VN - Ren'Py - Naomi: Breaking the Queen Bee [Act 2 P1] [Saf-Tea]

Naomi: Breaking the Queen Bee - Act 2 Part 1

I like to believe I'm the target audience. I turn every degenerate toggle on with excitement. This VN nails the fundamentals but fumbles the main attraction, so it cancels into a 3/5.

Production Quality - Solid

The presentation is well directed. Creative use of CG transitions, good camera work and angles. Feels like the creator thought through each scene visually as a whole. No awkward standing around talking. No one-off CGs that are beautiful but stiff and disconnected from what's happening on screen. The visual language is more mature than most VNs here.

Pacing is tight too. Nothing dragged out too long. Information and backstory drip fed at a consistent pace. No complaints.

The Male MC - Does His Job

Seems to have an interesting past and goes straight to the point. No fluff, not a simp, no unnecessarily long writer self-insert monologue. He serves the role I expect from this genre perfectly. No cringe, does the job, doesn't take too much spotlight from the girls. The balance is right.

The Problem - Naomi

Here's where it falls apart. I expect a lot from her since she IS the title and main focus. She IS the VN. But she's not very interesting and doesn't have high synergy with this genre.

Character Writing: She's a dumb horny bitch just like the appearance suggests, and right now there isn't more to it. Not end-of-the-world boring, but would I keep up with this multi-year VN project just for her? Nah. She gets horny at lightning speed, and after every training she just shrugs it off like a dumb bitch would. It's not satisfying to see and doesn't feel like we're making progress.

For this kind of single-girl focus VN I want to fight a multi-phase Dark Souls boss with twists and turns. Instead I got a 1HP mob that dies from a touch, drops trash loot, and respawns instantly like nothing happened.

Visual Design: Also not my taste at all. Even her friend looks more like protag material. Naomi's design seems too noisy? This might not be a straight con, just not my thing.

Chemistry Issues: Her synergy with the male MC isn't particularly great either. With such an interesting male MC I often ask myself - is this the most interesting story from his life? Would the most memorable girl he encounters be Naomi? If not, why are we following this story instead?

Bottom Line

Strong fundamentals attached to a weak protagonist. This VN would be perfect for me if we switched out Naomi.

Very well written visual novel with top tier animations. This game focus on psychology, training, gradual corruption. One thing I particularly like about this game is Naomi's attitude. She does bite and acted like a bitch throughout the whole story. If you dont like filthy content such as SCAT, then you should probably turn the filter off.

Take a look at the LI and if she floats your boat, then this is a pretty good download. The dialogue is great, the story is somewhat believable, and the animations are good. The LI was not attractive for me, so I really didn't stick with it.

Really glad this game includes fart and scat content. Looking forward to another scenes like that in the new updates, though i understand it's not everyone's cup of tea. Either way, you do you, my guy, keep up the amazing work!

TBH, at this point (Act 2, Pt1), my only fear is that the dev loses interest in the development and leaves this project before completion... because it is fucking great!
There are *very few* games here (good or otherwise) with the same setup/plot and a "completed" tag.
The official Overview on the top of this thread is a good description of what we have here. What it is not obvious is that the execution is really top notch, and well worth the download.
Again: my only fear is to invest time and "hope" on this VN just to see it abandoned. Hopefully this will not be the case. Fingers crossed!

Played Act 2 Part 1 – Kinetic novel about a teacher getting fed up with one of his problem students and giving her an attitude adjustment by imprisoning her in his sex dungeon and using a mix of sexual torture, magic drugs and psychology to turn her into a submissive slut.

Well written, dialogue is good, characters hot and the story is simple but interesting enough.
I especially like how Naomi actually resists before she succumbs and how she gets some of her fire back before the next session – it makes her giving in all the sweeter because of the struggle.
I also like how it is more reluctance rather than hard noncon – Naomi hates it, but she does enjoy the pleasure and is not completely miserable from trauma.

Has really hot and inventive bdsm content with a promise of more. So far we have humiliation, bondage, device bondage, light pet play, blowjob training, a really hot predicament scene and really well done slave training.
Also has some (harmless) scat and urination content that can be turned off.

Gonna watch it with great interest. It’s pretty promising and one of the better bdsm games we got lately.

Honestly didn't expect much but due to the ratings, I've tried it. And wow it slaps (in the good way) ! The story is intriguing and the slow buildup is well done.
It will take surely a year to see the game completed but every update should be interesting to see !

