VN - Ren'Py - Move the Chains [v0.3] [MissFortune]

I will be fair with my rating. I honestly want to give it a one Star, but this game did have some good things about it.

My main issue is the inclusion of something that loses the immersion of the game, calls out someone over a couple comments on here, most people won't understand it, he'll I didn't even get it at first but once I found out I was more annoyed, cause the scene was already bad. The harem scene, calling out Faxe, is the big problem. I was enjoying this game building relationships, going through story, then boom, 4th wall breaking of something pointless. There is a difference between references, esster eggs, cameos, etc. And whatever this is which I do not find funny and ruins immersion.

Other problems include focus on characters sometimes like not showing characters enough and mainly showing MC. Some other decisions I don't agree with story wise, that is more personal and fine. The biggest problem is that one scene just takes you out of the game.

I really enjoyed this, and was having fun, but with pointless scenes it knocks a couple stars off the game alone just because of the immersion and taking you out of the game to call out someone 99% won't get or understand.

If you like random 4th wall breaks that pull you out of story, which is an solid story, then this game is for you, cause dev will do more, maybe me next, who knows, it could be one of you.

I am just disappointed and letdown, cause I did like this game a lot.

There is a lot to like here and it is almost a five-star game (see what I did there?).

To be fair, the kind of life the MC had or has is not something I can relate to at all. I was an athlete and could compete just fine on the high school level, but I was never a stand out or anywhere close to it. Additionally,I grew up in the middle class and never had to deal with the threat of getting shot or getting lost in the foster care system. So it's hard for me to comment too much on the realism but it seems pretty legit. The characters are all well thought out and have some depth and the story is compelling and I am looking forward to seeing where it all goes.

The MC is portrayed as someone who makes mistakes and tries to learn from them, but as is the case with these harem games, the LIs are quick to spread their legs for him. Plus, there are too freaking many of them. I hate this because you have to wait a while to get back to your favorite. In fact, in my first playthru, one of the LIs I really liked I had forgotten about because she was absent for so long. I was like "Oh yeah! Where the hell has she been?"

The other thing I hate is the half a head thing. I wish developers would stop this BS. It drives me nuts. There are photos displayed of the MC with half his head. I mean, come on. Talk about ripping you out of the story. And yes, I know, eventually the developer starts showing the MC's face, but it's too little too late. Hiding the face or doing the half head is just stupid. For the 2 or 3 people who like this, the rest of us normal people hate it so stop doing it.

Also, I hate all the changing the brand name crap. I mean, Moogle? I mean Google is part of our lexicon and places like Target are part of our everyday lives. You are allowed to use them as long as there are not any negative things. Like, you can say "She ate at McDonalds" but you can't say "She got food poisoning after eating at McDonalds." Normally I don't complain about these things, but there are so many alt brands in the AVN it really stands out. Granted, for the NILs or brand sponsors the MC receives, you probably should use alt brands, but when you are just referencing them, it is not illegal.

Anyway, despite my little pet peeves, it really is a great little AVN and the production, writing and story are all good to great. You should definitely download it and give it a try,

Good luck to a talented developer.

VERSION: v.0.3
SUMMARY: REVIEW PENDING: Promising
RATINGS: (out of 5):

1. Models: 5
2. Animations: 4
3. General Visuals: 5
4. Characters: 3
5. Story: 3
6. Writing: 3
7. Pacing: 3
8. Content (amount): X
9. UI & Sounds: 3
10. Fetish & kinks: X

Average: X of 50 possible points giving a X% rating i.e. X stars.

PROS:

1. Very good looking models, too good in a way, but its a game after all so...
2. Animations are very impressive, at least what I have seen so far.
3. Interface is nice, unique design and style is pretty impressive looking. Functions as any other renply VN though.
4. Writing is good, structured well, but (see cons)
5. Sounds are not bad either, but the music is an issue to me. (see cons)

CONS:

