VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Ellen Vague [v0.2] [LongJohnnyWalker]

Not much here yet, it seems like it's going to a mystery which intrigued me. The MC is a 30'ish woman and seems like most of the sex partners right now appear to be about the same age or older. So far there was only one sex scene and was kind of lesbian vanilla scene. I'll check out further if there is more release.

For a first version this is excellent and already has some decent content.
The story starts quickly and is engaging (considering the genre).
I like the characters, not quite as generic as usual.
Definitely worth putting it on watch list.

1. an error in the composition of a dramaturgical work. The story should begin BEFORE the play begins. The play should begin with the first conflict or the first significant event. Absolutely NOTHING happens in this game. We are playing a PORN game and expecting the events of romance. A dead body, police, bikers, detective is not what is interesting in PORN/romance context.

2. Unattractive protagonist. I see prettier women at the checkout when I go shopping in a shop. If I am denied the opportunity to be beautiful even in a video game, it annoys and frustrates me.

3. Poor work with light, shadow, colour. The colour of the protagonist's body is not natural, too yellow, and the lighting is even and uniform, which does not allow to outline the volume of figures. As a result, the characters seem flat.

4. Pointless, leading nowhere conversations. In literature, only dialogue that moves the plot forward should be shown.

5. Trivial story. This is a common cliché of all western short stories created by people who don't live in the USA. White American woman, moves to another town, girlfriend is a lesbian, and just starts f&ck everyone. Either California/New York or rednecks.