Ren'Py - FatesCrossed [v0.2.6] [VitaYok]

Render is ok, story not sure since i'm literally stuck with this horrible sandbox, sandbox itself already bad for most VN, i'm stcuk in the school for not being able to go anywhere and only click go to roof repeately until got an event and then run out of energy and stuck again at the receptionist, trying to cheat but no phone icon on the top right, jesus FFS if you doesnt know how to develop a sandbox then better DONT.
The VN also doesnt get better at all since most event are locked behind the sandbox element. sorry i just have to gave this game a 1star cuz i never been so angry playing a sandbox VN like this one!!

[v0.2.6]

Girls: 2/5
a lot of LIs, I mean a lot, but quantity is not quality
most of them are average if not ugly
it doesn't help that the devs have some obsession with shadows, which is why faces are often underexposed

Animations / Sex Scenes: 4/5
good, but not great
quantity of positions and angles are ok, but there are some technical problems like mismatched body parts and their different lighting

Gameplay / Tension Building: 3/5
I quickly switched from sandbox to VN
in VN it quickly turned out that the choices were completely irrelevant
and the fact that quantity was prioritized over quality didn't help in building the tension either

(v0.2.5)
Honestly... I want and wish that I could rate this higher. I see the potential, the story seems interesting, the renders are nice, the characters look mostly different from the others but... It's just not reaching it quite yet. Maybe someday it will but, as it is currently... I don't think you're missing out on much if you give it a pass.
PS: If you don't install and use Universal Ren'Py mod, you should probably pick VN mode.

I tried this a couple years ago (10/12/2023 according to my comment on Itch), had to put it on hold because the translation and proof reading desperately needed some work. I've got such mixed feelings because although the translations and proof reading is much better now than it was then, it still needs more work.

You can still make out the majority of what's being said, but there's plenty of weirdness with plurals, tenses or just stuff that didn't translate across right.

For example, when meeting with one of the characters for her first event she'll say "Oh that. I'm tanning, it's worth the peace"... I THINK that she's trying to say she's tanning since it's peaceful? Just one example, I've got a bunch of others I've come across that I could share but you get the idea.

Outside of translation issues the dialogue between characters itself kinda feels hit or miss. I can't tell if it's because of stuff lost in translation, or if the dialogue is just incomplete, or if there was more going on at one point but now the scene is more clean. Maybe all of the above. Half the time dialogue just feels... Messy or just there for the sake of existing and to pad the numbers "This is the largest update we've ever done! 69,420 words were added!!!".
For example:

Morgane: Hi! How's it going?
MC: Well, I'm looking around the university with my friend over here.
MC: It's pretty cool here, I must say.
MC: When I first enrolled, I had wasn't sure
Morgane: Good to know you like it. Let's hope you give a little attention here too.
Milla: Alright, Palmira, let's skip that.
Milla: Don't bother (mc) with your problems; he already has too much.
Unknown 2: Oh, come on, cut it out.
Unknown 2: I just asked him few questions.
*eventually after a small bit of bickering with Milla's friend*
Milla: Hi Morgane!
Milla: Sorry about that! And girl, you're slaying it as always!
Morgane: ... Hiii!
Milla: I see you two already are getting to know each other.
Morgane: Yeah, he got transferred to our class. I saw him, earlier.
Milla: Lucky you, didn't happen to me.
Milla: Alright, let's get going handsome.
MC: Don't you think you were little bit too harsh on her?
Milla: You don't know her, I know what she is.
Milla: She likes to play dumb to get to people.
MC: What do you mean exactly?
Milla: (MC), shut up please. Would you?
Milla: Forget it, it's not of your use. Just stay away from her.