1. Music, while the dev did give a notice of music being a placeholder, I can't stress enough to not use music with lyrics in your game! It detracts from the reading when there is "speaking" just use tunes with no words please!
2. I find it a tad annoying that the dialogue has so many abbreviations, I assume often referring to a persons/s and while i'm sure some people speak this way, its to me (someone who speak, what I would consider normal, not like someone who actually says "LOL") its a bit frustrating and breaks the flow of the dialogue for me. The slang is just annoying to be honest but I assume its part of that crowd, that industry and the people that gravitate towards its?
3. Apart from the dialogue, I also noticed the odd spelling/typo, so some proof reading again would be best.
4. The MC is kind of annoying in he always has some retort or "witty comeback", kinda like deadpool but just more asshole with it also. Added to this, he is completely arrogant and while this is maybe what the developer is going for, its off putting to me. (See final thoughts on MC below)
5. Again on dialogue, there is simply too much, too much and I find myself actually skipping the text and speed reading to pick up on anything interesting. Much of the conversations are either NFL sport related and whats worse the slang, the "hood" "ghetto", call it what you will (not meant derogatory) is atrocious.
6. No lewd or sounds during sexual encounters.
7. Interesting enough story, but looses me quickly due to wasteful dialogue and jargon, backslapping "bro" conversations that don't appeal to me in the slightest.
8. Small gripe over animations being a bit "off" few frames and angles during scenes do make them unnatural and unsexy.

FINAL THOUGHTS & SUGGESTIONS:

• The MC's history being kept a secret, at least it feels that way. We understand something happened that caused the MC to go to prison due to some false accusations or the other...but why not simply provide a decent explanation of what happened, why keep it secret. Honestly much of the game starts in mid stride in a way, what happened to the MC, the people in his life etc....its kinda frustrating more than overwhelming and then also to have only tidbits of info about the MC just compounds this issue for me. *EDIT, while much gets shared through the MC reminiscing, I feel still some things could have been explained to the player in the intro, at least enough to make it a little less jarring initially.
• While semi interesting, American football is not a sport in my country and as such I find the MC and his cohorts or friends talking about it a bit frustrating. I believe the dev did their research and are probably big NFL fans, but I would be careful adding so much of a relatively select sport that is more an American sport than anything into a game to the extent they have, after all your market here is international.
• Someone else also commented on the amount of fluff and "pointless" conversations happening that could be cut a bit more short, this is rather true and painfully apparent, as there are many such lines of "thoughts" I do find it a little bloated, while this comment is simply my opinion, I do appreciate the amount of "story" going into this VN. That being said, trying to make characters more complex than they are or even should be is something to watch out for. The MC is a bit of a contradiction in his brutish, arrogant behaviour, apparent no skills other than football, yet seems to a be a fountain of insight, wisdom and can be rather philosophical, which I am not saying can't happen Im just saying that its IMO unlikely to all happen with one person like that.
• The story is seemingly interesting, or at least interesting enough, the issue to me is the flow, telling, the build up. I feel too much time is spent rattling on about sponsors and all the perks the MC gets and he hasn't even started playing. While this may be the way things go in this industry, from a story telling POV I would opt to break it up, introduce the new gym or whatever as and when its needed or later, it does not ALL need to happen as the MC arrives, because reading it is a DRAG.
• As per above, the MC feels like a mixed bad, for one, he is oblivious to obvious interest from certain woman, how is that possible when he clearly is so wise, mature, filled with all these deep profound philosophical thoughts and is clearly a complex individual that like to beat people up if he is not shit talking them. Almost like the scene where a gun get put under his chin and the LI standing next to him, calm as cucumber asks him to support just after the altercation...I mean I get he doesn't give a shit, but she, with her kid like in stone throw distance away? WTF man? So much bullshit, trying to make a dumb, complex, sensitive only not character...I get he is still figuring shit out but some things are just too blatantly obvious to ignore or be so oblivious to it.
• Clearly a good amount of work and effort went into this game, I can appreciate that and applaud the developer for it and highly recommend supporting said developer. That being said, the items I have listed above are my personal feelings, some of these wont be issues to many people here though.

I really want to like this game. The premise is interesting and really delves into how messed up the world of College Sports is that money has just become the be all end all of things. The renders and animations are really fantastic and a few characters that would normally not find attractive due to certain qualities (not into gauged ears, but I really find Yuna appealing).

It's just rather unfortunate that there is so much not to like about this game that my opinion turns negative:

1. So much of this game feels massively overwritten, and conversations and monologues feel like they take twice as long to establish their point than they need to.
   
   
2. It doesn't help that what is being talked about isn't always the things that need to be talked about, such as setting the stage and background behind characters and their interactions prior to the start of the story. Many of the early characters in the story have an established history with the MC, yet we're over 2 updates in and the game feels like it is focusing on new characters like Kara and her son rather than give us many reasons to care about the existing ones; Diana especially is neglected and is just rather annoying cause I, as the player, have no reason to care about her.
   
