VN - Ren'Py - Falling Apart [Ch.1.0] [PixelEnd]

It's just chapter 1 right now so this is more of a suggestion than an actual review.

The renders are good, the sound effects are good. That stuff is fine.

The issue for me is going to be the storytelling. Not a lot of dialogue so far, it's kind of like you're making a stop motion movie or something. It's interesting, but if you use that method beyond the first chapter it's going to be kind of annoying. Second, it's a zombie apocalypse and society is going down man. I get that. Cool. Things just don't stop working though. Especially at the beginning. All the news stations immediately go off the air. Why? There's no way this is moving that fast unless Russia airdropped a bunch of zombies into major cities or something. Zombies get in the building, cool. They start blitzing the apartments and killing everyone. Believable. The elevators stopped working though. Why? Did the zombies turn it off, or do things just stop working because it builds suspense?

Anyway if any of that is helpful to the author I will stop being a snob now. I wish you the best of luck on your VN and look forward to more!

Good concept and character models.
The game won't survive without some type of immediate sex stuff though.
This is an NSFW game after all and I'd be looking for the focus to be on the content.
It doesn't seem like the choices make much of a difference.
This would be a good game if you could choose between being a good guy or a bad guy like in corruption games.

Really enjoyed the first chapter, the renders are amazing and the storytelling is peak. I especially like the use of different fonts and font sizes for different scenarios - as well as the text effects to emphasize certain events. Very fitting use of SFX and music as well. All the best dev!

Only an intro, but exactly what I would want from a zombie apocalypse game. Hot women living with me, as a bad ass, without ridiculous management time wasters. Looking forward to where this will go.

Too early to say much, but so far it's really good. Believable MC who behaves rationally during a zombie apocalypse, and that's quite rare. Game is not immediately overly sexual but behaves in a really believable rational way, which again is rare. Girls also look really good and have some distinct personalities already which is nice. Also, dev is clearly a based booba enjoyer and made Abbys boobas just *chefs kiss*.
I'm not really sure if the choices are for flavor RP or if they will have impacts down the line, but so far the writing seems to be great. Super promising start and definitely looking forward to more!

Nice Game, I honestly do not play most of the games Just see images animation, and all BUT this is nice. I played it until the end of the current update and so far, the game is good, the story is nice, and place building is gr8. Two main girls are super hot and Paige's ass are amazing and other girl's boobs are hot (why she wears top clothes if every time her boobs are exposed).

DEV keep it up, bring the next version soon.

VERSION: CH1
SUMMARY: Solid start
RATINGS: (out of 5):

NOTE: The following are my own criteria and may require more context, so keep an open mind.

1. Models: 4
2. Animations: NA
3. General Visuals: 4
4. Characters: 3
5. Story/Pacing: 3
6. Writing/Dialogue: 3
7. UI & Gameplay: 4
8. Content Quality: 3
9. Sounds & Music: 4
10. H-Content & Fetish: NA

Average: 28 of 50 possible points giving a 56% rating i.e. 3 stars.
With "internal" scoring, NA items count as zero, however with official scoring NA items are ignored & the total is adjusted.

PROS:

1. Models and and LIs look good.
2. MC model is not bad looking, but (see cons)
3. General renders are good.
4. Music and sounds are pretty decent
5. UI is not bad, having "floating" buttons for interaction is a good change
6. Writing is decent and structured well. Not messy or lengthy.
7. Choices, but no idea what their effect will be, maybe on the two LIs the MC may get or lose points, clearly one favours doing the "nice" thing above the other which seems more pragmatic. Some choices clearly have immediate effects but seem to end up the same irrespective of the choice e.g., stealing the dudes car, offering him help or not. This may also have, as mentioned, affect on a point system going between the two LIs,

CONS:

1. MC face does look a bit weird, like he has jaundice, the colouring of his skin looks like blemishes or he is unhealthy, just does not look natural.
2. Attempts at being "funny" or comical when there are clearly high stake, life or death things going on does kill the immersion and detract from the threat.
3. Lack of motivation, reason and background as to why there is a zombie apocalypse going on.
4. Bit short, but least sets the stage albeit a simple one with no compelling background or motivations for the zombies apocalypse starting.
5. No H-scenes, not even a porno on the TV . Apart from seeing one LIs tits pop out now and then, making you wonder how they stayed in even while walking...but anyway, point is that there are no lewd scenes currently. Oh and a naked gross fat lady (doesn't count)

FINAL REMARKS, OPINIONS & SUGGESTIONS:

• The story makes no sense, zombies don't just show up (if they could), I am not a biologist or anything but the amount of decay that the zombies show from their look, suggests they been dead for a while and started to decompose, this means that people would have had to be aware no? Zombies wouldnt just show up at the snap of your fingers, there would be media, cases of zombies in hospitals etc. Its wont just appear or happen so the story is fundamentally flawed based on that.
• Apart from the obvious point above about the plot, the game plays, looks and feels solid and good, albeit flimsy in terms of story and 2 girls trusting a random stranger, zombies or not...but overall it seems good and I will definitely keep my eye on this one.

Good luck developer and decent work so far.