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So... Who exactly is Milla talking to? We haven't been introduced to a Palmira yet, they didn't ask us a single question. We're talking to and facing Morgane this entire scene until we leave. What is MC talking about being Milla being harsh to someone? Who was playing dumb? Morgane? Didn't seem like Morgane. Palmira? Maybe, but we haven't spoken to her and didn't see her, and Milla apparently only spoke two lines to her which didn't seem harsh. But then if you talk to Morgane in class she'll tell you how she knows Milla, that they're good friends and often hang out together on the weekends. So she had to have been referring to Morgane. It... Just doesn't make sense.

Again, that's just one example. This sort of thing isn't uncommon to come across.


Admittedly, I didn't get as far into things as I would like so maybe there are others that are nice, and/or maybe the ones we meet in the beginning soften up. But... MC is berated left and right. Getting to the point where characters soften up (IF they soften up) is a bit of a slog. Assuming you play in sandbox (perhaps a mistake on my part, thank goodness for URM), you'll be juggling time and energy, but also making sure your GPA doesn't drop too low because of consequences at school. So your time and energy also needs to be spent there, too.

Maybe I'll check in on this in the future and see how things progress, I want to like it and I see its potential, but... It's just not there yet.

This game can be sooooo good! I love the style and the plot is actually interesting. The little audio cues when characters have specific reactions just make it so much more enjoyable.

Sadly, the translation is holding it back. Also, all the characters are kind of the same personality wise, but that could be due to the dialogue not being written well in English. Sometimes it feels like you missed a piece of info by the way they talk. If the grammar gets fixed then it would be 5 stars for me.

Also, sandbox really ruins the experience for me. Like why put restrictions on story. Thanks God it has a VN mode but it should focus on that, or at least make sandbox more less grindy.

Idk I dont really have a lot to say other than

This title isn't really femdom in the traditional sense. It's more femdom in the sense that everyones just an asshole and treats the MC like dirt off rip, everyones got problems, everyones annoyed all the time, everyone basically hates everyone else. It's not even as if the other male students are like terrified of the women either. They are in their own specific bubbles even, hardly see them get bothered. Its more like going to a school full of edgy, annoying, pretentious people that just literally do not care to even speak a word to anyone outside their specific social group. They just have it out for the MC because he's trying to be "friendly & social." Granted I'd be more in with this setting if it was some like super rich, prestigious school that MC was forced to attend, not so much a all-girl recently co-ed sports school. It just doesnt fit, atleast to me with the personalities and attitudes. Could see if everyone was ruthlessly competitive and seen MC as a potential weak link, would be more substantive for the story.

Writing is basically just all bratty, stressed, pretentious, over the top, quirky characters that are just bat shit crazy. I dont think I can really pull a nice thing out of my ass to say about any individual character. The only character I think I've even had a remotely good thought about was the Library girl that sticks her tongue out at MC at the start, and he does it back and she giggles. That was the one somewhat normal and cute interaction in this lol.

Has some nice character design (aesthetically), and there are interesting things happening but I just cant get past every character being overly annoying (except Morgane she was the most normal and even she's a mess.) Even the non-college girls are a mess lol. MC

Suffice to say, not for me I guess. If you're into really difficult women that just want to be extremely miserable, bratty and treat you like dirt, for literally no reason other than you existing. This might be for you!

To me it just felt like a cucky-simp title lol. good luck with it dev!

I really like the quirkiness of this VN. The storytelling could be a bit easier to follow -- at times it's hard to tell how we got from one scene to another. The models look interesting and the graphics are impressive (at least to me a total non-expert.) I like games with a school setting and games that have mysterious story elements that are gradually hinted at and then slowly revealed. This game has both, so I'm rooting for it to get somewhat easier to follow, and hoping the story continues to be intriguing.

The game has great graphics and visual design and well integrated audio that made me really want it to be good. However it sadly really isn't in its current state. I wans constantly confused by both the language used and wtf was going on. Additionally in sandbox mode you will always be lost, navigation is not easy and requiring energy to do literally anything is very annoying. The nail in the coffin are the writing of the characters though, for starters the mc is is an annoying. clueless. weak. stupid. little. bitch. The girls aren't any better, all of them are just written like caricatures of people, not one of these people are believable, there is now way any human would be like this, its like eccentric aliens trying to pretend to be people. Has the dev actually ever had a human interaction? Because I've played harem games where all the girls immediately throw themselves at the mc that had better written characters. I'm sorry, the game looks great but that's about it.