   
3. Most of the women in MC's orbit seem instantly drawn to him, either for undisclosed reasons pertaining to their prior history, or for simply no reason whatsoever. Kara especially is an example of this. She's known the MC for 2 days and basically treats him like her son's new stepfather and wants to jump the MC's bones, barely holding herself back. But that also forces us onto the biggest issue with this game...
   
   
4. The main character is completely insufferable because he might as well be white ghetto Jesus. He's the best football player in the country, but he's also a super tough gangster because of his harsh upbringing that even did hard time, yet he's also very worldly and wise beyond his years, basically to the point of being philosophical, in just about every conversation he has with anyone. Characters need flaws and weaknesses to make them interesting and while he does have his anger management issues as a minor flaw, that alone isn't compelling enough to make Jesus here an interesting character. Especially not when essentially all the consequences of his actions, him going to prison and possibly losing his chance to play football again, are being completely washed away by the course of the story so he can live a wonderful life full of money and women, doing exactly what he wants to do.

So yeah, aside from an interesting baseline premise and some solid visuals (which doesn't count for as much of late as lots of games are starting to look better and better, IMO), this one isn't terribly enjoyable. If you're that desperate for a sports AVN, there are better ones out there.

Excellent game.

I have seen people complaining about there being too much dialog but i really appreciate a story that is well written and even though there is a lot of dialog, it really expresses to the characters personality, the story, the world building, relationships etc.
Many dev's fall short on this aspect when writing as it seems unnecessary to try and extend the story but i very much enjoy reading through this.

Overall the characters are interesting and diverse, the story is engaging and not rushed/drawn out, renders and animation are some the best i have seen in games on this site.

Good luck with the rest of the story dev!

Overall: Okay/Promising

Renders are great!! Beautiful even. That said, I am a little thrown off by the fact that the player is just inserted into this world without much knowledge of the other characters that are introduced almost consecutively. It's like all of these new characters show up for the first time (restaurant, bar, in the street) and all know or head over heels for the MC. Almost each one of them has similar looks and personalities (tough love or edgy personalities). Despite that, the premise is there......an unfortunate football star looking for redemption for himself and his family. Pretty interesting to attract an audience's interest based on first impression. However, it fails on developing that connection from player to MC. Most devs fail to realize that this can make or break how invested players are into the story and its characters. For example, Laura and Diana each has a supposedly sad backstory, but because it was rushed there is no empathy from a player perspective for these characters who are important figures of the MC's life. I just wished it was more developed that's all.

Absolutely excellent game - large cast of characters, lots of dialogue, solid renders, many LIs, lots of choices, and love the college football angle.

Seems to be a bit of a slow burn, at least with some of the LIs - I enjoy that slower build up so this was a big pro.

Animations could use improvement.

Looking forward to more of this game. I even bought the Early Access on Steam to support dev as I liked the game so much.

V0.2

I came in with a bias when I started playing this game. It sat in my "to play someday" list for a few months as I have been burned by low quality sports VNs before where there is not much story involved and I like some meat on the bone.

I am happy to have been wrong on this one.

Graphics 5/5

The developer is using modern genesis models to great effect. They light their scenes well and angles make the scenes seem natural and don't detract from what they are trying to give you. In the VN world, modern assets are expensive but this developer invested a lot of money to make sure the world didn't seem like a repetitive block of the same room, and each area is it's own environment which I really appreciate. Some areas are only used for one scene but they put in the funds to give it it's own which is really rare. With what their patreon numbers say they are bringing in right now, they have not made back the return on investment and I hope that changes as labors of love rarely pay the bills.

Story 4.5/5

Was pleasantly surprised with the direction the developer took. The story revolves around college football but the writing doesn't force it. Instead, they are weaving a tale that leads up to when the MC will take the field. There's a couple of sport scenes but the first two episodes are dedicated to flushing out the MC, showing us his roots, and looking at the business side of modern college football. I look forward to those intense action scenes on the field when they come but they are being built up to instead of given right away. It is a great tease to what happens next and has me hooked.

The reason I can't give story a 5/5 is the way the story is leaning into crime heavily. Yes. Tragic backstory. Got that. A bit of a thick brush though. Could have been less intense for a teen athlete. Might not be as necessary for the story going forward. Sports rivalries would make more sense with other schools or athletes the Mc is trying to take the roster spot from. Thug gangster life with multiple gun scenes feels like a direction for another VN so I'm hoping this falls behind the sports backdrop when it gets into high gear.

