VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Futa Dormitory [v0.0.3] [Under the shell]

  1. 1.00 star(s)

    ghosthog

    Besides being about futas, the only pro I can say is in general the renders are decent. However even they are not consistent quality or lighting wise, especially the laundromat frames.

    The story just seems incoherent. I believe it’s both a translation issue and general writing issue. I feel like the author is a 16 year old Russian who has some odd sense of the world only through watching porn. Characters are nonsensical, it feels like the author has never been to university nor California/America. There are no transitions from location to location or to indicate a clear and coherent passing of time. It feels like the MC is the only new student at a large uni. I get this is fantasy and/or scifi, but there still should be some touch of logic/sense to things besides the given aspects of the fantasy world. I believe to proceed it would be best if the author wrote fantasy at least about scenarios they are somewhat familiar/experienced with. At the least, it needs both a good editor and a good translator to give any clarity to it.