So the dev want's to write a serious, plot-driven VN. This means I will hold the writing to a higher standard than I would if I this was just a silly fuckfest porno VN.
The dialogue can be very clunky. Apparently the MC has known this elf girl for 6 years, yet they speak like they barely know eachother. The dev uses their conversations for exposition purposes and it comes across very unnatural and forced.
However, it's obvious that this is probably a translation or ESL dev, so I don't want to be too hard on this aspect of the game. I don't expect perfect english out of my porno VN's lmao.
Where the main reason for the bad review comes from is the dev's bizarre insistence on skipping extremely important conversations. There is an incident where our character seems to die but is saved by a goddess. This goddess essentially wants to recruit us to achieve some goal. Great. Just as she is about to tell us what this goal is, we fade-to-black.
Next thing we know, the MC says "yes, I agree, I want to do the right thing." and starts talking about choosing between "evil and lesser evil."
Like what the fuck are we talking about? All I know is that there are other gods that might be causing a conflict, and we are going to choose to do [REDACTED] because the MC thinks its the right thing, so that we can achieve [REDACTED].
So now, the character who's thoughts we can read and who we make choices for, has a goal. Unfortunately, we don't have a single clue what that goal is beyond it being "the right thing." How am I supposed to get invested in the story and the protagonist if I have no idea what I am doing or why I am doing it? Every scene that comes after just falls flat, because why tf would I care? I don't know the stakes, how important our actions are, why I am taking any of the actions I am taking. IDK if the dev thinks this is some cool mystery, but it's just bad writing.
A couple scenes later, we are trying to recruit this sorcerer girl to our [REDACTED] cause so we can accomplish [REDACTED], and she says she has some very important conditions. Guess what, fade-to-black, MC agrees. Apparently, these [REDACTED] conditions are so important that we need to make a magical vow to uphold them.
I genuinely don't know if the dev thinks this is somehow some kind of intriguing mystery, but it isn't. Frankly, it comes across as lazy. Like it would be too difficult to write a compelling scene, so just handwave it and hope the player doesn't care.
The dialogue can be very clunky. Apparently the MC has known this elf girl for 6 years, yet they speak like they barely know eachother. The dev uses their conversations for exposition purposes and it comes across very unnatural and forced.
However, it's obvious that this is probably a translation or ESL dev, so I don't want to be too hard on this aspect of the game. I don't expect perfect english out of my porno VN's lmao.
Where the main reason for the bad review comes from is the dev's bizarre insistence on skipping extremely important conversations. There is an incident where our character seems to die but is saved by a goddess. This goddess essentially wants to recruit us to achieve some goal. Great. Just as she is about to tell us what this goal is, we fade-to-black.
Next thing we know, the MC says "yes, I agree, I want to do the right thing." and starts talking about choosing between "evil and lesser evil."
Like what the fuck are we talking about? All I know is that there are other gods that might be causing a conflict, and we are going to choose to do [REDACTED] because the MC thinks its the right thing, so that we can achieve [REDACTED].
So now, the character who's thoughts we can read and who we make choices for, has a goal. Unfortunately, we don't have a single clue what that goal is beyond it being "the right thing." How am I supposed to get invested in the story and the protagonist if I have no idea what I am doing or why I am doing it? Every scene that comes after just falls flat, because why tf would I care? I don't know the stakes, how important our actions are, why I am taking any of the actions I am taking. IDK if the dev thinks this is some cool mystery, but it's just bad writing.
A couple scenes later, we are trying to recruit this sorcerer girl to our [REDACTED] cause so we can accomplish [REDACTED], and she says she has some very important conditions. Guess what, fade-to-black, MC agrees. Apparently, these [REDACTED] conditions are so important that we need to make a magical vow to uphold them.
I genuinely don't know if the dev thinks this is somehow some kind of intriguing mystery, but it isn't. Frankly, it comes across as lazy. Like it would be too difficult to write a compelling scene, so just handwave it and hope the player doesn't care.