LI 4/5

You have a lot of tropes in this one (which game doesn't) but the developer tried to give each of them their own identity. I think they did well separating the different characters. Visually, some are a bit similar looking but I give developers a pass on this because as I said before, assets are expensive and you shouldn't rate a game on graphics twice. They did make an effort to differentiate with tattoos, piercings and character arcs. A couple overlapped a bit to me though. There are three different "dom" girls that pop up with a "sub" girl attached and they felt pretty much like the same "dom" character, but their "subs" are all distinctly different, which is interesting. Also, so many girls in the game that giving full stories for all of them is a challenge, but so far, all the mains have gotten some spotlight to add depth and a few other characters have been teased. For example, I want to see what happens with Parker even though she might have had a total of two or three lines in the first two episodes. If you are looking a t longer release schedules though, I expect I will be challenged to remember who some of the minor role girls are when returning for future episodes.

My favorite main is the MILF next door. Instead of her jumping the MC, you actually meet her kid and the story doesn't just focus on her wanting to get stuffed, but that her child comes first and she is a good mother doing her best. I really like her and love that she feels real.

Polish 4.5/5

I found the game very immersive and the developer did a great job. It is such a minor thing but I have to highlight the one small negative. The game could do with a proof read before it is released. Sometimes you find a sentence that has some grammatical mistakes or a missing word. I get that as a solo developer it is tough because you can end up reading what you think is there after the tenth pass so a second set of eyes might help catch a couple of these. I never got lost on what is going on but it happened enough that I noticed.

Release Content 5/5

Holy crap there was a lot of content in this game! I was expecting an hour or two of play but it just kept going and I lost track of time. I think about 4 hours in is when I looked up at my clock and was taken back by how long I had been playing/reading. The two episodes I played are longer than a lot of other game releases and not sure how they got that much done so fast. From game release to episode 2 was roughly 8 months. episode 3 is coming out this month which would be another 8ish months so if it has similar content volume, I don't know how they do it solo.

I am putting this game in my top tier list. Really looking forward to seeing what episode 3 brings. I admit I am primarily a leech with games on F95. I have sadly only supported one project so far, but depending on the next release, I could see myself giving a lower tier subscription, because so far I think this deserves support.

My first impressions after playing this game, it literally blew my mind due the facts that,

The renders are top notch

The girls look unique and their body proportions are much realistic that many games are missing nowdays

MC is a tall guy, looks handsome and not one of the guys who wont retaliate if you try to cross him(again one of the character traits that most college theme avns lack)

Also choices matter here, if you dont like a particular girl, you can reject her without worrying abt her dropping over you again and again

And lastly it got a freaking HAREM lol, not worry of leaving someone behind if you like them all

Whats not to like abt this game

Definitely a 5/5 from me, well deserved and kudos to the dev for creating such a gem

Move the chains v0.2

Enjoyed this one nice visuals hot and pretty girls hot and dating Mc with fame who can build his own harem. Also sports themed too. There are plenty of girls to caught. My fav is Kara she's hot and a milf. Loved the bonding of Mc with her son. Hoping to see more of her in episode 3. There's fair amount of content here.

+ Hot Mc ( glad dev decided to his full face in episode 2 )
+ Visuals
+ Pretty and hot girls
+ Milfs
+ Harem
+ Sports themed

- to be honest that yellow and blue texts in the start are such a pain to read. ( Hope dev avoids this in next updates)

Overall i enjoyed this one. Keep up the good work dev looking forward to next updates.

V02 at time of review.

I'll say what everyone else has said, the art work is stellar. The problem is that the artwork isn't enough to keep you involved on its own. The dev seems to have things to say, but can't seem to stop saying variations of them over and over again. I'll try to generalize without specific spoilers so as not to ruin the experience/story for others.

Pros:

- Great art
- A good premise and a somewhat novel approach to the beginning of the story
- Finally a game where we don't have to suffer through the "lovable doofus" sidekick.
- The writing seems intelligent, albeit lacking in focus.

Cons:

- Everyone speaks the same way and with the same tone. There's very little differentiation in characters and personalities because of that. I often felt like it was like having a character talking to himself in the mirror, no matter who he was talking to. In almost any 2 person conversation in the story I felt like it was two facets of the same character talking to themselves.
- It's preachy, and overly verbose. There are too many unnecessary lengthy speeches
- The fake company name dropping and the overuse of jargon is annoying. It's also somewhat of a barrier to entry for those who aren't fans of American football. Still, it seems like a passion project so that last bit may be forgiveable and will certainly have an appeal to a certain segment. The game name dropping is frankly ridiculously overused.
- The pacing is terrible.
- There is an unnecessary overabundance of characters.
- MC isn't consistent in his characterization and the dev can't seem to make up their mind who he is, except that he's kind of a douche.
- "choices? what choices? We don't need no steenking choices..." (insert bandido accent here)
- Not every game needs to be a laugh a minute, but there are some obvious attempts at humor that simply aren't humorous.

