horny thirteen year old lad. Also (sorry for another addendum to the same topic) but when at the start there's talk of a makeover, that hope is kindled in taking our ugly duckling and seeing her blossom into a swan... we simply get a bad long hair style replaced by (I would argue even worse) bad shorter hair style. At least there's an option later to decide on 'shaved or unshaved'.
Another really glaring issue with the game is the lack of proof reading. From the very beginning, there are misspelt words and grammar issues. I've played a couple of games where the author's first language wasn't English, so they've had to rely on a translation but that's not the case here (or at least I don't believe so). No, this is (imo) a dev that is likely dyslexic and for some reason seems adverse to not only using a basic spell check but also doesn't have anyone proof read what they've written. There are errors in what feels like every second or third dialogue box and sometimes in several in a row. This is a huge shame because the quality of the writing isn't actually that bad, it's just that reading it is a chore, as you're constantly having to mentally correct what's written. There is also a weird mix of English and American English that is slightly baffling. With all the spelling errors it's hard to say which is more prominent but there's Americanisms such as 'Mom' contrasted with UK currency references, with both 'pounds and quid' appearing.
Yet another issue with this (for me at least) is that it's very clearly a lesbian focused story, written by a man. Firstly, the whole thing is written in the third person, which is a very odd choice. Also. almost every time something even vaguely stimulating happens to the MC, it's almost immediately commented on at how wet she's getting. Sorry to burst any bubbles here but it doesn't work that way (most of the time anyhow). Take a look at the lesbian routes in games written by women and you'll see a variety of ways to convey feminine arousal that doesn't equate to someone activating the sprinkler system in her undies. A change to the first person would be a big improvement, as would a greater variety of language being used to convey arousal.
After reaching the current end-point (an ending that sprang up far sooner than I anticipated considering how long ago this game was first posted on the site), I'm not really feeling too inclined to revisit the game and explore other paths, currently there are sadly too many negative issues impacting my enjoyment of this title to warrant another play. Going forward, even if the dev can only change one thing, I would implore him to make that change with the proof reading, hell, even a basic spell checker would be a step in the right direction, though I have read that he apparently does use one (if so, I'd highly recommend finding a better one).
