VN - Ren'Py - How Bad Can It Be? [Ch.2] [Doshima]

Ch2. Review

So far, so good. Not your typical NTR full of misunderstandings and where everybody gropes the wife, no, it starts fairly vanilla -meaning there's some care the build up.

Assets are ok for the most part, MC is also ok, LI could have a little bit more of personality maybe? I think it has the potential to go really far, best of luck!

VERSION: Ch.2
SUMMARY: Fair enough AVN but nothing remarkable...
RATINGS: (out of 5): ⭐⭐⭐

NOTE: The following categories and scoring method are my own criteria and may require more context. Additionally, scoring is based on the state, and what is in the current version and not what may or may not be introduced at a later point.

1. Character (Model) Visuals......... : ⭐⭐⭐
2. General (World) Visuals........... : ⭐⭐⭐
3. Animation Quality................. : ⭐⭐⭐
4. Character Personality(Persona).... : ⭐⭐⭐
5. Story & Dialogue.................. : ⭐⭐⭐
6. Writing & Grammar................. : ⭐⭐⭐
7. UX/UI, Game Type & Mechanics.......: ⭐⭐
8. Playtime & Pacing..................: ⭐⭐⭐
9. Music & Sounds.....................: ⭐⭐⭐⭐
10. Adult Content & Fetishes.......... : ⭐⭐⭐

Average: X of 50 possible points giving a X% rating i.e. X stars.

PROS: - See my opinions section for details.

1. Animations are not bad, not great either, simple really, quality does go down in terms of fidelity.
2. LIs are ok, MC looks fine/good but the first LI in the MCs beds eyes are so far apart you'd think she was a lion, plus she has the mane for it.
3. Writing is fine, reads and is structured well.
4. Music is cheesy and typical free audio sounds. At least there are some lewd/H-scene sounds. Also interactive sounds are a nice touch, good work.

CONS: - See my opinions section for details.

1. Animation quality is not really great, not horrible either. More for stating as an actual con.
2. Some LIs don't look really good, like mentioned above.
3. Opacity setting for the stupid blackhole of a dialogue box would be nice...
4. Some visuals leave much to be desired, eyes, lighting and render quality are not always consistent.
5. The developer is one of those that discovered the button for creating vinyl scratches, a sound that I hate by now due to its overuse in AVNs, it happens in the same bathroom scene at least twice thats already 2x too many!
6. Try-hard humour, breaking the forth wall and having the narrator/developer chime in ever so often, is also not funny for me...sorry...I am just too cynical to appreciate this probably...
7. Story is FML...it feels like a whole lot of ideas put together to create this "unique" scenario or dialogue, but its just to artificial to feel like a natural occurrence to me.
8. While its not said, the current path is clearly NTR, CUCK, SHARING.

OPINIONS, SUGGESTIONS & FINAL REMARKS:

NOTE: The following remarks are my personal opinions and thoughts, which may provide more context and could be useful to the developer. (Read them or don't)

• Sometimes the world or environment looks better than the character, like the bathroom the MC brushes teeth, the MC face looks pixelated, poor lighting, eyes look like he could be blind and squint.
• The story or scenario is completely implausible and bullshit, again pointing out that the writer created a bunch of conditions the MC and player do not know the details of to create the perfect scenario in where the MC will share his LI with another kid, all because why, his boss, the kids dad told him to, with no reason other than "I can't tell you" The same boss who is giving the CEO post to his kid son instead of the MC who has been working their...bit of a fuck you in a way eh?
• Regarding the NTR, CUCK, SHARING routes, the MC has all the options to go these routes and the fact that you can either go with them or not again tells you the game pretty much caters to that kind of kink and if you don't go that route it would be more vanilla and less kinky.
• Speaking of kinks, there can be more, and from what I can tell the LIs reluctance initially for a creampie suggests she can get pregnant, this would be a good kink, but clarity on this from the developer would be nice. One can also assume that she could get knocked up by someone else also considering the sharing routes?
• With the above point, I ask the developer to really get the tags and future tags out there ASAP and accurate as can be, so players know what to expect, also work on the features and content description a bit to ensure players know what they stepping into exactly.

TLDR:

Nothing special and nothing stands out, its a typical AVN with fair/decent visuals, audio, plot and writing, but nothing I can say is very good. Some refinement and maybe I can give it 4 stars but honestly I am just not experiencing that kind of quality YET. It has some potential, but im not holding my breath really that the quality or much of anything will improve.

Solid effort for first attempt though!

Great start!

There's a lot of potential here.
Again, I saw that there is one path that is unavoidable, that's fine, but remember to stick to choices that will allow us to mostly keep it under our control. I like NTR and NTS when we have a choice about it.

Promising first update, specially after reading what this dev was doing before, the story is nothing new but its a good base for the game to go into many directions, speciallly after one of the last scenes that it seems to b the game can have a darker path too. Art is good enough atm and its clear it will improve, just like the animations, some much better than others. Music always help and in this case is not annoying at all.