I was kind of hopeful for this one. I went in blind not really knowing what to expect, but left feeling more disappointed than anything else.
Allow me to explain. If I was to grade this game purely on the visuals, it would easily be a 4 out of 5.
- The renders are gorgeous and are fully capable of giving some other titles on here a run for their money.
- The animations, however few there are, are fine. Not the greatest I've ever seen, but by no means the worst.
- The UI looks great. It's not intrusive, and it has a very nice clean look with a unified theme that ties into the game rather well.
- Bugs so far were pretty limited as well. Only one I ran into was common enough that the developer released a patch for it. After applying the patch it was fixed it up without issue.
- The characters look nice enough, although if there is one black mark against them, it's that a lot of the female cast look very samey. I'm not sure if the dev has a thing for fit dark haired women with blue eyes or what, but for a game with a more harem styled romance, I feel like you'd want more unique looking characters to draw the players interest rather than having everyone look like off brand copies of each other.
Now the novel side of things isn't all bad.
- The plot certainly feels a bit more unique when compared to similar titles. It's interesting and has a very clear conflict for the MC to try and navigate in their personal life and football career.
- There's a few typos here and there, and a couple instances of missing or misplaced words, but it wasn't a widespread problem. At the very least it's nothing that can't be fixed by a couple proofreading sessions.
- There is one feature in this game that really stands out, and it's the ability to click on key words to get a better explanation or definition. As someone who has no real knowledge of football, it's a very helpful feature and one that I feel should not be forgotten simply because of how effective and unobtrusive it is.
That's unfortunately where the praise ends though. One of the biggest issues with this game is the writing. Which for a visual novel, is a bit of an important piece.
So what exactly is wrong with the writing? Sadly, there's a lot.
- By far one of the worst things about the writing is how the dialogue tends to drag on for way too long. Now this wouldn't be an issue if it had any substance to it, but as it stands a lot of it feels like filler. The best comparison I could make is when you're forced to write a paper with a word limit, so you give your key point in like a paragraph, and spend the next 450 words just bullshitting and reiterating a couple key points over and over again. Which is something that game does as well because it too has a tendency to repeat the same points ad nauseam.
- The dialogue, similar to the characters, is very samey. There's no distinct character to any of it. Everyone sounds the same. And almost every time you talk to someone, they have this real bad tendency to get real preachy with the MC. A character reminding the MC of their shortcomings or flaws once in a while is fine, but as it stands, it happens way too many times to the point where it just becomes irritating and repetitive.
- The writing for the MC isn't really any better. I get the feeling that the dev wants him to come across as a lovable asshole with a heart of gold, but he doesn't. Instead he comes across as an asshole who makes snarky remarks. Sure he has a few heartfelt moments, but they often feel so out of place that it's actually kind of jarring and takes you out of the moment when it does happen.
- The pacing for this game also feels really weird. At times it feels like it's meant to be more of a slow burn kind of title where you romance characters over time, but you're given the option to fuck several different characters right from the get-go before you've even left for Texas. And the whole transition to Texas itself feels like it comes and goes way too quick. There isn't any build up to the move, it just suddenly happens and then *boom* you're in Texas without a care in the world.
- There is a very clear lack of stakes or conflict. There's the whole story about the MCs past and how they got arrested and sent to jail, but it doesn't really have any bearing on the story. Sure other characters remark on it from time to time, but it doesn't seem to cause any actual hardships at all, outside of an interaction with one character, but then you move to Texas and that character is gone just as soon as they arrived. So the stakes, what little there are, immediately come and go. Everything in the game seems to imply that the character is going to face lots of hardships and judgement, but he never does. In fact everything seems to be going just fine for the MC. He leaves his old drug and gang infested neighborhood and moves into something akin to a mansion, with no problems whatsoever. But that lack of any conflict or stakes just makes the story feel boring. A character that has everything handed to them on a silver platter is anything but interesting.
- Love interests have very little screen time. They're there for a couple minutes, and then you (maybe) get a sex scene, and then you move on. Sometimes it's on to a new love interest, but more often than not, it's onto another 4 paragraph dialogue dump with a sentence of actual meaningful dialogue. Like I said, the pacing of everything feels off. You don't really spend enough time with any of the characters to develop any real meaningful bond or feelings towards them and the dialogue certainly doesn't help matters either.
