VN - Ren'Py - False Narrative [v0.2 Fix] [Pixel Narrativa]

Hi everyone, interesting game, good rendering, good story, although the translation is sometimes awkward, but other than that... nothing to say. For something new, it has plenty of entertaining content.

Renders are super HQ, lots of smooth animations, hot scenarios based around domming cute girls, and a completely unique premise based around a professional scam group. Surprising amount of content for 0.2 release and only 2gb file size with what looks to be 4k renders.

Unfortunately, it is pretty obviously translated, and the translation regularly sucks. It's also not very well polished in how it actually runs, as there is semi regular randoms blackscreens when an animation loops, randomly skip animations etc. These are pretty minor issues though, and easy to fix as dev gains more experience so not deducting when it's early days.

How could i even explaint it? I am sick fucker and i tell you, this game is fucking awesome.
Simple as that

Well i hpoe that was enough words
well it wasnt
so to complement, well say say every fucking girl in this game os hot

This is interesting new game
Daisy really teasing and can't wait for her to get what she need to lol

- Render was nice - 7/10
- Character design is really good - 9.5/10
- Story was interesting but nothing much yet - 8/10
- Content per update have nothing much - 4/10

*Replay Gallery was not here yet but I hope it have one

EDITED - DEV "FIXED" a line of code that made the below/original review.

AVN is now back to eh from not touching. implied/fake incest and implied loli (couple of girls look awfully young) with a meh at best plot. 2 Star AVN for me. Futa/Trans is now back to avoidable.

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ORIGINAL
Forced Transexual/Futa/Trap content = a HARD NO for me. I don't care if its it the AVN but is skippable or avoidable. I clicked on not interested yet it still forces Sam onto MC so I am giving this 1 star for not being more clear that this is unavoidable. If not for this probably a 3 star AVN but this is something I cannot accept. If you're cool with this content then AVN is for you, if you;re not avoid this AVN!

Renders / Girls: 3/5
not bad, not great (damaged skin, hair like a wig, unnatural eyes)

Animations / Sex scenes: 3/5
same: not bad, not great

Gameplay / Tension building: 0/5
there is none
you see a girl, you talk to her once, you fuck her

It's an interesting AVN, but at the end of the day, Average is the best I can do as far as a rating is concerned. Granted, some of it is going to be my bias but I am trying to be honest about the review.

To begin with, I can't stand the step sister. OMG is she annoying. Then there are all the dream sequences. They are just a bit odd. For example, all the MC has to do is look at an attractive scene and then he can have an extensive dream about it. Convenient way to get to some h scenes early on, but it's kind of silly.

Then we have a big plot reveal because the Step-sister has suddenly become some superspy and she suddenly uncovers the whole sub-plot, which is just stupid. The whole plan does not make any sense and the hatred the step-sis has towards her mother doesn't make any sense either.

Then we have the silly "blocking of the MC's face." So stupid. I don't get this and no matter how many times someone tries to explain it I still don't get it. The fact is, it pulls me out of the game. Every time there is a deliberate attempt to block the face, I notice it and it kills the story for me.

FFS, no one is going to be offended by how the MC looks. We don't care what the MC's face looks like. Just search for the top 30 games on this site, and you will see NONE of them block out the MC's face. Why? because it's stupid, that's why.

At the end of the day, however, my larger concerns are with the story and with the main LI.

As far as the good is concerned, the dev is talented and all the women are hot and unique. None of them have that familiar model we see in every game kind of feel to it. The dev has put a lot of work into the production and the scenes and rendering are all pretty well done. There are some issues with the writing, but for the most part it is a solid production with a good foundation.

Thats one example of bait by ratings ...

It is a prologue so anything could change.

The girls look great.
With that out of the way:

The conversations are weird. Everything feels extremely rushed and forced into the fastest believable sex content.
Wich is dream sex, so no sex content at all.
It is skippable, vut the next scene you will discuss it anyhow, so no point in skipping.