This is an exceptionally promising game if some attention could be given to creating distinguishable, individual characters with some depth to them. You could easily axe over half the story characters and not miss them at all. It woud be better to have less and go deeper than to spread so wide and be so shallow. Be more economical in writing the dialogue and cut some of the verbosity out of it. It would be more than ok to talk that much if it were dialogue and story advancing discourse, but the preachy soliloquies get really old, really fast.It's too much and you find yourself clicking to get through it. It's a lot of talking, but not a lot of story development or character evolution. I'm making this sound negative in a way because a lot of it is, but there's something in everything in this story that is promising and could be great if it was executed better. Until it is though I think I've had enough of this one. I really want to like it, but when I'm honest with myself I just don't want to continue playing it.

I dont know man, this game is weird and kinda disappointing to me.
On one hand the renders and characters look great, but on the other hand the pacing of the story is terrible. Barely anything notable happens most of the time, people are just talking and talking and talking, and all the technical stuff about american football i just could not care about.
The game introduces a ton of characters in almost every scene a new one, i just could not keep up with who is who. There were a few notable ones that i quite liked, like Laura, Maya, Jude, but nothing happens with them relastionship wise, like with most characters. There are a few bare bones lewd scenes sprinkled in but the downtime between them sometimes is way too long and not worth it most of the time.
The passage of time is also hard to follow, and some of the story progression was jarring. At one point you are on the roof with Diana having a deep personal talk only to be followed up with you having an argument with her because of some dude of her roomates. It was weird. Other times i cant tell only a few images in that we are actually in a flashback.
Like i said, the renders look amazing, some characters look great and promising and i see a lot of potential in this game, but so far it was quite boring and underwhelming in a lot of areas.

Awesome. Finally a football VN. The BMS reference was also a nice touch


There is a good amount of content here for a game that is just over a year old. The graphics are good, writing is good (albeit with occasional spelling mistakes), and its a good story. MC is a bit of a punk at first, but it at least fits what the developer is going for

Only complaint is there are too many characters. There are a ton of LI, which always slows down game progress.

Looking forward to seeing this one progress.

So far so good, imo. The chars, writing, and developing plot lines seem interesting. The dev obviously has a good foundation of college football knowledge which adds to the immersion.

Gonna keep an eye on this one for sure and see where it goes/can't wait for more.

I'm torn. The author tries some admirable things (a more ambitious way of storytelling; making use of gradual exposition and coming closer than any other game I've played here to polyphony; chief among them), but lots of it fails to connect with me personally. I can't help thinking that this is the wrong medium for larger-than-life characters (the auto-dealer NIL guy being a good example).

I also never felt like I was Spencer, just the guy behind the screen watching Spencer go about his days. The fact that half the girls you met have a great deal of history with Spencer, which only gradually gets out into the open, doesn't help that case.

But the wigger stuff is the worst of the bunch. You couldn't have picked a less compelling perspective if you racked your brain for all your life. I don't care about some semi-savage primitive chest-bumping about family, when it introduces neither conflict nor motivation. He could want to make it for any other reason, and if the tribalistic familialism doesn't at least come into conflict with one other value or principle, as happened with Marcus Junius Brutus or between Michael Corleone and his brother*, the story is bereft of purpose. The Godfather, Once Upon A Time in America and Goodfellas make for much better blueprints for a crime story than Scarface. Petty criminals and their ilk make for neither compelling characters nor narratives. As it stands, it just makes for very replaceable motivation and atrocious, broken English.

At the best of times, this reminds me of GTA 5, with its biting humor (before it got nuked for the E&E re-re-release), but I don't care for Franklin, but Michael and Trevor. In some ways, it is also more blatantly and unhealthily nihilistic (from the "Be who you are, do what you want" to a nigh paraphrasing of Dostoevsky's warnings in Brothers Karamazov**), but I find it's more than balanced with the references from anything to "Lia" Thomas, Rittenhouse, Musk, Tate, the latest crypto scam and the totally not chronically-online specters haunting Twitter, and any other number of things. It's quite nice.
But some other references to millennial pop culture I find quite bad.

