This game is... Cute. That's pretty much the best word to use for it.
It feels like something a teenager would write. Both in subject matter and structure.
The premise is alright. It's a slice of life VN about characters working in a company and living in a shared house with a bit of crime mystery sprinkled on top, mostly related to the MC's background and goals. It's nothing special but it's a good premise for a harem game like this.
The MC is extremely cold almost to the level of psychotic, which while rather unique in the VN space makes all his dialogue very stilted and boring to read. Sometimes it can be fun but often it just makes it rather impossible to believe anyone would actually enjoy speaking with this guy, not to mention fall head over heels for him. Speaking of which..
The love interests range between meh and fine. None are especially unique and there's probably a bit too many of them but there's a problem thats consistant to all of them, which is that they all act and speak like actual teenagers. None of them feel especially adult which is a bit distracting for this kind of premise.
The general writing is one of the games main weaknesses. It's clear English is not the writer's native language but it goes much further then that.
The structure is extremely repetitive with scene transitions usually begin with a character saying "let's go to X" followed by the character exclaiming "we have arrived" afterwards. It feels very robotic.
I lost count of how many times a female character will save her self from an interaction by claiming you're her boyfriend, it's almost a meme at this point.
The writer often decides to skip describing things that happen in the scene with detail and instead result to something like *giggles* or *moan*. This makes conversations feel like two people roleplaying in a text chat which is awkward to read.
Pretty much all of the conflicts are black and white with 0 shades of gray and they're all resolved in a way a children's cartoon would resolve conflicts - the clear bad guy getting their absolute comeuppance while the good guys cheer. It's very childish
For me personally however the biggest problem lies with the sex scenes. The repeated use of the exact same stock Illusion animations barely scratches the surface of the problem.
The game appears almost ashamed of it's own pornographic premise. characters will never talk about sex, no hint and no innuendos, then suddenly the story gets horny and summons a scene out of nowhere. The story then gets a post nut clarity and out of embarrassment, will quickly wrap up with a character exclaiming "well seems like we're done... bye". It's a waste to relegate sex to these "designated sex scenes" instead of intigrating it as a part of the story.
The setup to the scenes often repeats it self with very little variety or creativity. From the top of my head I can think of 3 or 4 times the MC is woken up with it's rod stuffed in a characters throat, followed by the exact same interaction of explaining what a "morning wood" is.
Worst of all the scenes are just not sexy. There's no sound effects and they don't look better then the basic engine they're made in, so all that's left is the writing and like I said - it feels like two people role playing in a text chat. The game never describes the scene in a sexy way (or at all really) nor do the characters have any steamy input so the game relies entirely on the okay visuals to satisfy. That's just not what you're here for when you're reading a novel.
On a personal note I feel like Yui's conflict with her parents is utterly ridiculous. After meeting with her parents and seeing how absolutely lovely and kind they are to her it's entirely unbelievable how she reached her conclusions regarding them and makes her look like a massive brat, which relates to my earlier point about how they all feel like a bunch of teenagers.
Overall while I appear extremely negative I found the game to be.. sort of charming in a way? It's a bit better then the sum of it's parts and the mystery it builds around the MC's background is interesting enough to at least make me want to see where it's headed.
Sorry for my English, it's not my native language either.
It feels like something a teenager would write. Both in subject matter and structure.
The premise is alright. It's a slice of life VN about characters working in a company and living in a shared house with a bit of crime mystery sprinkled on top, mostly related to the MC's background and goals. It's nothing special but it's a good premise for a harem game like this.
The MC is extremely cold almost to the level of psychotic, which while rather unique in the VN space makes all his dialogue very stilted and boring to read. Sometimes it can be fun but often it just makes it rather impossible to believe anyone would actually enjoy speaking with this guy, not to mention fall head over heels for him. Speaking of which..
The love interests range between meh and fine. None are especially unique and there's probably a bit too many of them but there's a problem thats consistant to all of them, which is that they all act and speak like actual teenagers. None of them feel especially adult which is a bit distracting for this kind of premise.
The general writing is one of the games main weaknesses. It's clear English is not the writer's native language but it goes much further then that.
The structure is extremely repetitive with scene transitions usually begin with a character saying "let's go to X" followed by the character exclaiming "we have arrived" afterwards. It feels very robotic.
I lost count of how many times a female character will save her self from an interaction by claiming you're her boyfriend, it's almost a meme at this point.
The writer often decides to skip describing things that happen in the scene with detail and instead result to something like *giggles* or *moan*. This makes conversations feel like two people roleplaying in a text chat which is awkward to read.
Pretty much all of the conflicts are black and white with 0 shades of gray and they're all resolved in a way a children's cartoon would resolve conflicts - the clear bad guy getting their absolute comeuppance while the good guys cheer. It's very childish
For me personally however the biggest problem lies with the sex scenes. The repeated use of the exact same stock Illusion animations barely scratches the surface of the problem.
The game appears almost ashamed of it's own pornographic premise. characters will never talk about sex, no hint and no innuendos, then suddenly the story gets horny and summons a scene out of nowhere. The story then gets a post nut clarity and out of embarrassment, will quickly wrap up with a character exclaiming "well seems like we're done... bye". It's a waste to relegate sex to these "designated sex scenes" instead of intigrating it as a part of the story.
The setup to the scenes often repeats it self with very little variety or creativity. From the top of my head I can think of 3 or 4 times the MC is woken up with it's rod stuffed in a characters throat, followed by the exact same interaction of explaining what a "morning wood" is.
Worst of all the scenes are just not sexy. There's no sound effects and they don't look better then the basic engine they're made in, so all that's left is the writing and like I said - it feels like two people role playing in a text chat. The game never describes the scene in a sexy way (or at all really) nor do the characters have any steamy input so the game relies entirely on the okay visuals to satisfy. That's just not what you're here for when you're reading a novel.
On a personal note I feel like Yui's conflict with her parents is utterly ridiculous. After meeting with her parents and seeing how absolutely lovely and kind they are to her it's entirely unbelievable how she reached her conclusions regarding them and makes her look like a massive brat, which relates to my earlier point about how they all feel like a bunch of teenagers.
Overall while I appear extremely negative I found the game to be.. sort of charming in a way? It's a bit better then the sum of it's parts and the mystery it builds around the MC's background is interesting enough to at least make me want to see where it's headed.
Sorry for my English, it's not my native language either.