VN - Ren'Py - Kingdom's Bane [v0.1.2] [Desire & Lust]

Very hot stuff, nice and fresh 3DCG. Premise is standard medieval, nothing extreme for the moment, in the sphere of plausibility. Decent writing, let's see what a new update might do here
Review is for 0.12, there is very little content right now, and the ending of the update was very abrupt.
I ll revise my review accordingly next update, but this one shows promise
Hey dev, don't make the classic mistake and overextend the cast, at least regarding the LIs, existing ones are super hot and enough

I really liked MC's wife, she is really keeping the house together ^^. The swinging Theme will be the backbone of the game in the future. I am really looking forward to. I hope the developer completes this project successfully.

It seems omission of genres/tags/theme of the game to gain initial interest is trending for AVN games this year. Contrary to the info provided that this game would be choice-heavy, the state of mc's household already set sharing/free use as a norm since even though you seem to have choices, the alternate scene still implied that sharing between father-mother-son-daughters are normal and even encouraged by the mc if the player chose the sharing option between m/s while if not it implied to be b/s instead.

Right now, this game seems to try to be a sharing/swinging-focused clone to the other well-known game that have similar settings that (in my knowledge) at least have avoidable tags depend on the player. So for the next update, a clearer identity of the game might be beneficial to everyone so the players know what to expect. Dev might have visions for the game already so embrace it, please don't waste anyone time with half-baked could be harem story with promised choices/avoidable kinks just to fall short to delivered.

Not as bad as the others here make it out to be.

The swinging aspect is really hot. I hope the dev focuses on swinging.

Contrary to the previous review, I think the writing is good. More concrete: it is clear, concise, and engaging. The main problem with writing in games is when it is boring, AKA "a wall of text".

I personally found myself being invested in the MMC's wife. And the women are beautiful. A problem might be that the girls "Alleya", "Atheya", and "Allanya" have way too similar names, making them hard to differentiate when in the same scene.

The game and concept so far (less than 10 minutes of gameplay) seem very promising. It is definitely too early to make an in-depth review of this game as of yet.

And who cares if there is a bug that makes it impossible to rename your character...?

Quick and dirty review, I will update it later with my customary full review, for now, best wait and see what the dev does with this.

Pros.

1. Decent quality models even if they kinda resemble some known characters. Though its probably to be expected to eventually happen.
2. General visuals are good, but content is kinda sparse and scenes feel bland/empty.
3. Being able to set relationships is always a bonus.

Cons.

1. Typos, grammar and some general dialogue revision is needed, e.g. queen being referred to as king in dialogue? Using looks instead of sounds, scavenger hunter instead of hunt. Details like that are noticeable.
2. Per above, the dialogue has a hint of novice to it, I would suggest having someone with writing skills review it.
3. Some inconsistency in the setting e.g. king refers to the MC as child but he isn't a priest and only looks slightly older than the MC, plus the MC bowing is customary and expected for the time, yet dismissed by the king like he is the MCs dad or something, this is not the correct way of addressing royalty in medieval times . Also, where are the guards and other people, the entire throne room is empty, but the king wants more privacy?...ermm...OK? Again review the writing.
4. To add to this, character relations need some update, one moment the MC says he wants to see the children, the next the player gets to set the relationship? Opt for saying "where are the kids?" then fade to next scene and set the relationship, this gives you more leeway to dodge any issues with incest or not.
5. No music, ambient, environmental, interaction sounds of any kind are present. I am guessing lewd scenes neither...
6. Opacity setting for dialogue is missing, pretty basic thing for VNs are dialogue options so the player can read without effort or missing 1/4 of the screen
7. Too short, no adult content, hard to give decent review.

TLDR:

Looks decent, but writing needs work, not just the structure, but the content of the dialogue. This makes its feel amateurish if you can call it that.

Very short, would have been better to sit on this one, review the dialogue and general writing, provide more content.