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Pr0GamerJohnny

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If you feel that the masturbation scene is too rushed, then I guess that's something you have to deal with. I don't know how much tension or emotional investment is necessary for you to properly enjoy a simple masturbation scene, but you might be reading too much into this particular instance. Unless you are asking the dev to include a whole-ass backstory novella about Celes' life before she came into MC's world, in which case your writing skills are clearly in dire need of some sharpening - because that would be a 'wall of text' not a single reader would find interesting.

Revealing every single detail or facet of a character right away - before any actual plot is underway - is the most basic (and the most boring) method of characterization possible; peeling back the layers of Celes' (or any other character's) personality is perhaps best done methodically & sporadically, in appropriate situations. Would you rather read a 10-page explanation on why Celes likes swords more than axes? Or would you rather Celes find herself in a situation where her sword expertise is shown in action? One of those is a more engaging read that doesn't require a "set up" to pay off.

Please, do keep in mind that you are playing a 0.1 version of an AVN, and not all questions or character actions are going to be answered/explained immediately. Part of the excitement is not knowing every little thing right away!
It's not only about her masturbation scene, it's about the entire pacing and engagement.

I can't speak for dontcarewhateverno, but at least for me, it would be a lot more engaging if there was some sense of romantic/relational progression. I don't mean this in the AVN vernacular, i.e. filling up buckets, but the more realistic push-pull dynamic of real world relationships (both with MC and the antagonist). I just played it again to make sure I'm not misrepresenting it, and indeed, there's almost none of this back and forth, the proverbial flirting dance (or scorn or any emotion). Where's the push-pull? There's almost no apprehension or tension, it's like watching characters in the Sims do things solely because the player has directed them to do so.

Now, she is from a different time/world, so it could be chalked up to culture shock. At the start, her relationship with MC feels oddly platonic for an AVN. Then the antagonist enters, and within a few scenes Celeste has these internal monologues hinting at sexual excitement. This feels like a juxtaposition; I'd expect a person not wary of strangers to behave similarly in either circumstance.

This is part of why I generally dont like bbc fetish focused ntr games. They often use that fetish as a catch-all stand in for relational progression. Cedric isn't particularly charming or good looking, but that doesn't seem to really matter to the narrative.

You could take the same characters and write a much hotter story with Celeste initially being standoffish towards the antagonist then slowly coming around, OR one where the antagonist started off as a silver tongued devil, playing the charmer around both Celeste and the mc- then at some point MC realizes things are not what they seem.
 

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It's not only about her masturbation scene, it's about the entire pacing and engagement.

I can't speak for dontcarewhateverno, but at least for me, it would be a lot more engaging if there was some sense of romantic/relational progression. I don't mean this in the AVN vernacular, i.e. filling up buckets, but the more realistic push-pull dynamic of real world relationships (both with MC and the antagonist). I just played it again to make sure I'm not misrepresenting it, and indeed, there's almost none of this back and forth, the proverbial flirting dance (or scorn or any emotion). Where's the push-pull? There's almost no apprehension or tension, it's like watching characters in the Sims do things solely because the player has directed them to do so.

Now, she is from a different time/world, so it could be chalked up to culture shock. At the start, her relationship with MC feels oddly platonic for an AVN. Then the antagonist enters, and within a few scenes Celeste has these internal monologues hinting at sexual excitement. This feels like a juxtaposition; I'd expect a person not wary of strangers to behave similarly in either circumstance.

This is part of why I generally dont like bbc fetish focused ntr games. They often use that fetish as a catch-all stand in for relational progression. Cedric isn't particularly charming or good looking, but that doesn't seem to really matter to the narrative.

You could take the same characters and write a much hotter story with Celeste initially being standoffish towards the antagonist then slowly coming around, OR one where the antagonist started off as a silver tongued devil, playing the charmer around both Celeste and the mc- then at some point MC realizes things are not what they seem.
Thanks. After so many wildly misinterpreted replies, I really just didn't have the energy anymore.
 
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Hm...Could someone tell me, is this your typical "smug afrobro with horse dick steals your chick" type of story or nah? Dunno if it's worth downloading or nah, since cliches like the one in previous sentence are just a waste of time for me.
 

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Hm...Could someone tell me, is this your typical "smug afrobro with horse dick steals your chick" type of story or nah? Dunno if it's worth downloading or nah, since cliches like the one in previous sentence are just a waste of time for me.
Nothing to see so far but by what can be seen it unfortunately looks like that way, we gotta wait a couple more Updates to see if it's the case.
 

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Excellent story so far, I'm really enjoying it and it's current pacing. Please for the love of god do NOT make this into a Super slowburn VN where the MC remains in a will they, wont they, sexless relationship for the next 5 years.
 
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Can anyone tell me the logic behind the Latex fetish? Isn' it like a side dish of BDSM/Humiliation? "Focusing on Latex" feels like an inaccurate statement if that is the case. I see some games going with this fetish, but have no clue why are people invested in it. No disrespect, just curious as to why.
 
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Can anyone tell me the logic behind the Latex fetish? Isn' it like a side dish of BDSM/Humiliation? "Focusing on Latex" feels like an inaccurate statement if that is the case. I see some games going with this fetish, but have no clue why are people invested in it. No disrespect, just curious as to why.
Do what your name says irl to see if you like it.
 
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Hm...Could someone tell me, is this your typical "smug afrobro with horse dick steals your chick" type of story or nah? Dunno if it's worth downloading or nah, since cliches like the one in previous sentence are just a waste of time for me.
It's not, no. Not yet at least. The first "antagonist" is MC's friend and seems pretty genuine with a bit of depth. The game *will* lean into some interracial tropes at some point, I'm sure, but so far it's just the gigadong stuff.
 

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Hm...Could someone tell me, is this your typical "smug afrobro with horse dick steals your chick" type of story or nah? Dunno if it's worth downloading or nah, since cliches like the one in previous sentence are just a waste of time for me.
This doesn't seem to follow that "trope", at least, not that we have seen so far.

Cedric is your friend, and they haven't done anything that would seem like they are going to try to cuck you or steal your girl either. They are genuinely concerned for their friend after thinking about the MC's situation a bit deeper with the help of another friend of the MC. They had some "revelations" and think the MC is in a bad situation, so they are going to try to work together to find out the truth.

But so far, he seems genuine. A friend just looking out for his friend (and I really hope it stays that way lol).

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Hm...Could someone tell me, is this your typical "smug afrobro with horse dick steals your chick" type of story or nah? Dunno if it's worth downloading or nah, since cliches like the one in previous sentence are just a waste of time for me.
Yes.

I dunno what the replies answering in the negative are trying to accomplish. But don't take my word for it, you'll find out when you play it.
 
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