The story feels a little jerky. It moves between story beats with almost no transition. I like the idea and the set up, but there needs to be. For example, in the very early scenes, Eve is showing the MC the room he'll be staying in and says "Why don't you settle down, I'll leave you alone". The next frame, it's suddenly her sweeping and asking the MC "Why don't you help your sister if you're done?" Something as simple as a black frame explaining the time skip "a few minutes later after putting away my things" or "the next morning" or something like that would really help with pacing.