0.2.2 - VN version

This game it's so utterly terrible, it's not even funny.

From the start it's a rush of events that are linked only by one of the least likeable MC on this site. Some supernatural accident happens to the mother, twins appear out of nowhere to do god knows what. Next thing you know you are speaking with 2 transparent girls (Ghosts? Who knows) and have to go to school. There you meet a truck load of "Unknown" half of which know you, but you don't.

Engrish makes undestrand what happens impossible. Every dialogue has errors and/or bad translations that makes hard to undestrand what's been said. The fact that 70% of the time your interlocutor is "Unknown" (white letters for everyone, even when in group) doesn't help to clarify who is even speaking. Cherry on top for those 0.3s pauses in the middle of the dialogues that break the damn flow. 'Cause IRL we all speak like this ,no?

Let's not forget H-Scenes: the first you see it's a bad rendered lesbian scene in the middle of the library. And the first dick on screen is someone else's while is banging 2 girls, that will possibly be LIs. Great start for a supposed harem game.

My bad for not reading the comments before downloading.

The Ignore List grows again.

Its quite confusing but also a bit different than other vns out there. I hope the developer can improve and solve some of issues including english translations, grammar, no idea what you are supposed to do sometimes, etc
There is potential and I am hoping future updates will improve the game overall

I'm going to be honest, I might sound harsh, but this game has really good potential but in my opinion not in this form as it is presented now.

Haven't tried the sandbox version, this review is based on the VN version.

The renders and H scenes are great, that's the only reason I'm giving it a 2 star (almost 3).
The sound effects and music are great, glad that the 'grunting' got towned down, it was quite annoying in the beginning.

The story is all over the place, sometimes really hard to follow what is happening. Not sure if sandbox version is better or not in this case.
The 'engrish' also doesn't help, but the dev is not a native speaker and I can kinda look past that, but it doesn't help the writing itself which kinda comes across quite bland.
The dialogues are very basic , don't except anything extraordinary.

Every... single... line... of... dialogue... takes... 20... seconds... to... read...
This is the worst in my opinion. Almost every single line of dialogue is full of 0.3s pauses, sometimes even after every word OR even a '...' is broken up into 3 x 0.3s pauses.
Please drop this bad practice, it doesn't add anything value to the game, only irritates the player.

No rollback after choices, which is also a bad practice, don't punish the player this way. You can't circumvent save/reload anyway so it is pointless to deny rollback after a choice is made, you only make the player irritated.

Now, this game has all the best building stones of a great harem game: (/s)
- former all girl school with lesbians (I'm kinda guessing here, also it was mentioned in game as well to a point)
- slut LI
- abused LI (almost rape victim)
- onlyfans LI
- random people fucking (probably just some NPC and only happened once but still, the first dick you see in the game is from a random NPC fucking 2 other NPCs - at least I hope those girls are not LIs)
- no romance (now this might be my personal preference, but it looks like this game headed to more of a fuckbuddy instead of a romance relationship building, but maybe I'm reading it wrong)
- poly-harem (now this is just an assumption based on the whole game takes place in a former all girl school, but I get the vibe that this is not going to be a 'pure harem', which is fine IF the player gets a choice, if not than that's another issue)

I don't get it, maybe 2 out of 10 harem game dev makes the effort to actually do some research into what harem game players looking for in these games.

This game have great potential, a 4 or even 5 star rating from me, if the english is fixed and the story is presented better, also drop the pauses in dialogues and remove the rollback deny.
For me a few LIs are not redeemable, hopefully it's possible to avoid the onlyfans girl, the femdom girl and the slutty one too, but I doubt that the slutty one is avoidable as she is determined to help MC fuck as many girls as possible.

