VN - Ren'Py - Eden Without Adam [Demo] [OneManVN]

Me review this funny demo. (might come back after the game gets out of demo)

Classic zombie story where a person surviving with a dog very classic.

Did not expect for the MC to stumble upon a cult of women who think males give diseases and corrupt women, Femdom may or might happen.

Also how does a cult of women get a working shower, a full working animal farm and guns in the apoc?

and here is things that might appear in the story
- FEMDOM
- Old woman sex
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Pros
- Non visualable MC face (finally I can say the MC is a handsome guy)
- Very good graphics
- Possible for the story
- Appealing and good looking women
- Background did well with the artstyle

Cons
- The younger sisters wear the same ass shirt that says no man's land with A in the back (are they in a shirt factory?)
- Story starts good but slowly turns into poor writing like the other anon said.
- The whole story music is just dystopian music.
- leaving cliffhangers for other minor characters.

OVERALL!
Very good graphics for a game and leaving much potential for the story to come and give to the players.

Demo version reviewed

This game is about the MC and his dog trying to survive during a zombie apocalypse.

During a foraging run the MC is confronted by two females. The females, having never seen a man before and having been told that men are dangerous, knock the MC unconscious and take him back to their base.

Here we learn that the Matriarch, for reasons unknown, despises men and has dictated to her female flock that all men are dangerous and should be killed. One of the senior members of the group disagrees and requests that the MC be kept in a holding cell for observation.

Shortly after, two young females approach the MC in his cell and ask him if he has a "peenus". From this point on the game gets rather silly and the demo ends shortly after.

Pros:

1- The story has potential if the writing can be improved.

2- Atmospheric sets and mood music.

3- Decent looking females. ( You don't see the MC's face.)

Cons:

1- The story falls short due to poor writing. One example is when the MC notes that the apocalypse has been on going for ten years, yet the 20 year old females never saw a man before. Where were they living ten years earlier?

Another example is when a sexy redhead female asks the MC if she can see his "peenus", then he scolds her for touching it without his approval. This guy hasn't seen a female in ten years, his cock is harder than an aluminum baseball bat, and he doesn't let the hot female satisfy him? And then he complains about not getting lucky after she walks away?

There are also other scenes which I believe were meant to be humorous but come off as awkward instead.

2- The dialogue, albeit not awful, is basic at best.

3- Grainy art style. Unsure if this was by choice or a hardware issue.

4- Very average renders.

Final thoughts-

The story was mildly interesting and has potential, but will sink or swim depending on the writing. The renders are also not very interesting and will require a good story to keep the reader interested.

Since the art style is not the main selling point here I would suggest the dev seek help with the writing to make the story more appealing.

Good luck.