VN Ren'Py Abandoned Hoover`s Big Love [Ch.1] [Midzayaki]

[Midzay]

Overview:
A kinetic novel, for those who take their time. Gulliver (the hero of Swift's work) finds himself on an island in modern times. How he survives and how he will live is the story.
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Thread Updated: 2022-10-07
Release Date: 2022-10-07
Developer: Midzayaki

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Censored: No
Version: Ch. 1
OS: Windows, Linux, Mac, Android
Language: English
Length: Very Short (~10 minutes)
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[Kinky Bully]

May Guliver find peace in giant Pussy paradise.

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

It's great when an old story is updated. This looks interesting.
Thanks
Midzayaki

 

[UnoriginalUserName]

*reads title*

 

[super_tramp]

This looks like a person that may have some artistic talents but doesn't have the computer hardware to create his/her true vision.

..and look, no crowd funding link (ie patreon), to try and milk people of their money on 1st release.

Anyways. Good luck to you, Midzayaki.

 

[xmilteach]

thx

 

[Crow Armbrust]

THX

 

[JadeKitten]

What is this writing

 

[Midzay]

What is this writing

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Annie thinks the salt crystals are cutting into her skin. She thinks it would be good if someone made a cream that would protect her skin from these cuts. She can't invent this cream herself, because she has decided that she's going to have to deal with using skin blemishes from uneven tanning. It's absurd, but that's what Annie thinks.

Original text for Deepl translator: "— "I wish someone had invented a cream that would protect the delicate skin of children, women, feminine gays and transvestites from cuts, especially in the crotch. Too bad I'm already busy collecting and recycling spots of uneven tanning."

 

[Oliz82]

Hello.

The samples made me come. And the result is surprising.

The worldbuilding is limited.
The characters are few and different.
The plot seems interesting but wasn't reflected in the first chapter.
The artistic side is well done.

This game is similar to a book with images. And it's fine like that. The overall story was interesting, though the main protagonist has no role. Some explainations were welcomed (satellite obsession, property of the trees, the bet, the populations...). The couple is really lovely and their feelings are shown through. The sex scene was correct, outside Juan's face when he released (it's more suitable to an horror theme), even though it's not animated.

The length of the text is different on every page which is understandable but some are too short like this one :
If it's this short, it's useless and gives one more click for the player.

The dialogues are sometime stranges : you've chosen to write the name of the one talking with his own color and the sentences just below with some necessary description, without punctuation. However, you did it differently sometime :
Forgetting the name or adding " ", making it redundant or keeping the same presentation for thoughts and other variants

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Those were just the more representative examples.
Solution : keep the same display for the same category from the beginning to the end.

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Also, what is the correct name : Hoover, Gulliver, Gouver, Guver?

The english seems fine but, since you're using a style similar to a book, you should be careful.

Good continuation.

 

[Midzay]

Guys, ten months ago my family was subjected to a search and seizure of all computers and phones. This is due to the fact that I criticize the state and the authorities. Next week I'm going to the police to get my computers. I don't know if I will come home from the police or go to jail. I'm honestly a bit scared.
Anyway, mentally I'm not ready to continue working on this novel because it's been too long and I have to move on and do other stories. I'm working on a new story now, and if I'm free, I want to start a novella blog next week where I'll show its progress.

 

[Midzay]

Hello.

The samples made me come. And the result is surprising.
...
Good continuation.

I'm sorry I saw it too late. You are a very valuable reader. I really am.

 

[Midzay]

The police were willing to return the seized tech, but when I informed them that I wanted to check if the tech was working and the data was safe, the police disappeared. The police are not responding to my attorney's inquiries. I've decided that I'm not going to wait for this story to conclude, and I want to post my progress on the new novella here:
Untitled kinetic novel by Midzay [Development Thread]

 

[Midzay]

We had a sleepless night. The police returned the computer equipment to our family. They didn't destroy the data, which was a pleasant surprise. My characters are with me now, on the loose. They are impatient and want to get into new footage as soon as possible. I've missed them very much.