English: 7
User Interface: 6
User Experience: 6
Art: 7
Dialogue: 4
Story: 6
Opinion: 5
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Avg: 5.86/10
As of right now, before even replaying this story. From what I remember it's a difficult story to rate. On one hand, it puts a light to real world horror stories that happen every day in hollywood. On the other hand it kinda uses that as a framing object for MC to eventually have sex with the victims of that awful shit. I'm well aware I'm one of the few idiots on this site with an actual conscience, and as such I can't "enjoy" a lot of the actual garbage on this site. But this story walks a very fine line between hero complex and taking advantage of scared women based on the plot twist of Batman v Superman. (ie a character having the same name as someone else.) That, added with the late 80s characterization of some bullies and plot "twists" that can literally be seen before the plot is even laid out, just makes so many story points flat out boring. But it also gets points not being the same awful plot 90% of the other "games" on here have. And the joke that MC is so bad at his job he's supposedly "the best at" that he couldn't stay up past 9pm to walk around and find some cretin jerking off in their bushes is laughable at best. And the writer still manages to have a fucking stupid horny brain character insert with Steve and I wish there was a version of this with him cut out of it.
The story is pretty cliche, you're MC, a bodyguard for wealthy people. Suddenly MC's called by world famous supermodel Charlotte to protect her daughter Emma. Only MC does the anime exclamation grunt "!!!" She has the same name as... The sentence trails off as you rightly assume "MC once guarded and fell in love with another woman named Emma." The twist is: the now dead Emma was best friends with Charlotte while MC was working with her. Anyways, MC takes the job as some sort of self redemption. He learns Emma is being stalked and tormented BY THE ONLY OTHER MALE MENTIONED IN THE GAME so far. Wow. Imagine that. And Charlotte being a superstar coveted by every rich male in the industry has severe androphobia due to past experiences and is hesitant to hire a male bodyguard. But the mischievous sister, Lucy recommends MC to hopefully fight that fear and have a male presence around. She also serves as early game sexual content, being the trope of sexually forward, self conscious sister of the "world's hottest woman." And from there its banal day to day nothings while MC screws the sister then snowballs into learning about a corrupt billionaire sex ring. Like, if MC was a cop, I'd understand, but all of that couldn't be solved by a bodyguard that doesn't WANT to deal with all of that until he's eventually in a relationship with one (or all) of the women in the house.
One of my big issues with the writing happens in a lot of these stories. When Lucy tells MC about the times Charlotte was attacked, suddenly MC has this fake brain blast like "I know she's not telling me everything I HAVE to know it all." When? At what point in the dialogue did Lucy seem like she was holding something back? He had that thought mid-sentence even, so she wasn't even really done talking. And why would she even have to tell him? It's someone else's trauma, not a secret that prevents MC from doing his job. That he SUCKS at by the way. Every bad event in this story could have been prevented if MC actually guarded a fucking body. Break in? Stay up later than 9 on a school night. Stalker? Look out a window for once. Possible kidnapping? Follow the girl you're supposed to be protecting while she goes on her first date with a piece of shit. They all hold MC on some pedestal, but he really just doesn't do his job. And every interaction with Emma. She acts like an 8 year old. EVERY GAME ON THIS SITE does this. If there is a daughter, the writer's only frame of reference of a younger girl is just that, a brain dead toddler that pouts. She's supposed to be a young woman getting into the fashion industry. Not a little girl that likes pretty clothes. And it's not even just her, MC pokes at her like a kid too, to the point where he lets her paint his nails for him. I mean, come on.
And at the point you make the "big Charlotte decision" there has been exactly ONE point where MC and her share any iota of intimacy. "Oh... I can't deny I feel something for her." Outside of the night MC saves Kaylah, all she does is kep distance and all he does is say "Yes Ms. Lloyd." Like, as a character, yes Charlotte is a likeable mother-type and despite her troubles, seems like a decent person. But beyond (failing at) doing his job, MC hasn't had any personal moments with her. It feels like a rush, as at that point it was what, seven episodes of an adult game with minimal sexual content? I, personally like the burn, let them have more than just a common enemy and him being contractually obligated to live with her. But people paid for this, I'm sure the brain-dead brigade stormed in with "I pay FIVE whole dollars a month for this, me want sex." So it rushed that, and then the story snowballs into the Epstien-esque sex ring and police investigations.
The truth is at this point, I don't think this will ever be finished. MC has barely held hands with the main LI all the while screwing Lucy and/or Kaylah. And with what's building up, it seems like Emma and possibly Suzi are going to be LI's? Emma is the most brain-dead, childish, naive little robot and it would feel completely disgusting to even hint at a romantic relationship with her. So that makes one of the good points, the characterization of Charlotte, also a huge weakness, as all other LI's just are compared to her. And that's half of their personality. Kaylah wants to be just like Charlotte. Lucy feels worthless always compared to her sister. Emma wants to be stong like her mother. And Suzi isn't even on the radar yet. All that added to maybe one update a year? This is going to be milked. Which is unfortunate.
And I wanna be clear, my rating for "English" is not just how well some broken English is presented. It's spelling, flow, and just how it feels to read. And A LOT of this feels robotic. A lot of phases just aren't said the ways they're presented in this. And it's all british spelling but 100% based in L.A. I dunno just something about feels not quite all there. The UI is mostly edited and looks alright, and the UX wasn't broken or impacted by it. The art is fine. A lot of dead faces and stuff but it looks good overall. The Dialogue would be better if Emma was mute. Every line she fumbles out, she acts like a child and the ONE time she's told "no" she pouts and cries like an impetulant spoiled brat. The story isn't bad. It feels like I've seen or read this exact story somewhere, but it's executed fine, so my opinion is middle of the road, I guess.