V0.16 rework
i return to this after sitting it on the back burner for a couple of years to find it being reworked.
'rework' is a very loose term for undergoing mild adjustments rather than any actual rework. not gotten far yet, maybe an hour of slow reading, yet there is no signs of any visual rework and certainly the immature dialogue is still immature.
do you remember reading those foreign language introduction manuals at school around 11 years old? the stilted massively unnatural conversations that have natives looking at you like you are some organ grinder's dancing monkey? yes that is how the dialogue is written.
it gets the point across but is unstructured in delivering the story. it reads like the writer has an idea but is unsure of what shape it is or what it will look like in it's final form. almost eight years in development is now a giant negative for me, especially considering the crap delivery.
the shame of it, is that this really does need a rework, even now. already looking dated visually and the writer requires replacing with someone who knows how to write dialogue like someone whose age includes "ty".
as it is, it's still just a skip button slideshow. as forgettable now as it was years ago.
i return to this after sitting it on the back burner for a couple of years to find it being reworked.
'rework' is a very loose term for undergoing mild adjustments rather than any actual rework. not gotten far yet, maybe an hour of slow reading, yet there is no signs of any visual rework and certainly the immature dialogue is still immature.
do you remember reading those foreign language introduction manuals at school around 11 years old? the stilted massively unnatural conversations that have natives looking at you like you are some organ grinder's dancing monkey? yes that is how the dialogue is written.
it gets the point across but is unstructured in delivering the story. it reads like the writer has an idea but is unsure of what shape it is or what it will look like in it's final form. almost eight years in development is now a giant negative for me, especially considering the crap delivery.
the shame of it, is that this really does need a rework, even now. already looking dated visually and the writer requires replacing with someone who knows how to write dialogue like someone whose age includes "ty".
as it is, it's still just a skip button slideshow. as forgettable now as it was years ago.