VN - HTML - Graduation [v0.1.0] [Devorny]

Immersive story and brilliant writing set the stage for a game with immense potential. Though content is sparse, the narrative depth promises a rich, evolving experience. Highly recommend keeping an eye on it.

This game is great in every way, except for the following problems:

- The logic of the game in the antagonist section

Obviously it would be easy for the MC to expose the antagonist and get him out of his family and girlfriend's life. He just has to show the direct messages that the antagonist sent to him ! His family and girlfriend would be appalled and would want nothing to do with the antagonist.
You could counter that oh the MC doesn't want them to know about his past with the antagonist. To that I say he can select wich text he shows, but even then how can wanting to avoid some embarrasment from his past justify letting a convicted drug dealer seeking revenge, enter his family and girlfriend's life ?

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We need a more logical story so that mc and fmc and mc's family really try their best, but in the end Darien fucks them

- the story shows the superiority of blacks over whites (Darien and Jason - Jason is the alpha in the bros group)
this is also illogical (it's not like blacks are superior in the real world!) and it's humiliating these days

- MC's personality and appearance are not like losers, so it is logical to have choices, that is, two paths, one Darien succeeds, the second MC succeeds, I myself am a NTR fan, but we need a game, we are players, not just a observers who just follows the story and can't do anything
Forced NTR is only right when the story makes a lot of sense MC tries his best, I don't see any effort at the moment he just sleeps

If these 3 problems are solved, the score of 5 is definitely worthy of this game and I will change the score

Good premise, that's done a lot in lit-erotica, but really fun through the lens of a phone-based game. Great models too. Look forward to future releases and more content.

It's great that it's not just the the stuff back home but the MC has things going on in their current circumstances to that are building to some interesting futures.

I love the UI, sound effects, videos. Well written like the characters are very believable. I actually got that sick feeling (which i love) when i rang the girlfriend and got the noise effect, not many games can make me feel something like that. Now we just need so much more! you have a hit on your hands my man please keep up the good work. *experienced P-game enjoyer*

My 2 star rating is relative to the ability of the dev. Devorny is certainly competent at writing good characters and dialogues. There is a good level of credibility and realism. That is why the ridiculous hook of the NTR plot does not work. Obviously it would be easy for the MC to expose the antagonist and get him out of his family and girlfriend's life. He just has to show the direct messages that the antagonist sent to him ! His family and girlfriend would be appalled and would want nothing to do with the antagonist.

You could counter that oh the MC doesn't want them to know about his past with the antagonist. To that I say he can select wich text he shows, but even then how can wanting to avoid some embarrasment from his past justify letting a convicted drug dealer seeking revenge, enter his family and girlfriend's life ?

The suspension of disbelief is too hard because Devorny doesn't write the MC as an idiot. It's too hard because the whole rest of the dialogues and behaviors are realistic and credible.

It's like you forgive a dumb and fun action movie for being dumb, but if you have a smart story an incredibly dumb and unbelievable plot twist can ruined it.

From a personal taste standpoint, I dislike NTR through the bull. I like the teasing coming from the girlfiend. The bull is just a stuntcock for the kink I enjoy with the girlfriend. I like domination and humiliation coming from the women, not the stuntcock.

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I have edited to 3 stars because I think my 2 stars was too harsh

very high potential.
pretty good UI so far.

videos plays really really well and the audio for the phone calls in the game is very good. very effective mechanic and really well done game and story wise.

great start.

I'm impressed,
This game has 0 bugs in it. The dev explains the game very well, girls are hot and the story is already well developed.

The NTR is already present and very promising in this game, the fact that the "bad guy" is an old friend of the main character.

Loved it!

Looks like an excellent start I do actually enjoy this style of game coming around at the moment so that's a plus from me. Has great potential as long as it gets consistent updates I think it'll make a great NTR game.

looks clean the UI is clean.
good potentiel and can turn into a good NTR game.
some new faces than the regular ones used in such NTR games.
some good promises are made for the future so lets see how it developes.