I'll be honest, I'd have liked to reply to everything.. But, that was a lot. And you did give me a tldr, so let's start there. I don't agree that it's on rails, more than any other VN. I mean, less than most, really. You can choose how to approach Lucien, how to handle Cherry's presence there, how to handle the situation once you're clear of the place, where to take Risa after the events of the morning, how to handle her/change your relationship with her, and finally whether or not you want to engage with her plotline at all. So. I'm not seeing the rails, besides that you went to a place and met a guy you didn't like.
Kid gloves? Well.. I'm not sure how that's the case. See above reply. People seem convinced I'm trying to make Risa into an innocent princess, and that's just.. Not so. She has a bad side, and a sympathetic side. That's all. The fact is, Risa
is a fuck-up. That's.. Kind of the nature of drug abusers. I have a brother who abused drugs for over 20 years. Over the course of my life he's lied to me, borrowed money under false pretenses with zero intention of repaying me, and even stole painkillers I had prescribed to me, following a surgery. A habitual fuck-up, not dissimilar from Risa.
But, he's always had his good side, too. It's just that his positives became muted when he was using.
MC straight-up says it when confronting
her dad. Paraphrasing: She's flawed, but she's a good person.
A huge part of the game is that everyone has in them the potential to be made better. Guy and Nicki were always people with skills that could benefit others, but they were stuck in their shitty convenience store jobs, due to circumstance. Ashe was always smart, but it wasn't until she was given the opportunity to prove it, that she did so. Gabby could and should be working on her art, but instead she's chained to the family business. On and on. So, it stands to reason that Risa, given the right guidance and opportunity, could do more.
As for lack of focus.. Eh, maybe! I mean, it's a big, serial story. It's always been kind of the nature of the thing to wander here or there. I could tell you that I know how the pieces are supposed to align, and that each character's plotline is a step towards the next story point. But, stuff happens. I never really intended for certain plotlines to drag out or resolve as quickly as they did. There's things I'd like to go back and shore up, and things I'd like to clarify. The rework of Chapter One will ameliorate some of that. The rest will have to wait until Season One is wrapped up, and I can address some broader deficiencies. A big one for me is just.. Pacing. If everything over the last nine chapters took place over the span of a month, rather than a week and a half, that'd help shore up some deficiences in certain relationships. I kinda boned myself by putting Gabby's dad in jail, and not getting him out sooner. Instead I kept kicking the can down the road, to add other stuff.
Again.. Stuff happens. I don't have the benefit of sitting down and editing and refining for months. I write it, code it, and render it, all in the span of four months or so. Not making excuses, just explaining. Okay, quick lightning round replies.
Lucien -
I mean, you say it's a disaster, but you also ended the interaction wanting to destroy him, and wondering why you now had to sit through other, more tedious interactions. So, it seems kinda successful, on that level. I understand where you're coming from, but follow my logic. A concerned MC has tried to help Cherry, and been unsuccessful. He's tried to call the cops, who found the place abandoned. Now, all he has is Risa, his one link to the place, who's incapable of being any real help at the moment. What's he going to do, besides wait and strategize?
Carl -
Your main objection seems to be that he's a thinly-drawn caricature of a rich elitist. And.. That's really not far off. But, he's also not really wrong. Look at all the people in this thread, who have said Ashe would be nothing without Guy's job offer. If that's true, then the same thing applies to Guy. He didn't earn his wealth. He just got lucky. Now, does it matter to Mr. Rhodenbarr that Guy's since gone on to do good, proving himself smart and capable? Not really. Why would it? He's still just a gambler. And, he circumvented Risa's normal route home, even if he was unaware he was doing it. Hell, he brought Risa into a drug den! Why wouldn't Carl hate this guy's fucking guts, and waste no time in trying to talk down to him and drive him off?
But, despite his antipathy for Guy, it should be noted that he does actually care about his daughter. It's just a completely toxic kind of care. Risa's made mistakes, but she outright states that constantly being squeezed by her family apparatus, contributed to her relapse. Carl's built a golden cage for his prized daughter, where nothing can get in to hurt her, but nor can she get out. Her life isn't her own, so is it any surprise she'd seize on drugs, just to escape from her reality for a while?
Even beside that, I think he has a little more depth than you say. You can see his persona as a corporate raider, captain of industry type break, when Guy approaches Carl in a more conciliatory manner. He's no longer angry, and he just looks like a tired old man.
Risa -
I'm going to brush past story-necessary stuff. You've made it clear you just don't really like the direction of this development, so that is what it is. I'll just focus on the whole thing of how Guy responds to Risa. So, there's the three basic routes -- side with Lucien, side with Risa, or just try to ignore the whole situation and go home. So, you've got some freedom there.
Now, onto the general tenor of the interaction, as you seem to want some comeuppance for Risa. Let's assume a Dark Guy who only pretends to help Risa will just tell her whatever he needs to, to earn her trust. So, I see no reason for him to berate her. A Corrupt Guy who doesn't really care will just wash his hands of all this and go home. So, that leaves Good Guy.
Good Guy does get angry and demand answers, as you say. What is he realistically supposed to say to Risa, after she just broke down into angry tears? Will it do any good to tell her she's a dumb fuck-up stoner loser? I mean, she said all that herself, already. She's aware. From a character standpoint, I don't know why a Good Guy would just continue to shit on her.
And from a story standpoint.. Why would that be interesting? We've seen her at a high and at a low. We've agreed to help her. She's being given the chance to prove herself. Wouldn't it be more interesting for her and Guy to grow closer, and then maybe she backslides and fucks up, and Guy has to have the come-to-Jesus talk, where he explains that he won't let her be a liability? At that point, the choice of tough love v.s. just tough v.s. pushover gets a little more interesting.
Pepper -
I mean.. If you're skipping the webcam stuff, you're skipping a substantial part of her story. Don't know what to tell you, there. You'll eventually get to a point where her story gets a little more interesting, but skipping that stuff for now is going to limit her content for a bit.
General thoughts.. I dunno, man! I think that you were kind of dead-set on hating the chapter ahead of time, so I'm not surprised you came to the conclusion you hated it. Do I wish it was otherwise? Sure. But, you seem to have taken up the position it was always going to be bad.
I'm not trying to be a dick here, but looking at most of your recent posts in here, it's just a lot of, "Neon's fucked up, Neon's fucked up, he's really fucked up this time, game's doomed, oh no, it's all over, if only he'd listened to us.."
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