Ren'Py - My Cuckqueen Girlfriend [v0.0.1] [HornyJailStudio]

I like the concept will let it cook for a while. personally i don't mind the AI art as long as its done well. of course since its an early release there isn't much to do but looking forward to the updates flushing the game out.

It is very short, yes. There are like 3 or 4 total scenes, and the entire game is maybe 10-15 minutes long so far. However, the dialogue is crisp, the models look great (idk what that guy is talking about, they don't "obviously" look like AI, they have a touch of AI-ness to them and there are AI artifacts in some of the animations, but overall it's MUCH cleaner than most AI slop), and as a beginning it looks extremely promising.

The Good - Stuff to look forward to:

• Models all look great. Not much else to say about this, overall they all look great, and not super "AI-like", at least not to me. The animations can have artifacts but that is discussed below.
• Dialogue is fantastic. The girlfriend and MC especially have actual personalities that shine through the dialogue, and a fun relationship outside of the cuckquean thing.
• Unique premise of cuckquean with consent. If you didn't find that appealing to begin with, you wouldn't be here, so it goes in "The Good". There's no NTR here, the GF is on board and turned on by everything going on. This is really the only game I know of personally that focuses on that as a premise, which is why I want it to succeed.
• So far that's kind of it, it's really short so there's not much to judge it on. It has real promise and I'll be watching it.

The Neutral - Wait-and-See if it improves or changes:

• Minor spelling errors. For instance, the title screen calls the game "My CuckQueEn Girlfriend" while all other file names and descriptions are the correct spelling of "My CuckqueAn Girlfriend". Either would work, the dev just needs to make sure he makes it obvious that he's calling the GF a queen and knows the proper way to spell it.
• AI Artifacts in animations. There's a kissing scene and the two lips "meld together" in classic AI fashion. It could still be fixed, and if not, the dev could still take care in the future to not let those kinds of mistakes pass through QA.
• Missing images. This is a simple fix, it looks like he just didn't include all of the images for the first iteration (or perhaps they aren't done yet). As the game gets more content and the dev does more QA, this issue will likely disappear.
• Very little content currently. I know I mentioned it before, but I want to get people prepared before they download and get angry and 1-star the game unfairly. It's VERY short right now. If that bothers you, just keep your eye on it, hopefully he does regular updates and a future iteration will let you sink your teeth into it.
• Unfinished ideas. You can make money, but can't spend it. After reaching the end of a girl's current path you can see them in a location and initiate conversation but then the "talk" option doesn't work (you can use arrow keys to activate it manually and it just says "Hello Me!", so it just hasn't been implemented). Give him time to cook.

The Bad - Things that will likely not be 'fixed' or changed.

• Time-based / location-based events. This was popular like a decade ago, and some devs still do it, but the community typically doesn't like it very much because it always ends up feeling tedious. CURRENTLY there's no hint system or anything for where the next events are located or when. So you just pass time and go to every location over and over until you discover the next event or girl or whatever. That said, so far you're able to do everything you'd want to do before passing time. You choose when to pass time (either by working or clicking the clock button) unless you're literally spending the night with a lady, which makes sense.
• Art is AI. I know this has been mentioned several times, and personally it doesn't bother me because it looks, for the most part, like care was taken in the creation. However, just having AI is going to piss a lot of people off by it's nature, worth a mention here. Also as mentioned above, you WILL notice the occasional AI-artifact that looks like what it should if you don't focus on it, but when you look closely it'll be a bit wonky, such as the aforementioned kissing scene.

Overall a great start, if short. I'll be keeping my eye on it.

This looks like a beginning of a really awesome game.

The sandbox element is a bit unnecessary, but if you really want to keep it, I'd advise you to increase the amount of dialogue a reader gets per click. Instead of making 2-3 short scenes, make one long scene, so that the reader doesn't have to click around the sandbox so much.

Now, the writing. (I will assume you're not using ai to write this, but even if you are, it's never too late to repent and begin writing it yourself) It's decent. I like how you skip the unnecessary parts (like the dialogue between mc and that first girl at the club). However, your writing does come off a bit pretentious, especially in actual dialogue between characters. I've read some lines and was like "there's no way an actual sane human being would talk that way" Remember, good dialogue has to have subtext and purpose. It has to feel realistic, while not being idle (which is a lot easier said than done). And most importantly, good dialogue must never be boring (again, easier said than done, but that's just how it is).

A good thing to do after writing dialogue is read it out loud (maybe get someone to read it with you) and evaluate whether or not it sounds organic.

Also, when you get better at it, you should write dialogue in such a way that it's possible to distinguish a character just by the way they speak. In real life, everyone has their own little mannerisms, phrases, words and so on that they favor, and so should fictional characters. It makes both the characters themselves and the interactions between them feel more real.

And another thing to keep in mind is that dialogue always has interruptions and hesitations (among other things).

But overall, seems like a great game. Keep going, and don't give up, dev!

I know this as an early release but got damn let this shit cook a bit in the oven a bit dev! The art Look totally noticeable as AI, as the eyes look weird and souless. The background is just a recognizable shape, but when you look at it too much it falls apart, Not to mention how many missing images. Wandering around aimlessly is a thing you are going to do a lot in this game, as there is no direction to go in, just a map. And I say this to the dev, why make it a sandbox? This game would be much better in a story direction if you must make it into a VN, since most slice of life sandboxes are boring as fuck. Speaking about boring things, the characters are also really boring. The story is bland and uninteresting, the only thing that it has going for it is the Cuckqueen aspect, but our girlfriend is the blandest 2d character ever as we don't even get a backstory about how she came to this kink. I would stay away for this game and do not get your hopes up as it will most likely be abandoned in 6 months. I see the writting on the wall.

Great premise. The game is only just starting so there isnt much content, but im sure with a little bit of development and improvements this can turn into a solid position. I hope the dev doesn't get demotivated by some downvotes of entitled snowflakes who expect finished and polished products never putting a shred of thought of how much work & money making any game takes

This is a mess the devs got alot of work for this to be in a playable state.
I usually steer away from the daily front page of AICG slop but this one was missing the standard NTR tag which got me curious. Still a type of NTR game but one where the GF incourages the MC to get laid instead of cucking the MC.

- The sandbox isn't fleshed out at all you click around and find the triggers
but after talking to the goth girl once she never talks to you again and I can't for the life of me find any trigger to progress her. The blone I thought was the same issue turns out you have to be in the kitchen for her event to trigger which nothing happens in the kitchen to bring you there.

-Images are missing from the first Chloe Hscene

-The "plot" happens before the start of the game. It was a nice bait and switch thinking the club girl was the start of a relationship but that leaves the character progression empty all we know is MCs GF gets horny and it was her idea. If it fleshed it out after with more than a few sentences maybe it would've felt better or maybe use a flashback.

-there is a job for money but money isn't used yet

overall this is a half baked bog standard aicg with no depth, story

Great concept, great artwork, great animated sex scenes! I can't wait to see where this goes, I definitely recommend it. The girls are hot, you're immediately drawn into the game from the start because there isn't any useless dialogue, it paces well, getting right to the point within the first 5-10 minutes. I really wanna see this game do well