Looking for Advice, criticism, feedback

[Ricktor]

Well I have already misplaced this once, I have no idea where to put this, so I thought I would try here. Sorry if I missed again.

Ok I better give a little background first. 2 months ago I was swinging a hammer for a living, I used the computer for porn-hub and email. There now you know my skill set. Well with the virus I couldn't work so I started poking around and ended up on Daz website, and from there I somehow got hooked into RenPy. Well 2 months later, I have the start of a VN, some garbage renders, and a Daz studio program with assets all over the freaking place. I can't find anything anymore. Anyway I was about to hit the delete button on it all, but I couldn't. So much work, and I did get better over time. And I had big plans for the story. Right now its linear, with no choices, I was going to start with 4 different major paths and 2 sub paths from them for 8 total endings. I don't know how to code so I don't think I can go beyond that, and keep it as simple as renders and storyline.

What I was looking for is a developer or two to look over what I have and tell me "yeah, you are best off hitting the delete button", or "maybe you can still salvage something here." I was learning a lot as I went along, but some of the dialogue and renders in the beginning are painfully bad. If its not a complete wash, maybe some constructive criticism would be nice as well. Then finally if there is something there to work with, how do you ever go from a RenPy game on my PC, to something on F95.

I know I am asking a lot, so please if you have a game or a Patreon account, I would be more than happy to subscribe and look at your game in return. Hell it will probably give me a chance to learn something at the same time. I'm not sure how to get the RenPy to anyone willing to take a look, so I am uploading it to Mega. I'm not sure if I am allowed to attach it here in the thread or not. Its about 600mg. Thank you in advance to anyone willing! I guess I will PM the Mega link to anyone interested. Is that the best way?

I should probably add, its a rather dark story, Vampires, Succubus, generally a dark tale. Someone suggested I give a few screenshot so here are a few of the characters.

 

[DuniX]

The renders aren't that bad. I expected worse.

I would suggest you not compare yourself with the people here, they are "wizards".
They have beast of a machine, their renders take ages and know all kinds of magic to make things look good.
It all comes down to experience.

 

[Zippity]

Going purely off of your examples, the very first thing I noticed was how long each picture took to load... The file sizes are probably too large, which is probably why your Ren'py VN file size is 600mb in size already, when you're only just getting started... There was another thread where someone had suggested a download for Daz that would help decrease the rendered image file size, I just can't remember which thread it was... So if someone with Daz experience could point you in the direction of that plugin/filter or whatever the file was, to help you reduce the file sizes and probably also the rendering times as well, you'll be better off...

As to the images themselves, the only one that looks a little questionable is the last one, where the female character looks rather malformed... Almost as if her body has begun to melt and get pulled towards the floor... Which you can see from her highly droopy breasts and the skin on her legs starting to almost bubble...

As to finding other developers to assist you, under the Development section of these forums you'll find a place to recruit folks entitled Recruitment & Services for requesting that sort of help... And if you look under Programming, Development & Art there are a few forum sections, and sub-threads, devoted to tools and help for developers who have questions, problems, and so forth...

Hope that helps in some way...

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