English:..........4/10
User Interface:...4/10
User Experience:..6/10
Art:..............8/10
Dialogue:.........3/10
Story:............2/10
Opinion:..........2/10................
Avg:...........4.14/10 [2.07/5]
I apologize, this is going to be a long one. It somehow gets worse as you get further in the story. Ah, yes. One of the two major ways to pander to American wallets- I mean players, is to have a boring protagonist that is ex military, and theme or name it after classic rock. Because the majority of the red pill community have an equal hardon for military jargon as well as subservient cuckquean women with no personality, that are related to them, to coddle their fragile egos. Throw in the incest tag, perpetuating the southern redneck stereotype, and by Jobe, I think you have a recipe for a patreon milker, my dudes. Before even (trying to) replay this I know every possible outcome this would have.(I'm surprised I actually didn't, this shit is bonkers) I also remember the shit Engrish, sub-par patreon censoring, and completely dry deliveries. If you truly wanted to kill me, make me play lazy boring AVNs with google translate dialog, default UI, and a plot that is "MC returns home after X years, suddenly the family wants to have sex. Also the mafia/big business wants to do bad things to the family because dad did something in the past." I would gladly smash my head against my desk until I can't anymore. My faith in this is further diminished by devs previous works. Abandoned, Abandoned, and a comic(we all know web comics are known for ending
aimirite?) I will
TRY to give this a fair shot. Last time I played, I quit pretty early on with the poor English and bland intro.
The game opens to the choppiest animation I've seen in a bit. I do not get motion sickness from anything, but somehow, my tummy gave me the rumblies when I saw it jerk into the computer screen to name the boring MC. You're also shown terrible AI art of random people with a voice over narrated by someone speaking...
English. I refused to listen to a word of it as it was spoken poorly, should have been accompanied by words on the screen, and the voice is pitched down and modulated on top of the eastern European accent, so you can barely understand. All I got from it, before throwing my headphones to the side, was something was going to affect the middle class. Affirming my "Big business/mafia" prediction. And can we talk about how terrible the AI images were? I think
only one of them didn't look like a hollow lovecraftian monster, because his eyes were closed. I have a supremely negative view on AI art as a product, first and foremost. But why was the intro made like this? You know how easy it is to whip up a faux news channel lower third and make a cityscape in blender for free? Or spend a little money on stock footage to roll over with the terrible narration? I mean, we all know most of these budding AVN developers would never actually spend money to make a game. But every alternative was better than the AI montage from hell that we got, here. On to meeting our MC. He rides a bus to a gas station in the middle of nowhere... To be picked up by his mother in her car? Excuse me, what? Busses have stations. And it's not a city bus it's like a long-trip Greyhound bus. I know full well it's to create the "Route 66 vibe" for no other reason than to try to look cool, but this is nonsense. Then, the first two lines of dialog "Where is the lighter? It has to be on me. I had before packing." Technically, these aren't the first lines, but most sane people skipped the narration and open up to that. I know full well English is a stupid language. It's a bastardization of almost every language and is hard to learn. But proofread AT LEAST the first 10 minutes of your script competently. My god.
If you didn't notice, my first paragraph has come and gone, and I've only gotten to the first two lines of dialog. It's going to be a long night for me... And the first conversation isn't
ANY better. They talk like cavemen bashing rocks together. Who is rating this 4-5 stars?! None of them have read this. There's just no way. It has to be "Welp. There's an incest tag, and I'm a redneck. Best game ever." Anyway, MC's mom shows up and tells him "There are some people eager to great you." ..."Greet" is the word you're looking for, bud. MC returned home from some ceremony and said she shouldn't have come to it "for her safety." I don't understand, yet, how a graduation(?) ceremony would be dangerous, outside of "There were guys there and you might've been attracted to them, not me." I'm kidding, but still. The already trash English gets worse when the engine on the car dies. Again, why did he have her pick him up in the middle of nowhere? Based on the shots, the bus was going the way they were heading. Smart. Which is further backed up by the fact they specifically say they end up in the suburbs. A bus station would very much be nearby. Also, MC is regarded as a soldier of fortune. Meaning a mercenary for hire. Not a valiant hero marine. But I'm sure that,
that is a translation issue, not ineptitude. This scene introduces the family and friends in the form of a welcome home party. Ricardo, muscle sliders to max "Women! Am I right?!" type annoyance. Mia, hot gamer? All you learn is she likes games and thinks MC is hot. She actually completely disappears after this. Alexis, loving sister-type. AND ANOTHER LINEAR GAME, PUSHING A DUMB, USELESS PHONE INTERFACE. To whoever popularized this "feature," I hate you. And, since the intro was universally skipped, you learn MC was in special forces here. Then the last family member, Sophia. Nerdy recluse mad that the MC, who she no doubt is in love with, left home for soldier class. I'd like to note that the proofreading in the Sophia scene is miles better than everything else so far. Which is odd.
