VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Eldoria [v0.1] [Dreamveil]

What the peak shit for 0.1. Decent renders, good animation, anime characters damn seriously. Though it's kinetic but for 0.1 I am rating it 5 stars. There seem to be too many things at the start but it's not that much it's just a lot of sexy characters introduced. Will depend on how the story unflods. Will change ratings if needed after 0.5

I'm giving this a 1/5 purely because the ONLY positive I can say is the models look nice, other than the MC - in my opinion.

The plot and writing so far isn't very good, and nothing about it excites me. There are a lot of beautiful women from different anime, and sure they are nice too look at, but why are they there? To me, having all these characters from different universes randomly in this just feels weird, other games that do this usually have a tie-in. Lastly, and the killer for me, is none of the characters are remotely interesting, so I don't really care or connected with any of them.

In conclusion, the Dev has some skills, but desperately needs to improve upon his scripting and writing skills. No mater how great a game may look, it won't be received well if the story and characters are boring

Oh where do I even start?

Ok. That fired bullet scene really ticked me off. That is in fact a bullet all right. But that is what it looks like when you take it out of teh box and load it into the weapon. Not how it looks when it has been fired at all! REsearch! Research! Research!

Why is this whole thing a poorly written mesh of characters that are well done and just being tossed together here? Sure they look great but it takes a hell of a lot more than just looks. Oh and trees with dicks are not sexy. Just saying.

This back and forth is highly annoying ESPECIALLY since you can't just skip your way through this poorly written mash up of nonsensical story line.

No unless this seriously improves I will be giving this one a wide pass! I will give it one more shot in the future and if it does not show me something then I am done.

Oh and that thanks for playing at the end.....My God! No need for that shit. Just let us quit and go if you please! I don't need to be stuck in 50,000 pictures shown that I have to escape key to get to a menu and quit from. Good way to piss people off. Pissed people don't become fans. Just saying.

to start im a sucker for mcs who are strong specially when super powers are involved. if they have a dark side that can come out when they get mad i like it even better. i barely review games only this one and companions of darkness ahve compelled me to do so.

i see alot of reviews where the poster seems im not sure...picky? i dont mind what names or who they base there charecters on. i either want a great story or a good sotry with great sex scenes. thats all i require...anything more then that i feel should be reserved for actual games like xbox...not a porn game. having said all that heres my 2 cents.


1. Quality...i feel like its top notch every render looks detailed and visually pops out to me. probably because i am running out of new games to try and i have been looking at alot of low tier ones. either way i love the way it looks. it straigh up reminds me of eternium...not many games do that.

2 animation/sex scene. too many i found the main scene to be top notch. remember this is the first release of this game...alot of games dont even have sex scenes in the first release....let alone one of this qulaity. each release theyll just get better. multiple positions and if your a ass man then by god your gunna wanna watch it. its not that robotic looking crap that is hard to get into and is like 2 frames on repeat.

2. story...well im already hooked. hes already shown himself to be strong and also have humor you can laugh too. Hes basically a demon king with dark powers he has to keep under control so he dont hurt people he wasnt trying toi. yes there are waifus in here but honey select style instead or cartoonish...thats a first fore me to see. .but does it honestly matter what the girls names are or who they might be based off in the long run? im a simple man if there hot im all for it. noone remembers the girls names just what they looked .

gameplay.. its a satandard renbpy visial noval no extra time waister to worry about.

all in all im super excited for this one. if people rate this low im guessing they havent plan hundreds of h games yet and dont realize how good this game has the potential to be. my advice is to try it before you read reviews and base your choice of what others thing. i felt for a first realize it had alot to offer and im excited for the next releases

theres a reason people tend not to care what movie critics say about a movie and focus on what the actually audience score is. dont let reviews scare you from finding a potentially amazing game in the future. hope that helped im not a pro reviewer i only do it for games that really suck me and ifeel there deserving of more exposure.

