I want to make my first vn, and I want you to review some characters I created.

[fakenick123]

I am only posting female characters, because I think they matter more . Let me know whether you like them or not.

Spoiler: Liv

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Spoiler: July

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Spoiler: Helly

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Spoiler: NotNamed1

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Spoiler: NotNamed2

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[Deleted member 5410619]

I would say:
Reduce the size of there asses.
Beyond that:
Grandma.
Mother.
Bitch sister.
Neighbor past her prime.
Holy Hell what is wrong with your face.

I woudnt call them attractive but that is because i am not into old people.
And helly looks really fat.

 

[Losersriot]

 

[OldMoonSong]

Before you get too invested into these particular characters I'd suggest you spend a month or so browsing the Daz 3d art thread, browsing the work of others, joining discussions on design and rendering tips, and developing your eye.

3d rendering is still art, much like drawing, painting, etc. But you'll be surprised by how quickly you can improve. And, like in traditional artwork, you'll look back at your earliest prototypes and respond, "what the hell was I thinking when I made this?" I myself have experienced this, and I've seen it in others posting on the art thread, as I've actually watched their progression and growth in

All that is to say, they don't look great (in my opinion). The first one, Liv, looks the best and most developed in terms of design.

They all look quite a bit older than the typical female character on this site. I'm not a fan of the proportions but that's one thing you'll learn quickly and come to see yourself as get more practice. Keep going!

 

[UncleAi]

Liv and NotNamed2's leg look strange to me. Almost like a bump on calf. You may need to check the morph.

 

[Eagle1900]

liv has bow legs or at least it looks like...
helly even her left leg doesn't look the same as her right...
july she is very covered and she doesn't give me the idea of being very attractive ...
notnamed1 you make him a nice belly, but ass and thigh are disproportionate
finally, the last one you posted seems to have crooked or otherwise dry legs too, compared to a huge ass and big boobs...
in my opinion you have to work a lot on the proportions, it's not said that big asses also have big tits and vice versa, indeed often a "small" girl has a stunning ass, or those with spectacular boobs have normal asses... this is how they all look go to the plastic surgeon and this very much extinguishes the desire to play with it (at least for me it is clear).
don't get discouraged and try to make the best of every criticism to improve the project, which seems done a little too hastily.

 

[fakenick123]

Thanks everyone for your opinion. I probably should mention some things in my at the start. The proportions are a big screwed, and it was kinda on purpose, because I just want to make characters thicc, but athletic at the same time. This is the style that I personally enjoy, and I know some people would like it, but some people will not. I may tone down it a little. Now about characters:
Liv I supposed to by gym rat, so she has fitness morphs on her, I don't know if the bow leg thing is because of the pose or not, I will take a look at it. Btw, she is supposed to be in her late 20s, not grandma xD.
July is supposed to be a quiet girl, with more of a romantic plot about her, she will become more "sexy" later in the game.
I used a terrible render for Helly and the outfit is not making here justice, so I get it you guys don't like her.
Notnamed1 one is supposed to be very thick latina, but maybe I overtuned here a little xd.
Notnamed2 she has similar fitness morphs on her to liv, so that's why their legs look similar, I will also look into that.

 

[Eagle1900]

This is the style that I personally enjoy, and I know some people would like it, but some people will not.

ok, but you make games that people have to like and in fact you ask their opinion... obviously you like them, but you have to "satisfy" the market. I advise you to keep the various details under control, a good game differs from that with an excellent game.
good luck with your project

 

[fakenick123]

I am just saying that I am trying to fit into the niche, more than making a game that all people would like. Anyway, thanks for your opinion, I will try to keep what you said in mind. Thanks for good words and also good look to you too

 

[Ophanim]

Honestly, no, fuck that, they don't have to satisfy anyone's market unless this is explicitly a for profit enterprise. If they're just planning to make a game because they want to, then really, it's all about how people feel about the art, not what people feel will be profitably bland and inoffensive. Like, people do compromise on their art for profit, but I feel like it's rarely the better for it. The result is kind of... sanded down. Less controversial, for maximum appeal, but less moving to any specific person. Imo, anyway.

Though speaking of the art, I'd say... I like that July's proportions feel close to that of a real woman, and she looks really believably awkward, as if someone waved a camera in her face and told her to pose like 5 seconds before the shot. That's kinda nice to see that level of awkward because Daz models always feel like they're emulating women in professional porn. Otherwise the butts look a bit... pointy(?) from the side though. Sorry fakenick123 I'm not super into Daz modelling so it's a little hard for me to offer critique there

Anyway, post the dudes please! It's pretty rare for me to see guys in Daz games where I go 'whoa, he's hot', so show us those so we can catch you before you make another game featuring some veiny, schlubby, thumb with eyeballs lmao

 

[♍VoidTraveler]

All of them are so-so, and i'm likely being quite generous.