The LIs, if they are those, are unlikable. The daughter/stepsister tries so hard to be edgy it hurts. Like I mentioned, they look good, but not that good.
The mother/stepmother feels off, doesn't help that the father/stepfather is still in the picture, but there wasn't really any attraction other than the obvious fap moments. Nothing really outstanding or interesting.

Then of course drugs, stereotypical teen-behaviour, and no real payoff, because it is just a prolouge.

It is very early, so a proper rework could make this a great project. The visuals are there, the story is basic but serviceable.
Cut back on the edgyness, remove the drugs, start putting in actual sexy situations. Rework the whole interaction between the "siblings".
And if it is just a voyeur-fap game, be transparent, so that the right audience finds it.

As of Prologue P1
There is great potential for a good story here. The visuals are great, the setting is somewhat generic but not bad and UI is clean and readable.
However, the writing is where things fall flat for me. I'm not sure if the Dev/s speaks English proficiently but the wording of certain sentences seem more like broken English than proper sentences. Though broken sentences can be used for creative/dramatic flair in story telling this particular usage is more akin to someone not being able to speak the language properly or using a translator which leaves no room for the nuance of the language and only states the direct translation. To be fair, it gets the point across but the wording, cuts to different topics and inflections needed for some of the situations breaks the reading immersion and leaves me personally restructuring the sentence to better understand it's context. I would advise addressing these issues and then this novel would drastically improve.

TLDR; Great visuals & UI. Good Story setting. Ok writings due to language problems.

Rating of prologue part 1.

I normally don’t rate this early but with 3 perfect scores, this is coming across skewed.
The females look good. The story is ok for a mystery…I think it’s hard to do mystery well in a vn where you’re taking the pov of the mc, it feels like you’re missing stuff the mc is privy to. Also the stepsister gets away with being overly mysterious.
The biggest drawback to me is that 2 of the sexy/detailed scenes so far are dream sequences focusing on the neighbors who the mc has had no interaction with, only spotted from his window. You can skip the first, but with the prologue being short, I felt it necessary to watch. I had no choice to skip the 2nd dream sequence though. Some have already pointed the dreams out in the comments but one of the other issues I have with it is the mc either completely made up their personalities or if this is remotely close to how the girls personalities will be, it's completely unrealistic since he hasn’t even met them. Maybe that is part of the false narratives but just comes across as wonky. I’d rather he actually met them and had some interactions than the dream stuff. I’ll try to come back and revise this if the game improves or addresses some of this. This could be a 2 or 4 depending on how you feel about dream content being prominent.

Version: Prologue Part 1

Honestly excellent! The plot is actually intriguing, yet still allows for right-out-the-gate sexy time. I rarely rate games on their first iteration (unless they are shit), so the existence of this rating is itself a mark of excellence.

The renders and scenes are exquisite, and there are several options per sex scene.

Only real issue was that during the animated sex scenes once the animation was done running, it would fade to black rather than auto-progress, freeze on the final shot, or repeat. Likely something easily fixed by the dev, and even then it just meant clicking an additional time. Didn't hinder the story or sex scenes at all.

I do want to note that one character (not currently one you can have sex with) is futa. I don't have a problem with that, but I assume at some point the dev wants to make them fuckable, in which case I STRONGLY recommend making it a player choice if they want Sam to be a futa or a girl.

With all the AI slop we're seeing now, it's nice to see something traditional and most of all "Competent".
The story is interesting enough to keep the players attention through the wordy parts meaning it would be a mistake to just turn on auto and wait for the sex scenes. The character models are hot from front to back. And I do like to focus on the back if you know what I mean. =P Shot composition, framing, angle, lighting, all solid. This isn't some garbage where they were screen shotting the preview window, you can tell the author cares.

All though normally I'd say it's best to ignore reading 1 and 5 star reviews, I still give it five stars and hope it maintains the level of quality with a consistent update drum beat. ^^

Excellent. Truly did not expect such high quality in renders character poses and character designs. The story also seems interesting, nothing too unique, but enough of a hook for its potential. The only complaint is flickering between animations, which idk if it's due to issuies from my pc oder the game itself, still even if from the game probably not difficult to improve. Keep at it dev