VN Ren'Py Abandoned E.X.P.E.L.L.E.D [v0.1.4] [HopeEsth]

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Overview:
E.X.P.E.L.L.E.D is a game about the MC (Main Character) that lost his parents when he was younger and now is living with his 2 friends that are daughters from his mom's best friend. The older girl is Claire and is more strict and there is Violet the younger one which is more daring.​

Thread Updated: 2019-08-05
Release Date: 2019-08-05
Developer: HopeEsth
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Version: 0.1.4
OS: Windows - Linux - Mac
Language: English
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djkunn said:
he should explain what FR+ with different colours means.... rather than just start the game right away...:unsure:
i think it stands for Friend+ but since there is different colours who knows...
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Yes, my bad on that, I am already setting up a basics screen for the next update, FR goes for Friendship Points and L for Lust points, the L route will get you more intimate scenes but the FR points can lead to a few more romantic scenes but I am still seeing about that.
 
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Although there's nothing special about plot right now, this can still be good. I'm really curious, what will become of this. Is it gonna be porn game (sex sex sex)? or game with adult content (one with emotional storytelling)? Drama? Romance? Thriller? Something else?

Also: Do I need to play it with 'incest path' for the story to make more sense?
 
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  • Another incest game... /yahn
  • Player named main character. Warning sign of a generic main character. So generic that the default name is MC LOLOLOL.
  • Writing early on, while mostly proper, feels amateur. Sentences feel very awkward to read at times. Feels like English might be a second language.
  • Some missing punctuation, a few misspellings and run on sentences.
  • Substitute mother character feels in character. Good job. Mom waking you up was an immersive scene. Make the other scenes feel like that.
  • Main character looks good. Little old for a high school student though.
  • Would a teenager who has been expelled from a school have this much confidence? To me this reads as unbelievable and ruins immersion. IS MC the high school quarterback? Why does he have so much confidence? Normally teenagers don't have this much confidence.
  • Wait MC has a ton of confidence, looks sexy, but is a virgin. Something doesn't add up right.
  • This teenager Violet has tits that are to big for her body. Not only are her tits to big her body is to thick. This is not a teenager.
  • What is the point of portraying youth in high school when you make everyone look old? Why not make this college where the body types would be more natural? Ohhh you want to play on innocence, but then you should make them look younger... You can't have it both ways IMO.
  • Personally I like to see all shapes and sizes, I want to see a teenager who is petite with small breasts, but I want to also see a thick voluptuous women. When you look around in life you don't see only one body size for women.
  • The MC's dick is exaggerated and huge. I'm not saying it has normal sized but when it's this big it looks dumb to me.
  • Adopted mom saying HUGE dick makes women happy. That makes me think the creator of this game hasn't actually talked to women in real life. That is a cliche that mostly is not true. Talk to dudes with a big dick or women... It's one thing to have big dicks, it's another to worship them in the dialogue.
  • Demo is super short.
I like high school games but this one doesn't read as believable for me. They don't act young, they don't look young, and it just doesn't feel immersive me to.

Ways to fix this?
  • I think the writing needs to be edited so sentences are easier to read and are error free.
  • Bodies can stay the same, though personally I would change them to look younger for being teenagers.
  • I think the character development needs to be fixed. MC and Violet don't read as believable characters.
  • Have a direction for the game. What is the point of playing, trying to graduate?
At this stage I guess I'm at a 2/5. It has potential but I don't feel like anything is immersive. Note this being a demo, it is the perfect time to fix mistakes before there is to much fix. With some fixes to make characters believable then this could easily jump into the 4/5.
 
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kshyk said:
Although there's nothing special about plot right now, this can still be good. I'm really curious, what will become of this. Is it gonna be porn game (sex sex sex)? or game with adult content (one with emotional storytelling)? Drama? Romance? Thriller? Something else?

Also: Do I need to play it with 'incest path' for the story to make more sense?
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For now I plan the emotional storytelling plan, with a few twists and things.
Also you don't need the incest for the story to make sense. It will be ok without it
 
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Opinions...
Note, I am just one man, other people will disagree with me and that's fine.
  • Another incest game... /yahn
  • Player named main character. Warning sign of a generic main character. So generic that the default name is MC LOLOLOL.
  • Writing early on, while mostly proper, feels amateur. Sentences feel very awkward to read at times. Feels like English might be a second language.
  • Some missing punctuation, a few misspellings and run on sentences.
  • Substitute mother character feels in character. Good job. Mom waking you up was an immersive scene. Make the other scenes feel like that.
  • Main character looks good. Little old for a high school student though.
  • Would a teenager who has been expelled from a school have this much confidence? To me this reads as unbelievable and ruins immersion. IS MC the high school quarterback? Why does he have so much confidence? Normally teenagers don't have this much confidence.
  • Wait MC has a ton of confidence, looks sexy, but is a virgin. Something doesn't add up right.
  • This teenager Violet has tits that are to big for her body. Not only are her tits to big her body is to thick. This is not a teenager.
  • What is the point of portraying youth in high school when you make everyone look old? Why not make this college where the body types would be more natural? Ohhh you want to play on innocence, but then you should make them look younger... You can't have it both ways IMO.
  • Personally I like to see all shapes and sizes, I want to see a teenager who is petite with small breasts, but I want to also see a thick voluptuous women. When you look around in life you don't see only one body size for women.
  • The MC's dick is exaggerated and huge. I'm not saying it has normal sized but when it's this big it looks dumb to me.
  • Adopted mom saying HUGE dick makes women happy. That makes me think the creator of this game hasn't actually talked to women in real life. That is a cliche that mostly is not true. Talk to dudes with a big dick or women... It's one thing to have big dicks, it's another to worship them in the dialogue.
  • Demo is super short.
I like high school games but this one doesn't read as believable for me. They don't act young, they don't look young, and it just doesn't feel immersive me to.

Ways to fix this?
  • I think the writing needs to be edited so sentences are easier to read and are error free.
  • Bodies can stay the same, though personally I would change them to look younger for being teenagers.
  • I think the character development needs to be fixed. MC and Violet don't read as believable characters.
  • Have a direction for the game. What is the point of playing, trying to graduate?
At this stage I guess I'm at a 2/5. It has potential but I don't feel like anything is immersive. Note this being a demo, it is the perfect time to fix mistakes before there is to much fix. With some fixes to make characters believable then this could easily jump into the 4/5.
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Damn was there ANYTHING you liked?:oops:
 
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