- We also really need to have a conversation about the black characters in this game. They don't feel like they're written to be actual characters, but rather stereotypes or racial caricatures. It would be like including a bunch of Italians in your game and making them all sound like mobsters straight out of The Godfather. And while I wasn't sure if the dev was doing it intentionally or not at first, when you pair it with the culture war nonsense, it doesn't really paint any of it in a good light at all. It goes from initially coming across as just really bad writing and accidental stereotyping to being openly and blatantly racist.
- Speaking of, the weird culture war shit. Every once in a while, one of the characters will drop some weird culture war talking point out of fucking nowhere. No lead up, no hesitation, just *bam*. Like for instance Kyle Rittenhouse or one character suddenly sliding in a remark about trans-athlete Lia Thomas. I honestly can't tell if the developer is trying to write these people as conservatives, in which case it comes off as just more stereotyping, or if they're trying to score brownie points with the type of folks that label a game "woke" because it has a gay character. Hell at first glance the move from California to Texas seems innocent enough, but then in retrospect it starts to come off as more unnecessary political commentary. It's especially jarring because the second or third love interest you meet is trans and the MC is written in a way that he seems like he's fully accepting of it. But then later on there's the whole trans-athlete remark that he just seems to go along with, which if you've romanced the trans LI, directly goes against everything the game has already established. The character seemingly has no views or opinions outside of that moment, and what few views or opinions they do have can seemingly change at the drop of a hat. Which in the end, leads to none of it feeling genuine and all of it feeling like pandering.
What's weird to me is that this game is clearly inspired by another game on here. And somehow the developer for this game has not only fallen into some of the same problems as the original, but they've managed to introduce new ones along the way resulting in a game that feels more like a pale imitation rather than a story trying to stand on its own.
In my opinion, this is one of those games that could benefit from a rework. The dev has the visuals nailed, so there's no worry there. But they clearly need to go back to the drawing board when it comes to the writing and pacing. If they do that, I think this game could be amazing, but as it stands, right now it's just a bunch of pretty pictures with a barely coherent story attached to it.
Allow me to explain. If I was to grade this game purely on the visuals, it would easily be a 4 out of 5.
- The renders are gorgeous and are fully capable of giving some other titles on here a run for their money.
- The animations, however few there are, are fine. Not the greatest I've ever seen, but by no means the worst.
- The UI looks great. It's not intrusive, and it has a very nice clean look with a unified theme that ties into the game rather well.
- Bugs so far were pretty limited as well. Only one I ran into was common enough that the developer released a patch for it. After applying the patch it was fixed it up without issue.
- The characters look nice enough, although if there is one black mark against them, it's that a lot of the female cast look very samey. I'm not sure if the dev has a thing for fit dark haired women with blue eyes or what, but for a game with a more harem styled romance, I feel like you'd want more unique looking characters to draw the players interest rather than having everyone look like off brand copies of each other.
Now the novel side of things isn't all bad.
- The plot certainly feels a bit more unique when compared to similar titles. It's interesting and has a very clear conflict for the MC to try and navigate in their personal life and football career.
- There's a few typos here and there, and a couple instances of missing or misplaced words, but it wasn't a widespread problem. At the very least it's nothing that can't be fixed by a couple proofreading sessions.
- There is one feature in this game that really stands out, and it's the ability to click on key words to get a better explanation or definition. As someone who has no real knowledge of football, it's a very helpful feature and one that I feel should not be forgotten simply because of how effective and unobtrusive it is.
That's unfortunately where the praise ends though. One of the biggest issues with this game is the writing. Which for a visual novel, is a bit of an important piece.
So what exactly is wrong with the writing? Sadly, there's a lot.
- By far one of the worst things about the writing is how the dialogue tends to drag on for way too long. Now this wouldn't be an issue if it had any substance to it, but as it stands a lot of it feels like filler. The best comparison I could make is when you're forced to write a paper with a word limit, so you give your key point in like a paragraph, and spend the next 450 words just bullshitting and reiterating a couple key points over and over again. Which is something that game does as well because it too has a tendency to repeat the same points ad nauseam.