Finished the first version and it was pretty well made:
>The renders are beautiful (nealry looking like the top tier games here). >Short fighting scenes with effects and a good nsfw scene.
>guess will be a Harem game with a more "darker" setting. (right now 1-2 choices but feels more like a kinetic novel atm.)
>Characters looking beautiful but are obviously from famous animes/games packed in a different story.
Will keep an eye on it cause I liked it and I am into Albedo

I think some of the previous reviews are a bit harsh.

The production value is pretty good and a lot of effort has clearly gone into this. I'm interested to see how this develops over the next couple of updates as this release was seemingly about laying the groundwork and setting the scene. At this point it could go either way, but there's promise

Overall: 2/5
Not to be critical or harsh, but I think there are too many inconsistencies and mistakes and this first release. It shows the developers understanding of renders and HS2, but it lacks choices and a proper writing/plot. To begin with the game is mostly a kinetic novel because giving players the illusion of choice isn't enough for it to be called a proper VN. Secondly, plot wise I felt like it was a mishmash of your favorite cliche fantasy anime/manga plot devices rolled into one. It lacks the fundamental understanding of development of character motivation and underdeveloped worldbuilding.
The project feels more like a showcase of visual skills than a complete, thought-out experience. It would greatly benefit from a stronger foundation in narrative structure, meaningful choice integration, and a clearer sense of direction. I hope future updates reflect a more nuanced understanding of visual novel development.

I could write exactly the same review as pemoj below: unfortunately, this game suffers greatly and most likely irreparably from it taking random characters from various anime and just inserting them for absolutely no reason other than to showcase the dev's HS2 skills - which are quite good. That said I can't help but hate the way the MC looks.

Overall it's a real shame since the game feels more like a showcase of anime characters rendered in HS2 than a real attempt at telling a compelling story. Either way I wish the developer luck and hope he can address some of these issues.

Note : some of the music included could constitute copyright infringement, which has been an issue for other devs in the past.

Review of Eldoria 0.1, aka I grab a bunch of scenes and characters from various Japanese anime franchises, throw them all into a blender, make something out of whatever comes out, and call it a "game."

Graphics – 4/5
An “HS2 virtuoso” in action. The visual quality is very high. I’m not giving it a 5 because many characters’ hair—especially the protagonist’s—is low quality. Surprising that an HS2 virtuoso doesn’t know how to properly render hair. Or maybe, if a wig gives you trouble, just replace it with one that looks good. Beyond some hair issues, the graphics are excellent—with a few big BUTs I’ll mention later.

Animations – 5/5
Excellent. Both sexual and non-sexual animations are plentiful, varied, and well-crafted, with tons of camera effects, shadows, lighting, and movement, among others effects.

Music and Audio – N/A
I usually mute the sound when playing. From what little I did hear, it was good. But others should judge this category.

Gameplay – 1/5
It’s a kinetic novel where the only choices are entering your name (and getting killed by a character no matter what you pick) and deciding whether or not to watch a character get raped, then killed right after, and how do you want to fuck Asuka. The UI is simple but has some work behind it and, like the novel, it’s bug-free.
The big problem with almost all HS2 virtuosos (and this one is no exception) is that they use the excuse of creating a visual or kinetic novel just to show the world the amazing renders they can do with HS2. They get lost in their graphical virtuosity and build everything around it. It feels like the scenes aren’t there to show characters, plots, or subplots—they exist so the developer can admire his own rendering skills. Worse still, many scenes (graphically) are based on public HS2 scenes made by others. At least half of the scenes in the intro video (probably all of them) were created using scenes created by others. Not just the videos—the protagonist’s apartment is actually a demo scene made by a well-known modder, to whom all HS2 virtuosos owe their virtuosity. So, is the game’s high graphic quality due to the developer’s work or someone else’s? I’d say it’s half and half.
There’s also a lot of text that feels pompous and superfluous—filler meant to give a sense of literary depth, but in reality, it’s just empty words.
Let’s not even talk about the developer’s obsession with well-developed asses.