Overall the game is below average right now, but has potential.

Good luck to the dev!

I would like to rate this game higher but having to decipher the meaning of what they say even though it's in english which is my native language. is making it tough.

Just that is one thing, but the way they deliberately say everything while saying nothing at all sometimes.

What kind of dickhead sees a shrink then refuses to answer questions and worse speaks in obtuse round about ways? You're getting free counseling you spent days seeking out and then you act like you're trying to avoid getting counseling!?!

Other then the incredibly antagonistic way the general chatter is written this is a pretty fun game with neat ideas. The visuals are pretty nice too.

I hope this game gets a good once over and the english writing is improved. It would be 4 or 5 stars if it wasn't so infuriating to read at times.

Game version: 0.2

The short version: Interesting visual style ruined by horrible writing.

I liked the UI-design and the unique font style of the game when I first started the game.
But after a minute of gameplay, the good first impression was already ruined by the BS of text you getting spammed with.

The intro is helluva confusing and IF the conclusion of this was about to get revealed later in the game, I'm not even interested.

The writing is just so.. stupid and feels almost childish most of the time (maybe it's just due to bad translation?). I couldn't stand it for another minute, so I started skipping through the text- to check whether there was something worth my time to go on or not. But sadly, there wasn't. The few lewd scenes I stumbled upon were mediocre at best and the story wouldn't get any better.

No recommendation.

Beautiful graphics, a bit overly saturated background to my taste though
An actual variety in gorgeous LIs
Original story, meaning MC is not Mary Sue, whom all the girls fall in love with right away. Not brain dead LIs
Human interactions feel much more realistic than in many VNs on this site

Kudos to the Dev for adding VN mode (would never have tried this game in sandbox)

Although there are some flaws, it's a game with good potential. When you're thrown into the game - nothing is clear, and as the story progresses you understand that there is some mystery, a mystery that VitaYok will reveal to us in the next updates!

Reviewing V0.1

Pros :
Good graphics and cinematic
Good storyline and characters well developed
We have to salute the work behind

Cons :
You can't be lost easily if you don’t have the patient to look for yourself and follow the steps
The storyline for me is interesting but a bit repetitive, and without money or a lot of time playing the game you can lose interest
Good UI but small
For further versions maybe more help for the player who don't know what the developers want from him and what to do clearly


My opinion :
This game has potential but sometimes it's complicated and you lost a lot of time trying to no what to do, hope the further versions will be more clear for the player and simple (i'm not trying to spend 4h per day in the game).
Waiting for the next versions!

Reviewing V0.1

Pros
-The graphic is above average, maybe some fixing with the lights but nothing unbearable
- The UI looks cool
- The plot sounds promising yet vague, but it's the first version so i wanna considering more promising than vague (XD)

Cons
- Every character so far is unpleasant, and i mean all of them, not one that isn't an entitled asshole
- The UI while cool needs to be bigger, i had to squeeze my eyes to check some of the icons and options
- The english is barely acceptable but needs some proofreading or to use grammar-checking programs like Grammarly or LanguageTool or write the dialogue in Google-Docs
- Most of the content is grind...like 80% of the game is grind, 10% is figuring out where to go or what to do, the rest is...not even plot, just scenes. You can't make money day-by-day, you must wait every Monday which means that every week monday-to-friday is like: wake up in your room-> dress up for school -> go to school -> first lesson-> interact with people(to develop character-arcs you must talk 10 times with each one of them)-> go to lunch and if you can interact with people -> skip enough time to trigger the afternoon lessons-> do the afternoon lessons-> interact with people-> go home or do something like checking an area in the city for some quests like finding replacements for the computer-> sleep->repeat until Friday, then Saturday and Sunday is just skip time or do stuff to move the clock forward.

Conclusions
I tried to be fair, but more i play and more the flaws of this first release became evident and painful to tolerate, like a punch in the stomach. Sorry.