The renders fall within the uncanny valley for me, the mother being the most blatant example of that, but I also don't happen to care for them, outside cases at either extreme (good or bad), which this isn't, so take it with a grain of salt.

There's also a good number of spelling mistakes. All I remember is a missing letter or word somewhere, nothing which renders any piece of dialogue incomprehensible, but it is very much enough to be noticeable and annoying.

Pacing will be off for quite a few people, and some of the tones are quite heavy.

I think you have a talented author who chose the wrong premise, save a re-write or jolt in direction. It's not flawless, I've made as much about my perspective obvious, but the larger point stands. I can't yet say whether I'll follow the game beyond this point. I might give the author's other Ren'py work a shot though, though it doesn't seem to be quite up my alley.

*The prevalence of which is still wide-spread, as I happen to be privy to, through my father.
**"Dost Thou know that the ages will pass, and humanity will proclaim by the lips of their sages that there is no crime, and therefore no sin; there is only hunger? 'Feed men, and then ask of them virtue!' that's what they'll write on the banner, which they will raise against Thee, and with which they will destroy Thy temple.".

Pros:

- Renders


Cons:

- Story
- Main character
- Cringe worthy writing
- Characters


I had high hopes for this VN, I really wanted to like it but it was so God damn cringeworthy.

- Story

Your a white kid from the hood... No, that's not a joke.. You're from Inglewood, California. The MC looks like a goth member of Three Days Grace but throughout his series he has the verbiage of Marshawn Lynch, if I said his name correctly. There's plenty of things about the story that just didn't appeal to me and MC was a huge part of it. Throughout the story he's talking about stereotypes this and that but every other time he opens his mouth was a blatant contradiction. The whole Jakeem scene where he practically glorified assisting in thugs sticking up people. Aside from the cringe slang the story was all of the place tone wise. The dev has woke-liberal talking points as well as conservative-red pill ones. Hell, even Kyle Rittenhouse got a shout out, check that off of my "Things I didn't expect" list. When the MC isn't this poser "hood" cliché he's pretty much a obnoxious arrogant tool. Main characters these days are either tools that are full of themselves or doormats.

- Characters

Not really all that blown away by the love interest in the game. Majority of them all dense or have shallow personalities. Diana, Laura and maybe Kara seem to be the only ones worth the time. Laura isn't romancable but Diana is which is a head scratcher. Yuna wasn't there for you and pushed you away but the MC broke out the cape for her while ignoring Diana that was pretty much in your corner the whole time. Make matters worse is Yuna then lives with you.

Again, I wasn't blown away by the characters. Most of them just throw themselves at the MC which makes this a bit lackluster. No real connections other than sex. There's literally a character named Swallow...

This just doesn't get me invested, I'm sorry.

I hope this game doesn't get abandoned like other games. This game is in my top 10, renders, story, and characters, all good. I really want to support the dev but with last 2 games didn't give me hope.

Overall i like this game. it's a good 4.5 stars so i rounded up.

Renders are beautiful, there's a good variety of LI (seems like it still early on, 0.2)

The story is cookie cutter, a great athelete that comes from small beginnings. It's well told so far and if this trend continues it will be a good story.

I like the dev. went for menu choice rather than qte, it gives it a more novel fell rather than reactionnary game. (so far)

The only minus for me, and it's not a really a minus just a bit confusing (maybe it's just me). Not all flashback, but some where introduced confusingly (imo). Some of these flashback are introduced perfectly either while sleeping or while seeing a trigger. Others seemed like they just happen for some unknown reason.

Keep up the good job.

I am really enjoying this AVN. It is very different than any other game I've played out there and that is refreshing in itself. I agree that it may not be everyone's cup of tea, but those of us with lesser political sensitivities will find this game to be a gem to enjoy. I can't wait for more. This game gives me Rocky Balboa vibes, but in American Football context!

There were a few typos here and there, but that wasn't a deal breaker for me. The dev will do well to iron out these simple errors in later updates. Sometimes it seems like too much text cramped into one frame. Other AVNs do a good job by largely keeping the writing short and to the point for each frame. This AVN can benefit from that example.

I've found the writing in this VN fantastic—one of the very best with regard to style and story. The graphics while to me are second to the story/writing, are themselves extremely top-tier. This is not the standar fuckfare VN, and it is not trying to be something it's not. It's obvious the dev took a story-first approach, lude scenes happen where they make sense. And they are good too!
Love Move The Chains. One of my new favorites.