Plot – 1/5
A reverse isekai. The MC is half-human, half-demon, son of the demon king. There’s a rebellion in the demon world that ends with the death of the protagonist’s father and a brutal invasion of other races’ realms. Before dying, the father sends the MC to Earth and closes the portals. Now, the protagonist tries to live a normal life, ignoring what’s happening in his old world, while both humans and demons try to find him and bring him back.
The story isn’t very original, but it’s not overused either. However, originality is totally lacking for several reasons.
First, as I said in the gameplay section: the developer prefers to render excellent images rather than tell a story. Many scenes are unnecessary: the forest intro, the protagonist’s apartment, etc. They exist only to showcase the developer’s HS2 skills—or someone else’s.
Some scenes do serve a narrative purpose, but most don’t, weakening the storytelling.
Second major reason: characters (see below).

Characters – 0 and a bit more / 5
Strange way to rate, I know. Why a zero? Because not a single character—except maybe the protagonist—is original to this story.
The first one you meet is the friend of the MC of a famous visual novel. So forgettable he gets in a car crash and is never mentioned again. Why is he even here? Again, because the developer is an HS2 virtuoso, and everything revolves around that.
The rest of the cast is a meaningless collection of characters from well-known anime franchises.
Half of them are just there to show up—totally pointless. Instead of making a random NPC with original name and appearance, the developer just inserts characters from his favorite anime.
The other half are important characters in the game… but they’re only important in other franchises.
If we see Asuna from Sword Art Online, we expect to see Sword Art Online’s Asuna—not a random version of her in a mashup story with other out-of-place characters. And it’s not even her personality—it just looks like her. Will she use a rapier like in SAO? Who knows—IT DOESN’T MATTER. BECAUSE THIS ISN’T THE REAL ASUNA. Personalities are completely different.
Huge mistake by the developer. That’s why it deserves a zero: no originality, and even worse—it destroys the originals.
They are well modeled, though… or rather, others modeled them well. Just like with the scenes, these characters are taken from various popular free sites for Illusion games. Hence the “and a bit more” in the score—still not enough for a full point.
Returning to the story, the use of famous characters with mismatched personalities is a good metaphor for the plot itself: after all the drama and filler scenes, my impression is… there is no plot.
To me, this first chapter feels more like a prolonged prologue than the beginning of a novel.

Final Thoughts
Another HS2 virtuoso who’s forgotten what matters most in a novel. Doesn’t matter if it’s a visual novel, kinetic novel, or text novel—A NOVEL MUST TELL A STORY. Graphics are important, but they’re secondary. In this work, I see no storytelling, no narrative, no meaningful scenes. Only beautiful renders. A shame. While many may not care, to me, this is the reason why I can’t give the game a good rating.
If the developer focused on telling a good story, instead of just rendering or writing pompous filler scenes, this could be a good project—maybe even more than good.
As it stands today, it’s just a collection of renders and characters from countless franchises.

I wasn’t expecting much going in, but this game turned out to be a real gem. The art is beautiful, the animations are smooth, and the character design is top-notch. It’s clear the developers put real effort into it.

Just finished the prologue.
- Girls look good except every one of them has a hug butt. Maybe make the butts fit the girls frame better
- Learn what a bullet looks like when its fired. The entire thing doesn't come out of a gun looking like that.
- There is no choices. This might be due to how short the prologue is. I would have at least like one or two even if it had no game consequences
- I very much like the game concept but there is not enough there to really get a feel for it.

Images are Great. Has excellent Potential. Gonna follow this one. If animation will be also that promising, than it could be one of the best games. Reminds me a little bit of Eternum and Ripples. Maybe a new banger?

Great Potential to be in the top 5, top 10. Great models, the story has a lot to give. The main character could be more humble and have improved humor.
Other then that, seems great, 5 starts! Thank you for the game and keep the great work! Good Luck

Short prologue but first impression is pretty good. Looks like dark fantasy parody with most well known anime characters. Renders are amazing and the flashback video scene is well timed. Also good music choice. But the size is way to big. If the game is getting more renders - they should be compressed somehow. Will definitely keep both eyes on it.