Ren'Py Completed Feedback for my first game

[jeans123]

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Hello everyone,

Here is my first time making a game. It's a small project which I am posting here to get feedback on. I hope I am not breaking any rules here. I needed feedback and was not sure where else to post it. The renders are low quality on purpose. I have made do with what resources I have. Also, I love animations which is why I will always have animations in my games. This also means that render quality will be even lower to make up for the render time.

The plot is simply that your sister has hidden your stuff. You devise a plan to disguise yourself to look like her boyfriend and talk to her. What you did NOT plan was that your sister had more in her mind than just talking with her boyfriend...

There are 3 animated scenes, complete with sounds and cum shot.
And a bunch of CGs.

Any and all feedback welcome!
Thank you for your interest!

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[215303j]

I love the renders!
My initial thought was to skip the animations in favor of better render quality, but the animation that you posted is really good.
The female model is original and really good looking as well.

The only thing I really don't like is the MC's dick. It's way too big and strangely shaped.

The story is short but seems interesting enough.

At this point I didn't play the game yet, the above is based on your post only.

 

[wurg]

My two cents:

Please enable rollback from the beginning, especially if you are going to do pauses in the dialog. This caused me to miss some of the dialog due to the fact I would click thinking the line was done, the new dialog would pop up and I would skip it by clicking and could not go back to read it. The biggest issue is you don't know what lines will have the pauses in the code when you are playing. You could instead of doing a pause {p=x} do a click event pause {w} to help keeping this from happening.

I like the progress bar on the animation scenes, that is a good idea to show the user how much time is left. The downside is there is also dialog I should be clicking through to read. I found this out by accident and went through the game again to see if the dialog would show up if I didn't click. A new line would appear when the speed changed but none of the others. I was afraid if I kept clicking through the dialog during the animation that I would eventually end up skipping the end of the animation and miss out, that rollback thing again. A lot of people will stop clicking when an animation pops up so they don't miss it, this will cause them to miss the dialog unless there is a way for you to advance the dialog you want the user to read while the animation is playing. On the other side, once they find there is dialog embedded in the animation and they can't accidentally skip it, some people will start clicking so they won't miss the dialog and stop paying attention to the animation. It might be better to keep the animation looping until the user has made it through all of the dialog you want them to read and then play the finish shot. The downside of the progress bar with dialog embedded, it felt like I was racing to get through the dialog before it ended so I wouldn't miss anything.

The renders look good ( even though they are reduced on purpose ), nice fluid animations. I think you are doing fine and I would play a full version without a second thought.

 

[uradamus]

I'll get the bad out of the way first. I'm not a big fan of the timers, I get you had some point in wanting to show the PC is a bit of a hopeless amateur in the sack, but how do you expect players to get a chance to enjoy what you've made when you force them through a scene in like under a minute.

As to the story the situation is completely unbelievable. Unless the brother and boyfriend are so remarkably similar in height, build, skin tone and voice, there is no way she wouldn't realize pretty much instantly that something was wrong, especially once she saw the dick which you made a point of having her remark on the size difference. But lets just say she is a bit dim and they did get through that scene - afterwards there is absolutely no way in hell she'd ever let him get away with keeping just the hood on in her bedroom, the jig would be up right then and there. The better solution would be to have her figure it out, get pissed at him, and decide she wants to punish him in some way for tricking her and getting a HJ/BJ out of it. From there you can have that transition into some sort of sexual encounter, and while still a bit unbelieveable, it would at least be in the realm of forgivably poor story telling, thanks to the art.

Which is a good segue into the good points. The art is decent, for Daz stuff, it's actually above average. It could probably do with slightly better lighting, but overall it is decent quality. The animations have a bit of a stop motion feel to them, which I actually kinda like for some reason. The character design was pretty good too, though I will say I don't like the way a lot of Daz characters end up with a gray sheen to their hair. I suspect it is poor specular settings, if I had to guess the specular color is either white or a light gray, maybe try changing it to something that is a light shade of her hair color and see how that looks (assuming Daz has settings exposed for that sort of thing).

So my take on this is the art is passable and only needs a little bit of work to really make it shine, but the story is pretty much complete shit and needs a lot of work. It's an ok first offering though, better than a fair few of the 0.1 releases that pop up on here.

 

[Dicks McKenzie]

The animations were very nice (had a lovely stop-motion vibe to them), you're clearly very talented in that department. The scenario, whilst not very original or believable, was competent and pretty well paced. I liked the design of the sister- she was cute.
Also I very much appreciate that you took the time to make the creampie look half decent, a lot of games out there don't.

Only real niggles I had were the MC's dick size was pretty big even for a porn game (to the point were it starts looking silly) and the hood he wears looked a bit off to me (not sure why). Both of those are minor issues, mind.

I think you did a pretty good job at your first game attempt and I would eagerly support/play a larger project if you were to make one.

 

[Spirox]

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Hello everyone,

Here is my first time making a game. It's a small project which I am posting here to get feedback on. I hope I am not breaking any rules here. I needed feedback and was not sure where else to post it. The renders are low quality on purpose. I have made do with what resources I have. Also, I love animations which is why I will always have animations in my games. This also means that render quality will be even lower to make up for the render time.

The plot is simply that your sister has hidden your stuff. You devise a plan to disguise yourself to look like her boyfriend and talk to her. What you did NOT plan was that your sister had more in her mind than just talking with her boyfriend...

There are 3 animated scenes, complete with sounds and cum shot.
And a bunch of CGs.

Any and all feedback welcome!
Thank you for your interest!

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I have a question, for the animation what are you computer specs please?

 

[Canto Forte]

Where is it? Any head butt development on the gaming scene?

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