Quick and dirty review, I will update it later with my customary full review, for now, best wait and see what the dev does with this.
Pros.
Looks decent, but writing needs work, not just the structure, but the content of the dialogue. This makes its feel amateurish if you can call it that.
Very short, would have been better to sit on this one, review the dialogue and general writing, provide more content.
Pros.
- Decent quality models even if they kinda resemble some known characters. Though its probably to be expected to eventually happen.
- General visuals are good, but content is kinda sparse and scenes feel bland/empty.
- Being able to set relationships is always a bonus.
- Typos, grammar and some general dialogue revision is needed, e.g. queen being referred to as king in dialogue? Using looks instead of sounds, scavenger hunter instead of hunt. Details like that are noticeable.
- Per above, the dialogue has a hint of novice to it, I would suggest having someone with writing skills review it.
- Some inconsistency in the setting e.g. king refers to the MC as child but he isn't a priest and only looks slightly older than the MC, plus the MC bowing is customary and expected for the time, yet dismissed by the king like he is the MCs dad or something, this is not the correct way of addressing royalty in medieval times . Also, where are the guards and other people, the entire throne room is empty, but the king wants more privacy?...ermm...OK? Again review the writing.
- To add to this, character relations need some update, one moment the MC says he wants to see the children, the next the player gets to set the relationship? Opt for saying "where are the kids?" then fade to next scene and set the relationship, this gives you more leeway to dodge any issues with incest or not.
- No music, ambient, environmental, interaction sounds of any kind are present. I am guessing lewd scenes neither...
- Opacity setting for dialogue is missing, pretty basic thing for VNs are dialogue options so the player can read without effort or missing 1/4 of the screen
- Too short, no adult content, hard to give decent review.
Looks decent, but writing needs work, not just the structure, but the content of the dialogue. This makes its feel amateurish if you can call it that.
Very short, would have been better to sit on this one, review the dialogue and general writing, provide more content.