After that whole exchange, MC talks to his mom. She, apparently, hasn't worked in a non descript amount of years, hated by town for a nondescript reason, and is now being sued for another nondescript reason for half a million dollars. Okay. Then, that same night, his mom comes to his room, drunk, saying she got him a job as deputy sheriff. So MC has been rewarded for doing nothing, we know nothing about him, and just what America would need. An ex-soldier in a police uniform, because that's been working so well for us. Societal commentary aside, MC meets the mayor, mom's friend, for his Sheriff job... In a dark back alley? To blab some exposure about some murdered girl that was the sister of some guy that will be MC's boss. It's never explained why they went to that back alley. Then the most generic western-esque sheriff type greets you at the station, James. It'd be funny if it wasn't so bad. MC is given no police training, because shoot first ask never is the American dream, and hired on the spot. Enter Brenda, the partner. Token black girl with a Cajun accent? I guess? She doesn't keep it long though. MC asks about her and all she says is she's new in town and just applied for the job. Wow. Truly a Shakespearean character. But the job MC and Brenda are called for is this police force of three are now going, guns blazing, into a gang hideout on MC's first day. It's weird, the English stabilizes here, a bit, but also includes Spanish from a Mexican gang? But the visit ends abruptly and hard cuts to MC at the Mayors house. Tell me, are we in Nowhere, Kansas, suburbia, or in some coastal city? Because for some reason her house has an endless horizon over the sea. But the nothing conversation they have just ends. I guess to establish she's a little shady? Sure. Then BAM. Girl in captivity for two frames. Hard cut back to MC being anime protagonist number 59673.
The "case" takes MC to a laundromat. He literally calls it a cliche, because the writer REALLY wants this to be a crime noir, modern western, redneck wet dream, and mafia tale all at once. WHY MC went here, is never said. But he goes in, learns nothing, suspects them for no reason, then leaves. Stellar work. They also introduce the THIRD language to be spoken. YOUR ENGLISH ISN'T EVEN GOOD. PLEASE STOP ADDING OTHER LANGUAGES. But I digress. MC returns to the chief, instead of telling MC about the laundromat, he goes off on a tangent about how the town's gone to shit. For the umpteenth time... Then gives MC the job to stake out the mat for NO REASON. Prostitutes show up, MC and Brenda pretend to kiss, she's now in love with him. Play the late night with mom scene. Then MC's hacker friend he
of course has shows him using basic commands in a linux terminal, which I laughed at, and tells a story about, I guess, the guy at the mat being a war criminal? Then MC... Has the choice to look up and deal with incest? Meaning this ENTIRE section would be nonsense if you didn't patch the game? And a long winded therapy session. Yet another AVN cliche at this point. All set up to rationalize the brain damage one would have for having intimate feelings for family. "Boo hoo, mom was drunk and talked to me in her sleepwear, because she was sleeping... In her own home." Followed by a scene with Sophia being unpleasant because the writer needs to feign conflict somehow, and give MC another scene where he ogles a family member. Twice in a row, with Eliza, by the way. She even has a creeper in the form of a southern hick redneck, you know, the kind that would love this game? In what universe is there this culturally diverse city featuring a foreign mob, Mexican gang, bigoted hicks, and a big business redevelopment project? There are WAY too many moving parts in this. This feels like someone looked at every plot to every trashy cop/crime drama and pasted in anything they saw that week. Along with whatever incest trope they wanted to showcase.
After that travesty, Eliza reveals they got, and are rebuilding, MC a muscle car. Has no one thought "Hmm. We're in a lot of debt, a car probably won't be a good investment at this time." Every decision every character makes, is the absolute dumbest thing. Down to Eliza taking off her clothes to use a welder. I honestly don't know if I can make it much farther into this. It's a hodgepodge of poorly realized TV tropes under bad English, nothing characters, and waving a giant incest flag. It honestly gives me a headache. The cop stuff is a caricature of police work. Brenda acts like a scared child at all times. James tries really hard to be an off-brand Clint Eastwood. The villains are literally anyone that has a penis other than MC. It's, frankly, a joke. You go from a serial killer scene to a cosplay themed escape room where mechanical tentacles assault his sister? Am I the only one who realizes how disjointed this is? It's not funny. As far as I can tell no jokes have been told, and none of the situations are even comical. So what is this trying to do? Every scene feels completely disconnected from the last. And the biggest joke of all is the game comes to an abrupt end in the middle of, what I can only assume is, the first actual lewd scene. Which means, the chapters or episodes, whatever they're segmenting into, aren't planned out and just end when they hit some arbitrary time or word limit. I do not care about a single thing that happened in this. None of the characters were anything but a one dimensional trope. And it played out like a kid in a toybox imagining whatever he wanted, with all possible toys he could get his hands on.
The English is completely inconsistent. The intro is almost illegible. Some parts are stiff but tolerable, and the rest is barely passable. Someone, that natively speaks English, needs to be tasked (or you know, PAID) to proofread and edit this, desperately. The UI/UX is stock, aside from the useless phone screen and a textbox. But the game doesn't know what it wants to do so it added detective vision, and a walkthrough that only sometimes works. The art is DAZ. It's nothing to scoff at, but we've seen it all before. The dialogue is either campy cop drivel, boring slice of life, or "GASP, I'm twenty something, but I'm popping a boner like a 12 year old for my mommy?!" And like I said the story is a mess. It's like someone went on netflix and somehow was able to just click play random episodes from random shows, randomly. And THAT'S how they get their plotlines. And I'm not into incest so I don't sit here with baited breath waiting for MC to bone his family. inb4: tHeN wHy pLaY aN iNcEsT gAmE?! Because that's all anyone on this site ever makes. If, by the end of all my incessant rambling, you still find this story good or entertaining, honestly, see a doctor. This is schizophrenic and I don't know why it's so highly rated. But if this does it for you, more power to ya, I guess. If this wants to improve, it needs focus. Cut back on the dumb tropey characters that act like a stereotype. Let the MC EARN a lewd scene or reward of some kind. And slow down a bit, at least in terms of the story. I don't mind or care about the slow burn of the relationships, but the story gives me whiplash. When you sit down to write the next section, read the section before it and segue into the next. Or, better yet, have it cause the next event.