Corruption stories like this are my favorite; I was completely engrossed in the game from the moment I started it until I finished act 2. I love Naomi's character design, and her personality is perfection for a story like this. The scenes are so enticing and unlike anything I've seen in other VNs.

My only suggestion would be to add a textbox opacity slider, as I had a little trouble reading at some points.

Your work is truly incredible, and I can't wait for the release of the next act!

Played till: ACT 2 Part 1

- The story and scenes are unique and quite different from other VNs
- Ambience and the music are on point, really great work, gives it a very grim but elevated and thrilling atmosphere.
- For the story alone you deserve 5 stars, i really enjoy playing games which focuses on exploiting human behavior and psychology
- the extreme fetishes and scenes used are very interesting and hot.

Personally i really enjoyed the quiz sections of the game, the protagonist hints about the manipulation techniques he uses on naomi, it works really well.
some minor drawbacks, the lighting could use a little tweak, and the english text contain some errors. But its nothing significant , it doesnt break the immersion or experience.

Really awesome work dev, Please don't abandon this project. its really rare to find games such as yours.

Really really good dialogue and the scenes are fantastic. One of the best games I've played on the site and having the option to turn off the more controversial content is greatly appreciated. Extremely excited to see where it goes from here.

Version Played: Act 2 P1

I really liked this game, and feel it deserves 5 stars even though I was a little lukewarm on it when I finished this version.

The writing (world building, story and writing) are all very well done. The story progression moves along at a very good pace - not too fast or slow.

Given all that, I was little surprised that I didn't have a more positive vibe from this game when I finished. I think it comes down to a couple very subjective things:
* I don't find Naomi all that attractive. For me, her face is too stylized, and her chest doesn't look right - I guess too large and perky makes them seem very unnatural? She's certainly not bad looking, but I find her the least attractive of the girls in this game (my favorite is Candie).
* This is a minor nit, but I almost skipped this game because of the scat tag. I really like that we can turn that content off at the beginning, but I could do without being reminded that that content is about to be skipped. Maybe change that notification text to something more general, like "Some Extreme Content" is turned off? Again, that's pretty minor and very subjective on my part.

Insanely good writing for corruption. If you're at all into corruption, humiliation, or mind-break then this will likely be something you thoroughly enjoy. There is some watersports and scat content which I can't comment on because I don't enjoy those subjects, and so I skipped them, but I think that's a feather in the games hat as they're entirely optional. Try it out, I think you'll like it quite a bit.

My true score would be 4.75 / 5, but I see the potential for it to be a true 5.
I think the premise is there, and the way how some science are used to explain why certain psychological changes are happening is really interesting.
If you did take a step back, you would still notice that everything is accelerated. But, we are playing a porn game, and as a porn game pacing, it's great.
The game is still quite new and I can't wait for the next update

A genuinely compelling story of brat training. Naomi is great as a main character and focus, with valley-girl speech and constant defiance, and her trainer is thoughtful, educated, and cruel - all delightful ingredients to a tale that is still in progress. Though this isn't terribly long at time of post, what is there is extremely high-quality and deserves a look.

It's sadistic, psychotic, disturbing, satisfying, beautiful and downright sexy. All the the more disturbing tags like scat and urination are optional so any fan of maledom or training should try this game. MC is intelligent, driven, attractive and worthy of respect while Naomi is the perfect brat to "teach".

Incredible start. Doesn’t waste too much time setting up the story and gets right to the action. Dialogue is well done and enjoyable to read. Scenes are very creative. Animations are great. Just all around fantastic, can’t wait to see more.

People should make more games like this in the future, would pay money for a game like this, especially if it was voiced in english. Great story and great scenes. The only game I will probably ever rate on this website because this is how much I like this game and it deserves 5 stars.

Wish more western adult games were like this one.

This is everything You need from a corruption game. Breaking down a bratty bitch is one of the best joys in the world, plus she's an airheaded bimbo so that's a massive bonus. So amazing story, with amazing animations, models, and renders with plenty of dialogue and not too slowburn to make it boring or only foreplay. What's not to love here?

Outstanding!!! Can't wait for the next update. Sure, hope you include more of his hot ass assistant. Thanks again for making piss and scat avoidable can't stand both. Just my preference to each his own. Keep up the good work.

The corruption is actually very good. All the more obscene content are optional, and they will notify you when a scene of those content are kill. The best part is that the dev actually read into science (or pseudo science) to write this AVN.