- The dialogue, similar to the characters, is very samey. There's no distinct character to any of it. Everyone sounds the same. And almost every time you talk to someone, they have this real bad tendency to get real preachy with the MC. A character reminding the MC of their shortcomings or flaws once in a while is fine, but as it stands, it happens way too many times to the point where it just becomes irritating and repetitive.
- The writing for the MC isn't really any better. I get the feeling that the dev wants him to come across as a lovable asshole with a heart of gold, but he doesn't. Instead he comes across as an asshole who makes snarky remarks. Sure he has a few heartfelt moments, but they often feel so out of place that it's actually kind of jarring and takes you out of the moment when it does happen.
- The pacing for this game also feels really weird. At times it feels like it's meant to be more of a slow burn kind of title where you romance characters over time, but you're given the option to fuck several different characters right from the get-go before you've even left for Texas. And the whole transition to Texas itself feels like it comes and goes way too quick. There isn't any build up to the move, it just suddenly happens and then *boom* you're in Texas without a care in the world.
- There is a very clear lack of stakes or conflict. There's the whole story about the MCs past and how they got arrested and sent to jail, but it doesn't really have any bearing on the story. Sure other characters remark on it from time to time, but it doesn't seem to cause any actual hardships at all, outside of an interaction with one character, but then you move to Texas and that character is gone just as soon as they arrived. So the stakes, what little there are, immediately come and go. Everything in the game seems to imply that the character is going to face lots of hardships and judgement, but he never does. In fact everything seems to be going just fine for the MC. He leaves his old drug and gang infested neighborhood and moves into something akin to a mansion, with no problems whatsoever. But that lack of any conflict or stakes just makes the story feel boring. A character that has everything handed to them on a silver platter is anything but interesting.
- Love interests have very little screen time. They're there for a couple minutes, and then you (maybe) get a sex scene, and then you move on. Sometimes it's on to a new love interest, but more often than not, it's onto another 4 paragraph dialogue dump with a sentence of actual meaningful dialogue. Like I said, the pacing of everything feels off. You don't really spend enough time with any of the characters to develop any real meaningful bond or feelings towards them and the dialogue certainly doesn't help matters either.
- We also really need to have a conversation about the black characters in this game. They don't feel like they're written to be actual characters, but rather stereotypes or racial caricatures. It would be like including a bunch of Italians in your game and making them all sound like mobsters straight out of The Godfather. And while I wasn't sure if the dev was doing it intentionally or not at first, when you pair it with the culture war nonsense, it doesn't really paint any of it in a good light at all. It goes from initially coming across as just really bad writing and accidental stereotyping to being openly and blatantly racist.
- Speaking of, the weird culture war shit. Every once in a while, one of the characters will drop some weird culture war talking point out of fucking nowhere. No lead up, no hesitation, just *bam*. Like for instance Kyle Rittenhouse or one character suddenly sliding in a remark about trans-athlete Lia Thomas. I honestly can't tell if the developer is trying to write these people as conservatives, in which case it comes off as just more stereotyping, or if they're trying to score brownie points with the type of folks that label a game "woke" because it has a gay character. Hell at first glance the move from California to Texas seems innocent enough, but then in retrospect it starts to come off as more unnecessary political commentary. It's especially jarring because the second or third love interest you meet is trans and the MC is written in a way that he seems like he's fully accepting of it. But then later on there's the whole trans-athlete remark that he just seems to go along with, which if you've romanced the trans LI, directly goes against everything the game has already established. The character seemingly has no views or opinions outside of that moment, and what few views or opinions they do have can seemingly change at the drop of a hat. Which in the end, leads to none of it feeling genuine and all of it feeling like pandering.
What's weird to me is that this game is clearly inspired by another game on here. And somehow the developer for this game has not only fallen into some of the same problems as the original, but they've managed to introduce new ones along the way resulting in a game that feels more like a pale imitation rather than a story trying to stand on its own.
In my opinion, this is one of those games that could benefit from a rework. The dev has the visuals nailed, so there's no worry there. But they clearly need to go back to the drawing board when it comes to the writing and pacing. If they do that, I think this game could be amazing, but as it stands, right now it's just a bunch of pretty pictures with a barely coherent story attached to it.