So, my first review for a game. It's a pretty swell game actually! But I'm gonna try to keep this review short and sweet. Keep in mind, I'm reviewing the demo, and things may change later on.
The Renders and The Girls
So, in terms of images, this game is actually decent. The girls look amazing and the renders are quite fantastic. However, sometimes I feel as if it can be a bit lacking in terms of some scenes, and some poses feel a bit stiff. Personally, I'm not a big fan of Ayuko's hair, and when she first came through the door with those sunglasses, I thought she was some crazy ass bitch. I really like how Amelia, Amanda, and Nicole look, but not a big fan on how Ayuko and Kendra looks.
The Writing and The English
Okay, this is what I have an issue with. This game needs like, MAJOR proofreading. It took me so long to release a patch for it to fix the English. The English.. is pretty bad. Hopefully, however, Dr. Phoenix makes an update which adds more content, and fixes the bad English. The writing.. is not great either. It feels a bit dull sometimes and fairly lacking. I did like the part on where MC was making up that dream, though. I'm not sure why the game was ended on a cliffhanger, as the cliffhanger did not feel that exciting and suspenseful. If you are making a cliffhanger, make it good.
The Programming and The Coding
Okay, the programming is BAD on this one. And I'm saying this because I have experience in Ren'Py. I mean, holy fucking shitty cow. This game was pretty messy. First, labels in labels? The labels won't even work? Undefined labels without any code blocks what-so-ever? So many damn spaces! Labels with practically the same name? Sounds that are looping? Choices that don't even work? Okay, this was bad. Real bad.
Overall
The writing is dull, the coding is bad, the English is awful, but the girls and renders are nice. It has a good start, but it will take a lot of updates for this game to actually become good.