VN - Ren'Py - Love at First Sight [v0.1] [Nightowl Creation]

Very generic story, everyone is attacked to MC like he is guy of their dreams. No build up seems very off-putting.
the models are really great, but I believe that them having a bit covered might make it exciting

Wow, what an excellent start! The images are all stunning. Just the right amount of curves in all the right places. And I much prefer a slow-burn story over one that jumps right into sex scenes. Very much looking forward to more!

Okay, so it's not THAT original and yes, everyone's immediately a little too needy and, of course, the story needs more time to develop in terms of filling out and deepening existing relationships which have clearly been "on hold" for a few years.

BUT SO FAR I TOTALLY LOVE THIS NOVEL!!!

I really like the level at which the emotional expressiveness of the female characters has been pitched. They give it the feel of a more romantic approach to the story as it is developing. I find Emily’s character truly attractive emotionally and captures the feel of the damsel in distress well-nigh perfectly.

I’m not unduly concerned about there being no sex yet. Quality titles rarely jump straight into bed in the very first chapter or two anyway and I certainly believe that this has, so far, every indication of becoming a quality title. In the meantime, the girls are all absolutely STUNNING and, for my personal female body-shape preference, simply breath-taking.

If you happen to read this, Nightowl, please, please, please don't be put off in the slightest by the previous "dissection" of your budding masterpiece. We all know this is only the very first step, hopefully of many yet to come in our journey, and far too early for any kind of detailed and curmudgeonly criticism and negativity, for which this place is sadly, but rightfully renowned.

Don't worry, there'll be others, for sure, like me, so please do hang on in there and continue giving this your very best shot. Do not ever allow others to hold you back from realising your...now our...dream!!

So, starry-eyed, I’m looking forward, hopefully, to the next chapter and more romance and, in the not-too-distant future, the first shoots of physical intimacy between the mc and his gorgeous Aunt Emily as well as perhaps Hannah too.

Five stars earned for what I've seen so far, which I fully expect to easily be maintained in subsequent releases over the coming weeks.

Thanks for your effort, your expertise and hopefully your future dedication, Nightowl. If this trend continues I'll most definitely be looking at subscribing to your Patreon (though given the subject-matter here, I suggest you beware of the up-tights there) or perhaps the more liberated Subscribestar.

VERSION: 0.1
SUMMARY: Good renders with a fairly unoriginal story, MC that is an emotionally immature and too sex starved to think let alone act at least somewhat "normal"

This game is half baked and rushed and is not nearly as slow burn as the dev lets you believe, not having sex scenes does not constitute slow burn. Slow burn is gradual as mentioned in this review, where the MC cultivates relationships, builds trust and slowly breaks down any social barriers or taboos...if you want a good example of slow burn that is done brilliant look to a game like Hillside. Slow burns can be frustrating but done well can be brilliant.

PROS:

1. Good looking models and renders

CONS:

1. Story is fairly basic, been done before with nothing new to add (so far).
2. While writing is OK, it does need work, some bugs like MC in text instead of the name, grammatical errors or sentences that don't make sense, like they incomplete.
3. Relationships are undeveloped, they just exist i.e., the MC is gone for years and already rekindles and professes love to his cousin within less than 24hours of moving in. Also apparently notices his aunts sad demeanor and already is driving to replace his uncle. THIS IS JUST TOO MUCH TOO QUICKLY and I call bullshit.

FINAL THOUGHTS & SUGGESTIONS:

1. A weird fade to black scene, where the MC is still outside his aunts house, then teleports inside without the dialogue progressing. Dev should look at fixing that.
2. Story has been done before and there are many more games out there that are written better with much better developed characters.
3. As per con no.2 the MCs way of immediately thinking there is more to a hug or such, especially from a family member is a bit silly. Its one thing to be nervous seeing people you haven't for years or if they look, smell and feel nice during the hug, but to immediately read more is too forced and unnatural. Thinking, "id tap that even if she is my aunt" then immediately thinking "no stop being a pervert, she is my aunt" at least that's closer to a hot blooded males thoughts and provides a context I can get behind, its a biological imperative of males to want to screw anything really. Again, I may be nitpicking, but...nway
4. Something that I don't want to nitpick about but just can't help myself is the sudden "closeness" of the MC to the family he hasn't seen in years. There is an unnaturalness to the entire script/dialogue and intimate moments that are sudden and without much context or the time needed to develop. I am not saying string players along, but you can keep it interesting while creating a setting where the MC and the love interests gradually lose their inhibitions. There should be a consistent erosion of barriers to this kind of story not a back and forth or knee jerk reaction style to it, that only leads to frustration to the player.
5. MC has a strange way of reflecting or thinking to himself, like he has never had an emotion or crush before. Almost like some newborn that has never experienced an emotion or sensation. I am nitpicking slightly here maybe, but it was just apparent to me and kind of jarring. This may not be an issue, but for now its a con until more content becomes available.
6. MC is apparently older than 18, at least from what I gather when he reflects about when he was 18...yet as with many other games, much to my fcking annoyance, the MC looks like a teenager has not a lick of hair on him to make him even slightly more mature, yet seemingly woman, even older woman fawn over him...i call bullshit right there. You be young and still have some scruff ffs...
7. Indication of what the game will be like, i.e. provide players a decent and accurate list of tags that will be implemented would be nice. This is an adult game site, so IMO the kinkier the better